From Beauxbatons to Hogwarts

The magic described by the author is very attractive, but I don't like the author's description too much.

I feel... The protagonist is very cool, Dumbledore threatens him casually, Snape takes a liking to the Moon Crazy Beast and prepares to steal one, the protagonist also gives the other party a spell about the Moon Crazy Beast, just after giving Barbling as a gift, Barbling plots the protagonist's blood, and later plans to teach Harry Potter under Dumbledore's threat. The author in the comment area said that he would start a fight with Harry. I can already imagine how angry the plot will be in the future (falling out with Harry and then forgiving him after he apologizes, which is obviously this kind of plot). Anyway, it is just a crotch all the way, and the protagonist is like a little brat, being used and used and threatened.

It feels weird, anyone can pinch the protagonist, especially the spell in the protected area is so strong, and he still acts like that when facing the Minister of Magic. It feels like everyone looks down on him even though he has laid so much ground for him, and he can pinch him. The new professor is also so strict, and he is still old. Friends act as guarantors, maybe because the black magic professors give people the impression that dogs can be professors, and the protagonist is also scrutinized in various ways, hahaha. He has the strength of a strong man, but does not have the temper of a strong man. It does not mean that he will be angry, at least he must have an attitude. The above personal opinions, please go to the author,

I was really stunned when I saw Hagrid calling the new students at the door. The original book clearly describes that Hagrid was handed over to Professor McGonagall when he arrived at the castle gate. You are like a eunuch calling the emperor at the palace gate. This is no longer a matter of whether the second creation is reasonable or not, but a question of whether you have done your homework before writing the book.

If you are guaranteed not to be an eunuch, you will be kidnapped and taken to the Forbidden Forest to be tortured by the Whomping Willow himself.

In fact, I just saw the testimonials when it was released, and the feeling it gave me was just two words: depressed! The most important thing is that in the early stage, a powerful, connotative, and beautiful protagonist image was created. Even the protagonist himself said that it was true. No one can see the result. It was too embarrassing for anyone to take a look at later. In the end, even the horseman was able to figure it out, but the writing was still not enjoyable. As a result, the more I watched, the more frustrated I became, and the more I watched, the less clear my thoughts... It was like the protagonist was a master of martial arts dramas, but everyone thought he was just a novice who could step on both sides. Feet... According to the description of the story, it may be related to the fact that the author is a novice, because it does not mean that the protagonist cannot be manipulated, but a story needs to have its ups and downs, right? But I have always watched the protagonist being manipulated and stepped on, and I just can't write the kind of refreshing point that suddenly makes me feel transparent. As a result, every time I can successfully highlight the protagonist's strong personality, I always fail to write it properly. So the final result is that when I see the chapters on the shelves, the protagonist can still be touched by anyone, which is too uncomfortable.

So, does the protagonist not know the story of Harry Potter? Or pretend not to know. From the current point of view, the protagonist just doesn't know. This seems to reduce a lot of interesting points.

I find it very strange that every Harry Potter fanfic has a plot in which every time the three of them meet the troll protagonist 😰

A person who was strong enough to draw a protected area was compromised by Dumbledore in just a few words. Although Dumbledore was very strong, the protagonist was born a strong person and did not have the arrogance of a strong person at all. Is he approachable or cowardly? After studying for so many years, I don't even have the slightest confidence.

The World Cup is coming, let's open a betting house. Guigui now owes 40 additional chapters, so I use this as a bargaining chip. For every correct guess on the result of a regular-time football game, five chapters will be deducted, and for every wrong guess, one chapter will be added.

The writing is a bit strange in many places, but the writing is very smooth in my opinion, but the protagonists are given a bunch of names, which makes people confused These are not things that you can accept just by explaining them. It will give people an unreal feeling. I can only say that you The setting has already been written and change is unrealistic, the only hope for a comeback is how the plot unfolds. This book can be read by new hp fans. I don't know how many herbs I have tasted. I can only say that there is no poisonous point that I can see in this book, but there are always a lot of names for one person. If you have a process, you can read Full-Time Artist or simply Invincible Articles. This book is right in the middle. The background of the main character is obviously very interesting, but the author forced me to use a lot of names to convince me to quit in three chapters This book has been written. After all, it has been released. It is impossible to change the estimate drastically. I hope for the next book. Think carefully ps: I suggest old fan readers who are concerned about the setting to think twice before entering. I care about the setting anyway, even if the plot is second-rate, but as long as the setting is first-rate, I will read it pps is suitable for new fan readers to read as a trap. After all, the writing style and background are more interesting, but the setting makes me numb.

After reading more than 50 chapters, I found a lot of minor flaws. First, it was about driving high and going low. Then, the character descriptions were rigid. For example, the Indian woman was very abrupt and did not need to be written at all. Moreover, the writing was still wise. Furthermore, the protagonist's way of doing things and communicating was completely inconsistent with the introduction and setting. It was embarrassing. As long as there was room for improvement in the imagination, the story of driving high and going low completely polluted the book.

Is the protagonist strong or not? There's so much foreshadowing, but I'm always timid. Do you know the plot? Do you know that Harry Potter is a story, but don't know that the Dog Godfather was wronged?

Because I was bullied by Slytherin once when I was a child and I resisted. Later, people all over the world were afraid that the protagonist would come back for revenge and kept on guarding him and asking him to be a good person. I thought he was being patient at first, but later I found out that the protagonist was really trained to be a little Dumbledore. He was so good.

It was well written in the early stages, but fell apart after more than 90 chapters. There are basically no comments after chapter 90, which is a common problem for novice authors.

If I could really choose between the three major magic schools in Europe, I would go to Beauxbatons. Not to mention anything else, they have alchemy courses from beginning to end! How many alchemists have you seen in the magic test who are poor?

Although the Dumbledore in this book is not the conspiracy theory type, he has a conservative image of an old stubborn who is unwilling to change and very egotistical. I don't like the unplanned or gray things brought about by the protagonist, and I don't support the protagonist's exploration of dangerous magical fields. On the contrary, Nick Flamel is more in line with the image of Dumbledore in Harry Potter, a powerful wizard and funny old naughty boy full of wisdom who is tolerant of giving guidance and help to his younger generations.

When you see a single heroine, ask who the heroine is.

I feel that the direct praise was too strong, a bit exaggerated and frivolous, and the protagonist gave me a sense of déjà vu as a capable Lockhart. I hope the author can hold on.

Author, it has been almost three years and only 700,000 words have been written. Your update...

Can it be stable?😵

It's not that the writing is bad, but the atmosphere of the whole article makes me feel a bit strange, and I can't explain why it is so strange. In short, you can look at it, but the one that suits you is the best, right?

A leave note asking for nine months' leave

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