A Certain Scientific Boy

. Half a chapter is gone... Please help save me some trouble. I didn't understand the background of the Demonic Forbidden City. It is said that it is a demon god, but there are people who have cultivated to become immortals. However, they don't know much about demon gods. They look down on demon gods, do not look down on superpowers, and do not look down on magic. If they want to cultivate immortals, they say that cultivating immortals is superior to others... Okay, that's all for half a chapter.

The protagonist likes to be called "Master". Note that this is in Academy City, not ancient society. And it feels a little oily. A grown man uses his ability to lift the skirt of a strange girl. Be careful, the author may not know that some details will reveal the creator's true thoughts. The original work is mostly about familiar interactions between girls, which shows that the original author likes girls to post. Strange men and women do this, well, I can't say. . . 🙂

After reading a few chapters, I don't know what the rest of the story is going to be like, but as the protagonist, he can be bad, slutty, holy, funny, good-looking, or even stupid. But this article gives people the impression that the protagonist is a businessman who practices so-called immortality.

I can't watch it anymore, at least it doesn't fit the mentality of a cultivator. The protagonist is cultivating the Great Freedom Demon, right?

It feels weird. I haven't seen the main plot of this book so far. The protagonist does not follow the original work or write an original plot. He spends the whole day talking to Ruizi, flirting with Mikoto, and chatting with his five subordinates. The main character plays the role of cultivating immortals in a Japanese comic with magic and super powers. I can only say that it is very funny and has a strong sense of fragmentation.

Sorry, I have to add an oriental system. You can't even understand the magic ban system and you have to add a Qi practitioner setting. This system is no longer popular now.

Prison Color Haimei

Did you make a mistake, author? In the first chapter of the three golden chapters, you are just like Tang San, with a long section of water settings and the main character's guesses? ? ? Forget about water, you can pull and step while watering. Forget it, the technique of writing through is that you can watch and dislike a certain character, arousing the resonance of the audience who are also dissatisfied with the character, to quickly increase your popularity, or the fan stickiness of a certain audience (for example, a certain passerby must criticize Aki) But at the beginning, you directly dislike the world background to show your sense of superiority. For fans, your writing technique is called self-explosion Because the beginning of Chapter 1 You haven't come up with any interesting jokes yet. In this case, the audience selected by the title of the book or other information comes from this IP. And at the beginning, you only have this IP that is attractive, because you haven't told your own story yet. In this case, you didn't use this IP to attract traffic for your story, so you blocked this IP first? ? ?                                                                                                                                                             but you have to wait for yourself to cross the river first. You can't tear down the bridge before you cross the river...

The book is actually pretty good. I don't know why my grades are so bad. Logically speaking, it wouldn't be like this if there wasn't a big hit. This writing style belongs to the Japanese-light writing style of the SF translation more than ten years ago. It may not be popular with people nowadays, but that is not the main reason. The harem is a bit inexplicable and lacks empathy. For example, Tsukiyomi Komoe, Fukiyose Siri, Himegami Akisa, and Shirai Kuroko have no need to enter the harem. They have no emotional basis, and the lack of side descriptions will make people feel disgusted. There are too few conflicts in the main and branch lines, not dramatic enough, and the overall process is too dull. To put it bluntly, online articles are still enjoyable articles. Whether you are writing light novels or fan fiction, how to suppress the description through foreshadowing and finally explode to highlight the exciting points is the core to win the audience's attention. Internet novels that are not enjoyable can only be Shimizu novels. Even Shimizu novels must highlight emotional descriptions and inner portrayals. Except for Misaka Mikoto and Saten Ruiko, no one else is satisfied with this. This is why it is inexplicable that your harem is closed. This book has some advantages, the logic of writing is still there, the description of transitions is also good, and some of the jokes are not vulgar, but the general direction problem cannot be covered up.

A question suddenly occurred to me: are there more people who read fanfics who have read the original works or those who have not read the original works? For example, I watched the plots of Naruto, One Piece, Bleach, Conan and other anime at the starting point, and I understood the general world view structure. As for the Magic Forbidden, I have only watched the Super Cannon anime and the first part of the Magic Forbidden anime. I still know the other settings from the Internet. As for the original novel, I have actually never read it. So I'm curious, whether there are more people who read fan fiction at Qidian. Com: those who are fans of the original works (or anime fans) or those who haven't read the original works.

What the hell are you writing? A world where you can achieve immortality in one step. Don't be disgusted with me. The big bald man is ten times the size of the Big Bang.

I also have the same superpower as Shokuhou Misaki, but mine is much weaker. Pressing the button can only make a person's legs weak and his whole body shaking.

In the third chapter, you can use soul spells after completing your Qi training, ignoring the laws of physics. I was so scared that I ran back to the second chapter to check the realm, otherwise I would have thought that the male protagonist had become an immortal. I can't stand it anymore. I wonder if anyone can tell me. When the male protagonist enters the second state of concentration, does he rub against the devil? The cultivator is truly invincible.

The author doesn't know much about the original work, and he doesn't even fully understand the character settings and world setting. It will be very entertaining if you watch the original work again

I feel like the author's final statement resonated with me as a reader, and the same thing happened with an original novel I read. Some people have been setting up the author's cultivation settings, insisting that the author follow his requirements: "A world must have a consciousness of the way of heaven, and spiritual energy pollution must mean that the way of heaven is broken, etc...", He keeps posting. I couldn't stand it, and said: Original novels should be based on the author's own settings. You can make suggestions, but don't post them all the time. As a result, I was criticized for how I am in reality... I'm convinced 😅 This is true in the original area, and it is probably even more exaggerated in the fan area.

After reading a few chapters, the protagonist is just a businessman...

I haven't read the book yet, so let's read the comments first. The comment section of this book is so exciting. The author is alone against all readers. Am I surprised that I don't see this much? I feel that the author can use the energy and time to irritate readers to improve his own work. Will it make the work more exciting?

It's not impossible to cultivate immortality in Japanese comics, but the author goes too far in exaggerating the cultivation of immortality, as if everything except cultivation is rubbish

My brother has published a new book, but the comment section is full of curses. I want to cheer you up. Come on, come on.

Now that the starting point is that the male protagonist is not good-looking, why can't he write a book? Almost every book is handsome and attracts attention, and a lot of passers-by comment on it.

Good guy, once there are more investors, the original investment for the third one is a few hundred, but it suddenly becomes dozens?

Don't be discouraged, author. Don't just read other people's complaints. I think the writing is okay. This kind of bland plot is also quite interesting. As for Bankai, it might be better to write some new episodes, as long as the arrangements are reasonable.

Ah, Lao Yang has published a new book😍

The black bomb is a bit short, Hong Lu Huo Chui and Tina's sisters did not appear, and what about Sima Wei Zhi?

The reason I read this book was the introduction, but I found out halfway through that the author is also the author of Zongman Coffee Shop. Is this a different kind of double-chef ecstasy?

More finesse, you know?

The protagonist has the ability to travel to the forbidden world after cultivating himself How come there are a lot of people claiming that the forbidden immortality is not like this It is not the same system in the first place, it is just called the same The upper limit of the protagonist's immortality system is higher than that of the forbidden immortality Why should we care about this? What is it like to cultivate immortality? Different authors argue that it must be set this way or that way No one is trying to unify the rules of magic for cultivating immortality in all realms It doesn't matter the name and ability strength set by other authors Anyway, I just came to read Yang Xiaolin's works, in which the protagonist spends his days leisurely and opens a harem.

I finally finished reading it, and received the light of the great master by the way. I feel that this book is okay, it is ordinary, and it feels similar to ordinary books. I just don't like sex change and so on. I mostly skipped reading in the later period. Finally, I asked the author to continue to work hard 😁

Without Xiao Lin's book, I would be dead if I read it, rush, rush√

Author, understand?