My Name Is Goudan

At present, it seems that it is indeed very enjoyable. It is a joy-oriented article. It is quite good to read when you are free and relaxed. There are also some shortcomings. For example, the content does not have deep memory points, but it is very happy. It is very easy to read Lezi articles 🙂 Summary: Lezi articles, Lezi people, Lezi articles are full of Lezi people, Lezi people love to read Lezi articles.

Such a lovely writing style, not rude or obscene. It won my heart very much.

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The atmosphere here is so relaxed, and everyone's updates are quite few, so I have to go with the flow!

This is not a question of whether or not to die, this is about you abusing the master. There was a book seven or eight years ago, and the author asked him to be gay at the end. Looking back now, except for the disgusting ending, at least there were no major problems. Your joy, sd, pseudo-invincible writing style, suddenly came to this, if I didn't want to see it, I would have left without commenting. It's best to change it. Even if you are frustrated, don't continue to abuse it through the chapter. There is a twist at the end of the chapter.

Isn't it normal for you to be scolded? , The reader's idea of ​​Guo's sudden change of painting style has been fixed through the previous pages, and the content of the change of painting style is not rigorous enough.

I think you have the potential to be a great person. As long as there are more, I guarantee that you will be at least high-quality.

Some suggestions for the author. At the end of the first chapter, the author feels that you have laid the groundwork, but it is obvious that no one felt it, so it seemed very abrupt and uncomfortable. Secondly, I thought that everyone was dead, which aroused everyone's emotions, but in the end it was an illusion. You have mobilized everyone. Emotions fall into the void, as uncomfortable as punching empty. In fact, it doesn't matter if the person really dies. It's also good to shape the growth of the protagonist along this route. But since you didn't intend for people to die in the first place, you should write it in a different way. For example, it's just a serious injury, a vegetative state, and there's no way to save it for the time being. Once the horn is strong, there will be things like that. To be honest, hallucination is not a good choice. If you want to write about time travel, it is better than hallucination. If you say it is hallucination, I think it is like the finale saying "it's just a dream of a dying person." In terms of expressiveness, your writing feels too rushed, and it feels like you are forced to read ten lines at a time. Most of the text is about character dialogue and behavior, and there is almost no description of the scene and atmosphere. Find a way to enrich the text, don't be obsessed with imagination but lay down the basic skills, I think you will write better. A little personal advice, I hope the author writes better and better

I just finished reading it, it's pretty good, but I still have to mention that compared to white silk, black silk is king.

Suddenly I realized that everyone only had first names and no surnames. I felt that the author must have dug a hole.

The writing style is clean, and it tastes like winter dates, slightly sweet but not greasy, with a refreshing fragrance. I'm really lucky to find this good jujube in this big box of rotten fruits.

The author is a woman, the writing is quite healing.

It's a bit of an act of intelligence or deliberateness. Let's not talk about anything else. The teleportation talisman used by the protagonist is just the product of a certain big force. It can be regarded as a high-end customization at most, but it can't be considered as a secret. If the Emperor wants to pursue it, shouldn't he pursue it casually? Even without the Emperor, forces at the same level will definitely think about countermeasures and tracking. Especially since the Qi Luck cultivation system is still there after using it, it doesn't mean it hasn't gone far.

It's really interesting Why are my grades so bad?

I thought you were a eunuch, but it turns out you went to see your mother.

The book is okay, but I am concerned about the final remarks of the first chapter. Just one sentence. Don't underestimate Shuangwen! !

I think it's fine to go here, and it would be even more impolite to go any further. After all, it is already a complete story.

It's a very interesting and enjoyable article, with lots of ideas and interesting ideas. I'm worried that the ideas behind it won't be enough.

WC, you are actually alive again! ?

The result is not over yet, the body is still being whipped.