The Heavens: Rise from Under One Man

How can I put it this way? You are a person who has traveled through two worlds. Why are you so irresponsible and impetuous?

How to say it? The novel is okay, but the plot always feels a bit awkward and a bit abusive to the protagonist. Moreover, I have been doing things like a child for three lifetimes, so what I learned in the second lifetime is of no use? Is it because you haven't figured out how to achieve perfection in your second life? Since this is a world of cultivating immortals, can the techniques be practiced in the third life as well? So far, I haven't seen the advantages of cultivating for three lifetimes. Still, I can't beat him alone?

The more I look at it, the more awkward it becomes, and I don't know why.

It's too dramatic to suddenly mention the prehistoric times. Expanding the world view can't be so high at once!

How to say it? Forcibly participating in things that are not necessary for the sake of the plot

It feels like the wave is a bit big. Gather and collect, Taoists do it as they please, but they can also be quiet and keep their bodies. I feel like I could write more about the progress of my travels, visit temples on every mountain, and be less aggressive. It would be better. There is also Biyou Village. I think many people are willing to go there, but they all overlook that it is Boss Qu's house. He always uses other people's houses as brothels, where he can come and leave whenever he wants. Don't forget, someone later staged a suicide attack and managed to avoid sending Lao Zhang away. I don't know how you will write this follow-up

Author boss, single heroine or harem?

I haven't started reading it yet, but I looked at the introduction and I don't know if it's a homophony or a typo. It should be "refined in one furnace".

It feels more interesting if the protagonist is called Wang Xiaoming

Give it a try and come back to it when I write about the Wilderness Chronicles 😆

I really can't understand what you wrote. What do you mean by what you wrote?

Let's start to understand the wonderful method of cultivation together from one person. The article under one person is very long and can be consumed with confidence. Under One Person: Wang Xiaoping used yin and yang to enter the Tao, refine weapons, and refine elixirs. Follow the footsteps left by the sages. The World of Yanfu: Wang Xiaoping will use money to smash you to death The follow-up chapters include Perfection, Wild Desolation, Primordial Desolation and Devouring.

Nowadays, who the hell likes to watch comedy streams? It's not logical at all. What nonsense are you doing there? Do you think you are Zhou Xingxing?

Six Ding Shenhuo? The one of Laojun?

Everyone's opinions are very good, and I will make changes immediately. However, today I plan to adjust the entire book and delete some problematic parts. The unsatisfactory results in the first round were due to my previous problem. I didn't have an outline, I wrote wherever I thought, and I didn't write out what I thought. Someone said before that my writing was trivial, which is indeed true. Therefore, if I am in retreat today, I won't be able to leave the retreat if I don't modify it.

The writing style of a good author is indeed worthy of this score.