Immortality Begins in Hong Kong Crossover

There's been too much explanation, leaving little actual plot content in each chapter.

What's wrong with the main character in these chapters? His character seems to be falling apart. It's one thing to win money, but why does he keep mocking others, acting like a smug little villain? He's nothing like the Hung Hing gang member who beat up the protection money collectors before.

Here's a small suggestion: authors shouldn't spend too much time explaining character thoughts, settings, etc. Normal readers don't like arguing about these things. As long as your logic is basically sound, that's enough. Trolls won't stop arguing just because you provide lengthy explanations.

Finally found a readable book! It's good; the author has a unique talent, and might just shed his mortal form tomorrow. Let me mention a few points that can be improved and that need attention, since we're in the same industry after all. First, as I've probably mentioned many times already, when you begin explaining, it shouldn't be too long.

First of all, thank you for all the comments. I have seen them all. Let me explain here. Because I'm just a small author now, unlike established authors and veteran authors with so many long-time readers who can explain things to me, I have to explain many things in the book in detail. Otherwise, there will be a lot of criticism.

Starting with *The Yin-Yang Corpse*, it's become incredibly long and tedious; chapters 20-30 of *The Yin-Yang Corpse* are just filler. 🥵

I suggest you don't add any random or unnecessary settings. If it's Eastern fantasy, then it's Eastern fantasy; if it's horror/supernatural, then it's horror/supernatural. Don't suddenly add some Cthulhu or other random elements while you're writing; it'll easily ruin the story.

Honestly, author, these latest chapters perfectly illustrate that the protagonist is an idiot.

Is the author's understanding of the word "kill" different from mine or from most people's? My understanding of "kill" is to kill, while the author's understanding is to beat someone up?

Two-thirds of the entire text consists of setting and explanations, but a lot of these explanations are either useless or irrelevant, making it too verbose.