A Journey Starting from a Perfect World

I almost got poisoned, but luckily I have high poison resistance.

Author: I want to see you steal Shi Hao's wife

This book is adapted from the original work. It will experience many worlds in the future. It is the same as the landing place of the protagonist in a certain book. The subsequent plot is also completely different. Plagiarism will not be allowed. If you like this book, you can stay. If you don't like it, you are welcome to criticize me. As long as what you say is right, I will correct it.

I couldn't read it. I didn't know what it was about. I skipped through the whole process and felt like I couldn't get into it. Especially after the battle was over, the first 20 chapters of a novel. At least five or six chapters were purely about Xiao Yan. In the original plot, the protagonist didn't even participate in it. He didn't even go there to watch it. With this content, you can actually write five or six chapters in a row. If in your book, Xiao Yan is an important supporting role, will appear frequently in the future, and has an important role or significance to the protagonist, then forget it. But judging from your pace, it is clearly a fast time travel, and the strength has jumped significantly, about 30 chapters We are about to face the fighting saints of the eight ancient tribes. Xiao Yan is probably still in the Warcraft Mountains and has not yet come out. Forget about the meaningless content. Then Yun Yun, the author should have extreme persecution of her, but since you have written like this, do you dare to write more and be more detailed? I don't care what your stance is. , But you have to know that readers who can read such content will be interested in what content, so I just write it down in detail. It really doesn't work. I can write about my feelings afterwards. Yun Yun's performance can be anything, and it can also satisfy some bt ideas. Of course, my personal feeling is not very reasonable. If I remember correctly, Yun Yun seems to have a close-fitting inner armor.

Stop robbing the little milk baby's woman. The little milk baby is so miserable. You want to hurt such a person? To be honest, of the characters in Hong Maodong's works, I think only the little milk baby is the most distressing. He is burdened with too much, too heavy, and too lonely, so let's let his woman go!

It's too fast, a lot of things come out suddenly without going into detail, it feels like I'm reading an outline, it's too dry

The paragraphs are too long and look densely packed. There can be more paragraphs and they are well-proportioned to capture the information points better. There is a lot of nonsense, please be more concise. It is not a plot where the protagonist appears. Unless it is an important main line of information, do not write it in detail. Just give a brief summary in the third person.

Don't imitate Lin Yang next door, who is unfinished

It's really fun, An Lanniang has fun

What are you waiting for if you don't explode

Why is the whole thing in such a mess? And a lot of the content is really incomprehensible. The author wouldn't send a draft, right? How should I put it, it has the feeling of a fine novel, but not much.

The Goddess of the Shepherd is a very special world, with the resistance of a group of reformers, some of them talented and ruthless, and they are constantly resisting the darkness. It is very interesting. I want to interact more with this protagonist.

It doesn't work anymore. I was poisoned in just three chapters. My poison resistance is not low either. I'll wipe it.

Xiao Yan has become Xiao Yan, Lu Mingfei has become Lu Mingfei, and Shi Hao... Then, why not turn An Lan into a girl, just like the image in the picture of An Lan's flirtatious words, she can also be a little heroine. There will be no shortage of pretentious words in the future, forcing La Man

Does the author of No Man or Ghost have any hobbies?

I want to see the Eight Elders of Soul Dou and Beidou Immortal Lord falling in love

What did Yun Yun do? She was tortured like this and what else?

It's well written. There is a shortage of books. I haven't found a book that I can read in a long time.

I read the comments and they said it is extremely poisonous. Can you see if it can poison me?

The artistic conception of the starting point is too high, the secrets of the world, avenues, laws, etc. Are too big a pitfall.

The writing is good, but the starting point is too high at the beginning, and it becomes difficult to write later. There must be a clear main line, from low to high, and the names of the protagonist and supporting characters cannot be changed. This book will be written first. I hope that the next one will start from the bottom and the protagonist will gradually upgrade.

Steal No. 10 From No. 10'S wife? Wang Defa?

The latest thing is written like this, and I'm convinced

I hope the next one will be more exciting and have a clear main line. The protagonist and supporting roles should be clearly prioritized and should not be changed back and forth.

Eye-searing😢

How many female protagonists have robbed Shi Hao's wife?

What is the realm above the golden elixir?