Comprehensive Manga: the Journey Starting from Sword Art Online

I really can't figure it out. I, the author, said that I have written everything clearly. Why do some people come back and say that I am... Absolutely awesome

Running account It is more of a narrative than a story

Is this playing a game? ? When I saw the second chapter 🤔 this book was written like this, I felt very fascinated! There is no sense of graphics. It would be more interesting for me to play a wolf and get beaten up by Isshin a hundred times

The beginning was okay, but after more than 20 chapters, it started to get poisonous! In the first world, the relationship between the protagonist and Asuna is just one step away. The transition can be completely natural, and there is no need to set up a brainless villain to intervene. What? Is this paper-thin relationship difficult to overcome without help? In the original novel, Kirito and Asuna didn't have a boring third party intervening. In this novel, their relationship is better and their relationship is closer. They actually need a villain to break through the relationship and get together. Why don't you film a Qiong Yao drama here? Does a relationship have to go through twists and turns to be considered complete? Besides, didn't you bring back the main world in the end? So what's the point of writing so many emotional dramas? The relationship is so deep that we live and die together. What should we do if girls from other worlds express their love for the protagonist in the future? Is it betrayal or fraternity?

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Not bad, he must be a newcomer. But many details were not written well. For example, Heathcliff's Holy Shield is a unique skill, and he is also assisted by AI. If Kirito hadn't surpassed Heathcliff's set value, he would actually have been unable to win. Therefore, the first world is not interesting at all, and there is absolutely no point about the hero being awesome. The second world, just because the energy is different, how can it be associated with eternal life? And that bird is translated as raven. The messenger bird was too perfunctory. When you see this word, you can probably imagine that the author didn't remember the name or couldn't write the word when he wrote it. In the end, I just added a random noun, and it probably means the same thing anyway. Finally, don't give random names to moves. Wu Kai is equipped with a giant arm of vampire magic. To be honest, when you see the messenger bird, you probably know that the author has forgotten the name of the move before.

How to say it? I don't care about the character settings of the original characters at all. I'm just a fan and can write whatever I want. Although Grandpa Tong is very affectionate, he still loves Asuna from the beginning to the end. He just opened a harem for you 🙂

Can anyone read the first chapter? Haha, purely for my own entertainment

Who is the protagonist? Why do I feel that Kirito is the protagonist? I already have two girlfriends, and I'm happier than in the original novel.

The author did not write the ability of Goldfinger. The second main ability was not shown at all. Except for snatching a heroine and daughter, nothing else was changed. He did not write the protagonist's style. It was impossible to write the protagonist as a supporting role.

Sword itself is just a case of pretending to be a supporting actress. If you ignore these, there really will be nothing left to watch. So, I don't know what I watched.

After reading 56 chapters, I feel that there is no special feature. When there are so many comprehensive comics, only those who have just read the novel can read them for a long time and have certain addictive points. Also, they are all anime that everyone has watched and have no special features. I think it is meaningless. If I don't write about some popular but not many comics, such as Blood Blockade Battlefront, Speedrun Edition, Gintama Main Story, and Mob Psycho 100, at least I will have some loyal readers. If you write too much, you will be incompetent and just g.

If you want to do well as a fan author, you must have a comprehensive understanding of the material you write about, and this understanding will also be helpful in subsequent creations. For example, is there an underlying reason why the character and plot of the original work developed like this? What changes will it make if I change where I start and add new characters? What is the process of change? How can the character's personality be appropriately transitioned into a direction that is beneficial to the protagonist of your novel? If you don't understand these things, someone will definitely criticize you.

Don't forget what the main plot is for

"Not surprising" in the introduction → "Inadvertently" by an old salted fish who likes to catch insects every day

The writing is okay It's a bit like a running account But when I read it, I always feel that there are some shortcomings.

Like the synopsis, there is very little dialogue.

A female protagonist would be nice. Not too much

Let me see if there are any bodies 🙂