Douluo: I Have an American Iihe

Attach a fire attribute soul ring to the martial soul. The new characteristics of the martial soul may be heat generation, high temperature resistance, and energy absorption. For control, increased mental power, and improved precision Attach a metallic soul ring to the martial soul, and the new characteristics of the martial soul may be increased hardness, increased ductility, and improved sharpness Attach an earth attribute soul ring to the martial soul, and the new characteristics of the martial soul may be increased density, improved defense, and energy absorption (Don't ask me why there are three energy absorptions, heat is not energy? Electricity is not energy? As for the earth attribute, can this be done if you don't use energy absorption?)

The protagonist's character is not well written. He wants to be a waste but also wants to enjoy himself. That's a good thing. If he starts to awaken his soul power at level 0, that's fine. I thought I was living in modern times. I didn't want to become stronger but instead hugged my big feet. Without strength, I was nothing. I was like a clown, and readers didn't want to see it.

First of all, you have to write a time travel story, but if you want to really write a good work, you really have to think about multiple plot lines. For example, on the same timeline, what happened to the Sun Moon God Sect, what happened to Liuli, the Tiandou Empire royal family, and the Wuhun Palace, trying to make their own The stories are connected with each other. The Tiandou Empire royal family wants to unify the continent from the beginning, Wuhun Palace wants to master all the force and control all situations, and Liuli Pagoda accidentally kills someone because he did some wrong things. It seems that they are three unrelated things. What if there is a protagonist in the middle? When they know the protagonist's action trajectory and attitude towards doing things, what actions should they take? As a major force, its structure will be very large and broad, and some forces even have bottomless internal plans. For example, on the surface, Wuhun Palace seems to want to control all forces and control all soul masters, but some internal leaders have long wanted to use this force to expand their territories. To rule this world, readers will definitely not know these internal structures at the beginning. If these are added, then the later chapters will become more and more exciting, instead of the protagonist fighting the boss at the back, just like playing a small dungeon, there is no frustration, no sense of crisis, just a little push. If we don't consider it here and only consider the main plot of the male protagonist, the following situation will occur The protagonist escapes from Heavenly Dou> wants to find a place to stay> becomes stronger> kills the Glazed Tower> kills the Spirit Hall> kills Tang San. . . . This kind of mindless plot will appear. It is recommended to take a small note to write down the story lines of all the forces. Just write down the general things. And these plot lines should not be written out clearly. They should appear around the protagonist in a more obscure way. It can be news or events. Just one side of the plot line will do. And all forces will directly guide or even change their original behavior plans based on the behavior of one party. The second step is to plant the seeds. At the beginning of the plot, it should be clearly explained what kind of past the protagonist has and how he came to this world, because only in this way can the protagonist and some plot lines be connected. Otherwise, something like this will happen Inexplicably traveling through time > mixing > becoming stronger > continuing to become stronger. . . Inexplicable time travel>Goldfinger>Defend everything>Defend everything. . . Are these routines familiar? But this kind of thing really has no nutrition in itself, and over time, it will make people feel bored. Of course, I can actually see that many authors are just for word count, just to make money, rather than really wanting to create a work for themselves. Such novels will not last long, and writing a work, once it is finished, you will be proud of yourself. After all, this is really not written for others, only you know what you want.

The writing is pretty good, but I just don't understand why you want to go to Tiandou City. There are big forces, nobles, and small forces, and Douluo itself is supreme in force. If you don't join, you will be destroyed. If you don't hold on well, the waves will fly up. You have no power and no strength. You are not strong enough but you are annoying people, that is a sin

When I went to the auction house, I felt something was wrong there. The kid entered the market with gold and had good talent. He was a target for people to look at. The protagonist still held ordinary dreams and didn't know how to keep a low profile. As a result, he was noticed by various forces. Is it just for the development of the plot?

The author should write an urban version of Wuhun. In this case, you are a person with superpowers and are extraordinary. Under the protection of the country, there is no big problem. And 99% of extraordinary people are good people. It depends on which one you don't want to be tempted by if you have a million. Then you can make tens of billions at ten levels. First, buy seven or eight thousand-year soul bones, upgrade to more than 40 levels, and then hello, hello, hello everyone,

I feel that I can find a kingdom or go to the Star Luo Empire to survive. In a few years, I will find out that Ning Rongrong is on the way to Shrek and kill her directly. Or when she arrives at Shrek, without the close protection of a titled Douluo, there will be many opportunities to kill her with a long-range sniper.

The protagonist is not imaginative enough, so he splits his martial spirit into particles and disperses them into the air. As soon as he enters the battlefield, as long as he breathes, there are particles in his body that the protagonist can control. In this way, whether they directly aggregate and block his blood supply, destroy his organs, or directly explode, the titled Douluo will die one by one, unless he activates the martial spirit possession first and maintains the martial spirit possession for life.

It feels like all the supporting characters in this fanfic have online IQs, but the protagonist's IQ is not. Then, the protagonist wanted to show off himself in front of the supporting characters, but he was tricked!

The common man is not guilty, but he is guilty of carrying a jade! The male protagonist has already exposed a seven-year-old child's weapon that can injure the Soul Emperor. The Soul Emperor's level is 61-70. The male protagonist is only a tenth level soul master. He has come into contact with high-level forces too early. If the news spreads, no organization will let go of the fat, gunpowder and firearms that are sent to the door. They already belong to another power system. Ordinary people without soul power. The power that can be mastered by ordinary people has become the weapon that changes the low-end combat power structure of the Douluo Continent. It is the weapon that the empire desires most and the weapon that soul masters hate the most. Any leader will take this weapon into his own hands. At present, Qian Renxue Soul Palace has been dispatched to ban the title. The Qibao Brainless Soul Emperor wants to kill the male protagonist. Tiandou The collateral princess wants to protect the male protagonist, who must discover the secret of the weapon. Tiandou cannot crush the Qibao. There are two ways. The first battle situation is stalemate. Wuhun Palace Douluo enters the scene forcefully and takes away the male protagonist. The gunpowder weapons belong to Wuhun Palace. Er Tiandou blocks the peace talks after Qibao. Tiandou takes away the male protagonist to clean the battlefield. It can be Only Tiandou and Qibao know about the weapon that injured the Soul Emperor. Tiandou knows it, Qian Renxue knows it, and the Wuhun Palace also knows it. Leaders with a certain pattern will definitely pay attention to it. The Super Douluo of the Enshrinement Palace intervenes, asking for people or starting a war. This battle of the male protagonist cannot withstand scrutiny. The soul master uses weapons to hurt the Soul Emperor, and the ending is almost a bomb.

It feels like the author is about to write it down. All the opportunities that ordinary time travelers know about in Douluo 1 are gone. Does the author want to write about the protagonist going to the Sun and Moon Continent? Don't let the entire protagonist's parents appear, and the result is that he is the heir of a big family or something.

Bullshit, bullshit, you are playing bad cards today.

If the heroine is Ning Rongrong, I would like more people to withdraw. She is unruly and willful. How many of you like her?

There is a problem with what I wrote at the beginning. Tuition fee in Notting City is ten gold coins per year. You bought a house for 1,000 gold coins. Is there something wrong with your logic?

Aggrieved, either being hunted or being chased on the way to escape

The first time I met the protagonist Shenyin was more than 20 chapters in. . . The point is that there are only a little over seventy chapters in total. . The protagonist just has no sense of existence at all, and he has blocked the thief Duolu. He can't go anywhere, and he wants to take refuge with the soul beast if he can. Now he blows up Qibao Glaze to relieve the protagonist's predicament, but this kind of revenge has nothing to do with the protagonist. Isn't it really exciting to watch? . . To be honest, if this development wasn't so outrageous, I wouldn't want to watch it. . Either let the protagonist develop earlier, or update more

The settings have been changed in order to create conflicts for the sake of the plot. Going to Tiandou City is so complicated. It is nonsense for high-level people to check the strength of low-level people. If they are really so awesome, why should the soul masters show off their soul rings? What other testing crystals are used by Wuhun Palace and Academy? In the original work, no one can directly check the soul power level of the low-level soul masters, including the Shrek Gatekeeper Soul Emperor, the Dragon Lord and the Snake Woman, the three deans of the Tiandou Royal Academy, and the Douluo in the stands during the competition, let alone the Seven Treasures Glazed Sect. The most shocking part of the original work is that after Ning Fengzhi's daughter ate the fairy grass and transformed into the Nine Treasures Glazed Pagoda, she asked Ning Fengzhi and the Sword and Bone Douluo to guess the level, but no one could sense her level.

Notting became a small town. A small yard. 1000 Gold soul coins. Whether there are as many students in the school as there are people nearby is one thing. Where did you get the school district room? Even if the poor couldn't afford it, they didn't need to live in a small town. You were in the city now. How nice can an average person's yard be. You just think that this family is so short of money that they have to sell their house. How big can his yard be? One gold soul coin per household. Live for one year. What did the author think?

This book... Feels like the same style as before. The protagonist has an aura, and there are enemies wherever he goes. Suddenly he meets someone who is good to the protagonist, and he dies... Maybe it's because I'm used to this style now, and I feel a little dizzy when I encounter the previous style.

What I consider to be my poisonous points are: 1. Mentality issues. I know clearly that Douluo Continent is a world where the jungle is the law of the jungle, but I still want to be a soul master who doesn't fight. 2. I like to be promiscuous. Isn't it okay to just live in Soto City? Must you go to Tiandou City? I don't have any strength but I still like to wander. 3. There is a problem with the direction of training. The biggest problem of the male protagonist is poor physical fitness. He will die if he gets close to him. I hope the author can write it well so that he doesn't wander around without strength, and his physical fitness should also be improved. In addition, don't always write about other things. We are looking at the male protagonist.

I feel that the protagonist is of no use and has made the main plot a mess. If I were Tang San, I would kill him to the ends of the earth if I knew that the protagonist leaked their information.