Falling Moon

It's well written. There's no nonsense at the beginning. It goes straight to the point and starts telling the story. It's pretty good. The language is fluent, the details of some spell casting are well described, and the technique is very fresh. Applause👏The storyline is also very novel, good, and awesome! Come on, set a small goal first and update to 100,000 words! 😁😁😁

Sorry everyone, because I am a junior high school student, so my academic workload is relatively heavy. In addition, my mother is at home recently and I am not allowed to write novels, so I haven't updated it in the past few days. I'm sorry!

I came here through comments, not a robot. After reading it, I have summarized some suggestions. I hope it can be helpful to you 1. Sister, you haven't written an introduction. Introduction is actually very important. A good introduction can arouse the interest of readers. It is best to use a contradictory way in the introduction, which can attract readers very well 2 . The content is okay and the plot is good, but the number of words in a chapter is too few. You can increase it appropriately, for example, a chapter of 2,000 words, divided into more paragraphs, which will make it more comfortable to read 3. There is nothing wrong with the writing. After all, in the first book, everyone needs to continue to explore and practice, so don't worry too much about the writing. 4. Come on together! Already added to bookshelf!

If he has any opinions, he can put them forward in the book club. You are welcome to guide me.

Let me explain to you the reason why I stopped updating. Some readers asked me before. It was either because I had no inspiration or because I didn't write on purpose. It was because my phone might have been dropped due to some reasons at home. It took a while to repair the phone, and the manuscript has been stored for a long time. I just didn't copy it to my mobile phone. I will strive for stable updates in the future. After all, I am about to take the high school entrance examination, and I still want to focus on studying.

Flowing Moon🤭 (I just learned it, I will learn more in the future, I will draw it for you again😊)

It's the end of the year, let me make a summary. In short, thank you all for your support. Although my results are not very good, I will continue to persevere. After all, even if there is only one person, I cannot let down others. I came to the starting point this year. I have only been here for more than ten days, but I am still very happy. After all, writing on a mobile phone is much more enjoyable than writing on paper. My hands no longer hurt. I have made many like-minded friends. I am still very happy about it! I will definitely update the article well, repay everyone well, and strive to have more readers. Finally, I wish you all a happy day and hope all your wishes come true. I also hope that everyone will pay more attention to my articles.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                      . Let's work hard together!

@Everyone, I have something to do tomorrow, so I will temporarily stop updating.

Author, I came here from Baidu.

Happy Year of the Rabbit to everyone! Thank you all for your support this year.

Excuse me, does anyone know how to invest? In my book, someone wanted to invest, but he said there was no entrance to the investment group.

Everyone, please wait for me to come back. I'll finish it first and update it when I have time. I'm afraid the work will be removed from the shelves.

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Is that good? Let's check in first so we don't have time to catch up! (I have exams at the end of March and have been quite busy recently)

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Come on! Study hard and write when you have time

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I read about the first eight chapters. To be honest, it is very mature, both in terms of language expression and writing and layout. There's nothing more to say about this. There is no problem with the most basic things. The rest of the differences between you and the great masters are nothing more than your imagination, persistence, number of updates, and fan base. These are earned through accumulation over time, or krypton gold. In general, I don't have any good suggestions (on the premise of maintaining the standard in the following articles) Come on! Keep at it, write a complete story first, enrich the branches and details, and finish it after at least 500,000 words (the masters say 1 million words, but I only stick to 50). You will be very impressed. By then, whether you start a new book or overturn and rewrite it, you will feel much more comfortable with the overall rhythm.