Chicago Police

Some suggestions. The author always uses long paragraphs of text arranged together, which makes reading tiring. The plot is very good, but this point is not very comfortable. Too long paragraphs of text will make people bored when reading. This has been studied in psychology.

Well written so far. But you can add some daily life. Cases happen frequently and solving them will be tiring.

The only one who is extraordinary? There won't be anything surreal, right?

Just write it, sincerely it's like a child writing it

In Chicago, wouldn't it be possible to write about Shameless? 🤣 Brother Lip's girlfriend must be named Karen at first? Very beautiful

In a chaotic background, a walking hormone actually lacks sex, bad review

Will you write about Chicago P. D.? Hank is so miserable. Everyone who really understands him is indifferent. Lonely old Hank silently fights against this fucked up world.

Didn't you say that you want to write me into a book and let me be swept away by AK and dance in the street? I will reward you with 666 points, write to me! 🤣🤣🤣

The writing is quite good, but there is basically no sense of daily life. I suggest adding a few more points so that the characters can be more three-dimensional.

It's too messy. I've reached chapter 11. There are too many characters. It's too messy to read. There are several lines running together, including the police station, gangsters, business, and life. Oh my God.

To be honest, I don't know if it's a punctuation problem, I felt dizzy.

I'm addicted to tickets! I just wanted to get addicted to tickets! What's wrong with me!

If you have potential, please place a mark first and give me your recommendation votes. I hope you will continue to work hard 🙂🙂

And you, my friend, are the real hero🙂

If the protagonist were to be a capitalist, he wouldn't be so tired.