The Second Person in the World

Coming from elementary school, let me tell you briefly. First, there is a problem with the title. The author's setting is that an adult time traveler's soul travels to the Ming Dynasty, so the title of the protagonist should be "Zheng Long" in the previous life. Others can call him "A Long". It would be difficult for the author to write it as A Long, and the image of the time traveler is not established. Secondly, the psychological activities of the time traveler as an adult are not written out. How could he treat Lan Niang as his mother just a few days after traveling? Doesn't this idea need a transformation process? And within two days of time travel, he went to Gao Baihu to play chess in a crisis situation, and vented his anger on Lan Niang in this way? Not to mention the subsequent plot, which becomes less and less like an adult and more like an indigenous protagonist. Third, the supporting characters are too simple and the plot is too shallow. For example, what is Gao Baihu's identity, and why did he gamble so much with a little book boy? As a villain, he didn't react at all even after losing. How is this character's domineering character reflected? The imperial demeanor of Xuande and the character of Zheng He are also not portrayed. The characters are too superficial and superficial, and the supporting characters all appear "silly". The image of a character is not described by piling up adjectives, but is shaped by plot and description. Finally, let's talk about expectations. As an old reader of Sui Qingfeng, I have high expectations for the book recommendations that Qingfeng calls real friends. It can be seen that the author's writing style has writing experience, but it should be the first time to write online articles. I hope the author can sum up his experience, improve on the shortcomings, and write better and better works.

The first person to like it is from a primary school student

Recommended by primary school students, like first and then read 😍😍😍

What kind of book is this? Fantasy, martial arts, or history

It would be nice if this name wasn't a historical reference.

Elementary school students are here to cheer and support.

The setting of life experience is too poisonous, isn't it? Lan Niang, the one who is destined to die for the King of Han, wants to bring her son in to die? It was child's play for a golden cicada to escape from its shell. How could the King of Han kill Gao Qi without anyone noticing? The writing is good, but the plot can't be poisonous all the time.

I always feel that I have a melancholic heart, please support me.