One Piece: Curse of Hell

Long review, continue to follow the author, the progress is very obvious, but the shortcomings are also obvious. The shortcoming of the previous book is that the plot content is not attractive, and you can only read the title. The plot of this book has been amazingly improved in terms of details, especially the atmosphere creation, but it seems to be too hard, resulting in a failure to control the general direction. Based on my experience of reading online articles, I summarized a few points for the author's reference. This is purely a personal opinion. My experience is public. I subscribed 500% for 50% of the light novel area in 9 years. The following comments are for the author's reference only: 1. It is not uncommon to abuse the protagonist at the beginning, but generally after enduring a series of setbacks, there is some feedback, and you cannot purely abuse the protagonist. 2. Ntr has a very small audience. At least in Qidian. Com, this is an element of dissuasion on the same level as giving away a daughter. This refers to Lafitte snatching away his original fiancée. 3. There are too many backgrounds and various elements, which leads to a confusing plot line. I want to expand on this, and it is also the main part that I feel is poisonous: ① Many novels have written about this cage opening. When I read the various characters, props, and plot elements in the cage and escaping from the cage, I expected that they would be of great help to the subsequent plot, such as prison escape, but I did not feel it. The cheats given should also play a certain role in advancing the plot, but they don't seem to be of much help, and they are still completely unbeatable. The protagonist walks all the way, feeling very disconnected from these elements. ② In terms of character interaction, the characters are too deliberate and the image is not three-dimensional. I read books relatively quickly, and I only remember Lafitte and the person who proposed the initial place. Lafitte's fruit is too strong, and the angel's "second design" as an element is just to torture the master for the sake of torturing the master. His appearance is to explain that the protagonist is miserable. Why is he? What's his purpose? Have you never communicated with the protagonist? Is it a fight to the death? These are all questions I have, but they have not been well answered. Then there is the one who is one of my own, who is like a one-time character in Novice Village. Although there is a lot of ink, I feel that it can be summed up as follows: miserable, report something, and send a mission to the one-time character, just to give the protagonist a weapon address. This person could be a companion who went out together, or he could be a guide like Athena in God of War, but I didn't sense any foreshadowing. ③Weapons. With non-original characters constantly appearing, secondary main villains, sadistic masters, ntr, and negative elements in such fan fiction constantly appearing, a slightly longer plot - getting a weapon, you get a very strange thing. This weapon has a pirate background, a lack of strength in Runeterra, and a small boss that cannot be defeated. This is still a problem of stacking elements. ———————————— In summary, it can be seen that the author wants to write a clever long-term plot, but the author's writing power is still not enough to control the unfolding and development of the plot, resulting in a mess of elements and a pile of fragments. My reading experience is like having a confusing, unconnected, and unclear dream while taking a nap. Come on author, look forward to progress!

As of now, Chapter 57, the main plot is not clear. The effect of stacking passives is not clear. I am still being abused. I have not learned the domineering skills and physical skills. I am not diligent in stacking passives. After getting out of danger, I let myself go and formed a team with unclear responsibilities. There is not even a shadow of the natural fruit. This is all. See you again.

After a rough look, what should I say? If you just write something for fun, then there's no problem at all. As long as you don't have any hopes, that is, don't collect, subscribe, or read it, and just write it for fun, then there's nothing wrong with your way of writing. After all, in a novel where the protagonist is tortured at the beginning, even if it gets better later on, basically no one will see the end. After seeing the protagonist being tortured for more than ten chapters, he basically ran away. To be honest, if a newcomer writes like this, it will basically pave the way. Because the audience for abusers is originally very small, and you are a newbie, so people won't have the patience to continue watching. Including me, I usually read seven or eight chapters and if I'm just abusing the protagonist, I'll just leave. Not even taking a second look.

Ouch, what is extraordinary, can you please stop doing this? The other settings are pretty good, but this kind of setting feels a bit superfluous.

It's too messy. To be honest, the main reason is that the writing is not good. If I am more direct, I can't figure out the subject, predicate and object, so the sentences are very difficult to read. When I got to chapter 23, I didn't read it very fast. I felt that each chapter had a very obvious sense of separation and could not be connected. I thought I didn't read it carefully. After reading it a few times, I found that the sentence didn't make sense at all. The description of the characters was very poor. By chapter 23, I didn't know the appearance of any person in this book. It was very outrageous.

The main plot is unknown, branch plots are open everywhere, the golden finger is not well developed, and the master is abused (too suppressed and unable to flourish),

Come on! Then, I would like to ask, does Golden Finger have something to do with the title of the book😄

The protagonist also boasted that he was harmed so miserably. I'm afraid of guns. When I see this kind of plot, I can't help but complain that these so-called strong pirates are not even as powerful as those who fight Banriga Kenzan.

There are too many supporting roles. . . .

If you copy One Piece completely and put all the advantages and disadvantages together, then you might as well watch One Piece. What fan fiction are you reading? The advantage of One Piece lies in the setting of Devil Fruit. And domineering. And the fantasy nature of the world! A rubber fruit turned into a sun god fruit inexplicably? What is the initial power value? Chaos is reality, and mental retardation is the future. Those who are smart make them stupid, Those who hide make them disappear, Those who play with fate will eventually be played with by fate. The world never had meaning, it just existed!

The protagonist with cheats has been abused

Such fruit? So, thunder, rain, snow, hail...😎

If you don't abuse the master, who will?

After reading about ten chapters, I couldn't stand it any longer. It was so disgusting that I was poisoned to death.

The subject matter is actually very good. The writing is okay, but the beginning is a bit too messy. Sorry, I can't stick to it.

It's so chaotic, besides being abused, I'm still being abused.

I hope the author's dream will come true and he will be able to live on subsistence allowances. The dark story of seventy-eight chapters of abuse.

Superman type Devil Fruit I talked about animal type and natural type before. Now is the Superman system Human beings straddle materialism and idealism. In contrast, the natural system requires more natural knowledge from the outside world. The animal system needs to understand the evolutionary chain of its own species. The superhuman system is easier in comparison, but only a little! The body is materialistic, and the mind is idealistic. I don't know how many people still remember the extraordinary prehistoric times and the method of sanctifying the worldview!

Of course, all my comments are my own opinions. How can a group of mentally retarded people understand their abilities? Let me tell you again, why you can basically use the devil fruit after eating it. Where do the so-called devils come from? For those with abilities, after death, the Devil Fruit will reappear. So, why do artificial devil fruits bring abilities? That's genes! Of course, in One Piece it's called the blood factor. But genes are part of the body, and humans are composed of body and mind. Who can be sure that humans are not demons?         ，，，                ，， If you are a person with superhuman abilities, you may retain some of your humanity and how to use most of your abilities. This is also the reason why it is easier to awaken, but it is also possible to bring another person back. As for whether the person the remaining humanity becomes is the same person as before? This is a matter of benevolence and wisdom. Those with natural abilities will have their humanity wiped out, leaving only the basic methods of using their abilities. The reason why the natural system is more popular, in my opinion: It will not become cruel because of the animal system, it will not become another person as easily as the superman, and it is not easy to die.

It's not good to read, it's messy, it has no main plot, it's abusive, it's not as good as a poisonous novel, at least you can see the poison, you're such a mess

I asked the editor and he said that it will be available on the shelves at noon on Friday. There is no requirement for this score... I just want to get the minimum guarantee 🥺