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The creative ideas are average, and some plots are logically clear, but the heroine is a poisonous point. If you can't write the emotional line, don't write it blindly. It could have become food. It's a pity. If it can be overhauled and the heroine is killed, the score will not be bad.

The idea is good, but if you are not good at relationships, you don't have to write about them, otherwise it will only lead to failure and dissuasion. The vast majority of readers are not here for the emotional line, but just want to see the protagonist rely on various black technologies to surpass the pretentiousness of the novel. It is really uncomfortable and embarrassing for a female protagonist to watch.

While it's not too much yet, I suggest that the protagonist revise it. The routine is too old, and there are real problems with the plot. It's not that we need to make major changes. We only wrote this much in total. It would be easier to change it. Otherwise, a good book will be really ruined.

After reading it, update quickly! After this book puts aside the mentally retarded plots on Earth, the rest of the content is really interesting, but it would be better if the heroine who has no idea of ​​her use is deleted!

The writing is quite good, I want to know what the fourth level civilization is like! Although the routine is quite old, the author can use the routine in a very novel and creative way. Well, the heroine is indeed a bit poisonous. She could have fewer scenes. Don't introduce so many heroines. It feels like the pig's feet are no longer pig's feet without the heroine. If there are, there could be fewer scenes. I feel that the author's imagination is very good, and it looks very novel. If you are an old bookworm, what you read is novel and refreshing, and it doesn't require so much brainpower.

After the protagonist gets the cheat, the first thing he does is save the beauty, and then he has sex with the woman! But a woman is useless and still a vase. I've read a lot of novels where the destruction is on women. Why can't I live without a woman? If you don't know how to write about women, don't write about it. After all, the main purpose of reading novels is to watch the protagonist get cheats to dominate and grow up. It is understandable that you say that effective women are the main protagonists. But women who serve no purpose only make readers sick. What a dominating man. The first time I fall in love with a woman is still a useless woman.

Rice mixed with shi. 😵 Get rid of the inexplicable heroine. It's too disgusting. If you can't write about emotions, don't write about it 😰

The first four chapters were well written without any poisonous points, but then a lot of poisonous points appeared in the fifth chapter.

... How can you pretend to save people when you are so good at it? It just brought this book down several levels...

Although this is just a theme of old wine in new bottles, the author's expression method or the world he depicts is still eye-catching and worth looking forward to. However, the only flaw in the content at present is the existence of the heroine. Although it is unexpected and too far-fetched, , is completely poisonous, and for the social and humanities, in addition to writing about cultivating immortals, the protagonist can also write about martial arts, wizards, magic, etc., And can also imaginatively describe the characteristics of various civilizations and societies. After all, it seems that what exists on this paper platform is just scientific and technological civilization.

The idea is good, but the author has ideological problems, and the plot he wrote is poisonous and forced to show off. It's too embarrassing. I have been persuaded to quit, so I hope anyone who comes after me will read it with caution!

It feels like the author is still in school and has not graduated, and has not experienced society.

It would have been much better without that woman. Author, what were your thoughts when you wrote those chapters and in what state did you write them? ? ? Extremely lacking in love?

The subject matter is good and the imagination is quite big, but the writing is too poor and the plot is basically forced.

I don't know what to write about, but Mr. Liu, can you draw dozens of pictures? If there is an artificial intelligence and there is evidence, why not just send it in anonymously? The word count has been watered down so much intermittently, and it has become so complicated.

Hand-typing binary code... The author can type two hundred lines of binary code without making mistakes. I printed out this book and ate it.

If you were attracted by the title of the book, you don't have to read it. After writing a few chapters, you will deviate from the title. The kind that are completely opposite to each other

You can still watch it even if you skip the plot related to the heroine.

I have just read Chapter 28. From saving a woman to doing something to a few big families, I started to get addicted.

The idea is quite good, but the language and plot are childish, and I would boldly guess that the author is underage! No social experience

The heroine and her power are really a poisonous point, and the creativity in the later period is good.

It's quite a whimsical idea, but it jumps so much that it suddenly travels through time and space. It doesn't feel like it was written by the same person.

The plot on Earth in the early stages was a bit of a no-brainer, but after leaving the Earth, the story unfolds. It's very imaginative, suspenseful, and very enjoyable. It can be seen that the author is writing with heart, his writing power is improving by leaps and bounds, and he is looking forward to it.