My Experience in Arknights

The third golden chapter is not very attractive (I don't know if it is slow-burning). You can pay attention to segmenting the dialogue (up to five or six lines) and adding facial expressions or actions (you can also explain motivations or something, it can be less blunt, and it can also be used to make up the word count) (only personal opinion)

So pretty!

The emotional scenes are still a bit too stiff, and the relationship between the male and female protagonists feels a bit too sudden.

First again...

Weekly is more scary😅

I feel that the previous plot is a bit strange. A foreigner defeated a famous blacksmith, and then the other party gave his daughter to a young man whom he had known for a day or two. The logic is not very smooth. I hope it can be changed (even if you win the other party with excellent blacksmithing skills, it is unlikely to directly urge the protagonist to call them parents) (it is like the blacksmith shop owner fell in love with the protagonist at first sight)