Shushan Exchange Student at Hogwarts

I regret that I should have read the book review first and quit after reading Chapter 34. The author may have never seriously considered the readers' opinions. In the plot, the protagonist repeatedly takes advantage of Dumbledore. In addition, in terms of settings, the sword cultivators are among the best. With their excellent talents, they were even sent as exchange students. However, it turned out that their master couldn't control the sword. It was just like that when dealing with a few monsters in the water. To deal with an Auror, he had to use the master's life-saving seal, but he didn't throw it out. Author, is our butt a little crooked? If we worship foreigners and favor foreigners, we won't use our traditional culture and throw it outside to be deflated, right? It's a bit embarrassing for the ancestors. As for whether it is the protagonist who is embarrassed or the author who is embarrassed, I think all readers know it well.

This is not a criticism, just some suggestions. How to say it, I won't talk about the plot. There have been many comments in the book review area, so I will talk about the characters. It's okay for you, the author, to be more original in a fan book like this, but you can't make the characters deviate too much from the original characters (of course it may be a problem with my own perception). There are many events in the article that feel unreasonable or inconsistent with the characters in the original work. For example, just now At the beginning, Lucius may not be a good person, but in the original work, he is not a flat negative character. Even if he is a purely negative character, he is not stupid enough to directly attack the students in Hogwarts and even use the death curse. When I read it, I felt that he was turned into a complete villain and treated with intelligence. The same is true for Draco. He is just a naughty child whose brain has been washed by the pure-blood concept. He is not a good student or a good boy, but he is not as bad as described in your book. After Chen Zhuo saved Malfoy, I felt that maybe he would not admit that Chen Zhuo saved him because of the arrogance in his heart, and would say some words to save his respect, but at least he would not hold a grudge against Chen Zhuo. He should still be able to distinguish such big things from right and wrong. And there is Oak, who is such a brainless villain from the first appearance. , The protagonist must be labeled as soon as they meet. It stands to reason that if Chen Zhuo really has something to do, he should be tried, and he should follow the procedures. At least he should not take action forcefully at Hogwarts. Aurors are only law enforcement agencies, not a judicial agency. If there is evidence, Chen Zhuo can be directly taken to the Ministry of Magic to directly appeal and then be summoned. Why must he do this in Hogwarts under Dumbledore's nose, which is already unreasonable and impossible to succeed? In the original book, there was a so-called legitimate reason for Hagrid to be taken away from Fudge, and Dumbledore didn't stop it. It was completely in line with the process and Dumbledore would not have intervened openly. Anyway, after seeing Oak's actions, I felt that he was completely brainless. Even Death Eaters who are greedy for power cannot be so brainless. And Snape, (of course this may be my own fault, because many people also dislike him), I don't think he is that unbearable. His bad attitude toward Potter is because of his father, and his bad attitude towards Gryffindor is because he was bullied by the foursome when he was young. But the protagonist may have caused a lot of trouble, but Snape should not let Snape target him like this. After all, he is also a Slytherin, and he is also a mixed-blood and isolated. Not to mention sharing the same problem, there should be some tolerance. And Dumbledore, this seems to be an old coin that provokes conflicts between two factions. Of course, this deviation is not much, and he is not a simple person in the original work. How should I put it, the author gave me the feeling that the character creation has seriously deviated and is a bit "over". Lucius, Draco, and Snape are too bad, Dumbledore is too calculating, and the villain is too witty. I hope this long review will be helpful to the author, and hope to see you again👋🏻👋🏻👋🏻👋🏻

As soon as I saw the introduction, I felt like the content in the short video "If Chinese students went to Hogwarts"

It's really a bit poisonous. I've read more than 30 chapters. The whole text feels suffocating. Shushan swordsman went to Hogwarts as an exchange student. What a great idea. It's like this for you. You can't use the talisman that the master left for the protagonist anyway. You can set it on fire. Bury your bright and dark lines. Forcibly setting up conflicts led to the original character design being collective OOC. Lucius even tried to kill the protagonist at Hogwarts. Funny No matter how conspiracy theories Dumbledore is, no matter how white the devil is, his position is also that of the principal. Protecting the safety of teachers and students in the school is the foundation, not to mention that he is a foreign exchange student. Do you know what diplomacy means? If I can't control you, I might as well just set the protagonist as someone who has no disciples and is abroad. It's really funny.

Snape was fascinated by pig's feet. Since they were his students and there was no actual conflict of interest, the relationship between the two of them was greater than the hatred between Harry's father and Snape. Snape is written like a clown.

What the hell is this Sword Immortal? Change it to a swordsman! A man from the British Ministry of Magic can stomp on the nose and face of the protagonist, and this is all in school? Dumbledore should just retire! You're such a loser. I've never heard of an Auror from the Ministry of Magic daring to act wild in school? Most of the British Aurors graduated from school. How dare you slap Lao Deng in the face?

He has a trump card but doesn't use it. Dumbledore comes out every time he wants to use it, and the protagonist gives him face time and time again. Even Shanks doesn't have such a big face. It has become your routine. Really poisonous.

Brother, what Lucius wrote is so stupid. He used the Death Curse at Hogwarts. He really didn't give face to Lao Deng and the Ministry of Magic. Why don't you change it?

How to put it this way, there is a cat or a dog who wants to kill the protagonist every now and then. The protagonist still can't beat him. If he can't beat him, forget it. If he can't retaliate, forget it. If he can't retaliate, forget it. He will be further resented. This was while inside Hogwarts, under Dumbledore's nose, and in front of Snape. I think we should just write it. The protagonist goes out and is beaten to death by the villain, and the ending is straight away. There is no need to keep such nonsense in the so-called safest place.

Alas, this novel can be said to be a real waste of a good idea, this one was exchanged between China and Hogwarts. There are also creative ideas in short videos or other fan fiction, but they are not in-depth. I was very excited when I saw this book because he wrote Shushan and Hogwarts. This cultural hedging, and then there's also an element of China. Have a conflict inside. It's very interesting, but I just want to say this to the author. Otherwise, if you watch other people's videos, if it doesn't work, you can just copy and paste other people's ideas. What a great idea, how can you write it like this? When I first saw Shushan, I thought it would be a fierce cultural conflict that would produce highlights. However, I saw that the introduction might also be about writing about cultural differences in a funny way. Both are interesting and have an audience, but you are not interested in both. You have neither written about cultural conflicts, nor have you written about funny daily life? Well, you just want to force it into it with those weird and weird points of yours. Sometimes it's profound, sometimes it's funny, but it's neither. What do you want me to do?

The setting is okay, but the plot is too confusing and the pig's feet are still frustrating.

This book is creative, but the writing and plot are terrible

This book is extremely poisonous, I was furious after reading it, and it is also slow to update. After beating the small ones, the older ones come, and after beating the older ones, there are still the old ones. Matryoshka doll! The characters are also very poor, both the main and deputy characters are disgusting. Just be patient, don't apologize after enduring it. The Dumbledore in your article is an old coin, an old coin that specifically provokes a war between the two countries. It is really hard to persuade him to retreat. Such an important role has been ruined by you.

This book was really baffling to read, especially the further back it went. The villains all have no brains. Slytherin is braver than Gryffindor, and his pursuit of interests turns into mindless killing.

To be honest, I came here for Shushan at first, but it's hard to understand why I have to learn magic or create a power system like the magic pool. Wouldn't it be better to write about Shushan's scenario of simply making trouble at Hogwarts? Or, like the book about calmly drinking black tea at Hogwarts, wouldn't it be better to treat magic as energy in the body that only manifests itself in different ways? This kind of division into two systems will definitely lead to failure in writing later. How do you plan to write the battle plot in the future? Will the protagonist use Shushan's ability or Hogwarts' magic to fight against others? Fellow practitioner, is it possible that you can do magic, swordsmanship and spells? And in Chapter 14, the magic power you wrote yourself is the method of the soul. So isn't there any relevant cultivation method in Shushan's thousands of years of inheritance? Do you have to learn magic? Since you are writing about exchange students in Shushan, what you should write about is learning the tricks of Shushan and getting into trouble at Hogwarts. Otherwise, you might as well just write about magic.

It's rubbish. It's very frustrating to watch. When I came to Hogwarts, I was attacked, provoked, and then injured again. After that, I didn't use my trump cards. I didn't feel happy at all. I left ヽ('⌒´メ)ノ

I'm so tired from reading it. I've read almost forty chapters and don't know what to say. It took me a long time to create so many villains with no IQ. Tired, goodbye.

Let me mention one more thing. The protagonist's sect is really not strong. As a result, it really didn't feel good. But he is so proud! It was actually okay at first, I didn't have this feeling For example, there was originally a divine wizard-Dumbledore, and at most it felt like Voldemort The master of the protagonist's family, the benchmark of the land gods Many of the other uncles are at the level of Nascent Soul (Palace) It feels like It's not bad As the plot progresses, casually, dark wizards and pure bloods are all four pillars, and there are a lot of palaces And then there seem to be secret demigods and divine wizards too... The protagonist's family only has a land immortal (divine wizard) It's not cool at all! If it weren't for today's patch, there would be other demigod wizards of the same generation as the master. Counting Qingcheng Mountain alone, it wouldn't be strong at all At most, it could be compared to Hogwarts And every time a helping hand comes, it's just right They are stuck and can solve the current problem, and then a character who can't cope with it will appear on the opposite side (as if there is no need for money) Just like the current second master uncle, who is at the peak of Nascent Soul, he can't compete with the demigod at all, and at most he will be injured and replaced. Personally, I think there's really nothing to write about that makes it feel better.

The content of this book is definitely not what you want to read after seeing the title and introduction, over

Personally, I don't like it. Let's not mention that wizards and swordsmen in the Harry Potter world are not the same thing at all. How come they are exchange students? Even if they are similar in nature, is it still the same as playing with a swordsman against a wizard? If nothing else, just speaking of speed is not on the same level. . . . . Based on the recklessness of the British Ministry of Magic, Shushan should have slaughtered the British Ministry of Magic long ago. . . . Finally, I want to ask, how long can the greatest wizard live? Even if he cheats with the magic stone, it will only be more than 500, and there are extremely serious side effects. . . The Shushan here is actually set up as a martial arts sect that cultivates internal strength. . . . The subject matter is a failure

Shouldn't this be a bit more refined?