Immortality Begins in Hong Kong Crossover

There are too many explanations and not much actual plot in each chapter.

What's going on with the protagonist in these chapters? His personality is a bit broken. It doesn't matter if he wins money. Why does he keep mocking others and acting like a villain? He's totally different from the Hong Xing who used to collect protection money.

A few suggestions, the author should not go into long explanations, character ideas, settings, etc. Normal readers don't like to argue with these things. As long as your logic is basically reasonable, the pundits won't be discouraged just because of your lengthy explanation.

I finally found a book that I can read. It's good. The author's bones are amazing and he may die tomorrow. Let me talk about a few points that can be improved and need attention. After all, I am also a colleague. First of all, I don't need to say that readers have probably said a lot. Now, when you start explaining, it shouldn't be too long. When you come back to your senses and finish reading it, you will forget everything about the plot, then the meaning of the explanation itself will be lost. And in fact, people who insist on bullying you will still bully you no matter how much you say. Second, it's a concept thrown out by a certain ghost king Practice existing skills to become someone else's meat pig? It is understandable if you want the protagonist to no longer have to fight monsters, upgrade, change equipment, skills, and then fight monsters and upgrade like other upgrade streams. But the difficulty increases too much at once. After all, it is starting from scratch. If this is not good, If you deal with it, it may be a big thunder. There are many examples to cite. Many future opponents have become pigs, but they are stronger than the protagonist who made up his own skills, and they were not harvested because of the problem of their skills until their death. So what is the advantage of the protagonist? Also, it is mentioned that the Kung Fu can be understood through Daozang or something, so why hasn't Daozang been tricked by someone? It's already 250,000 words, which is not too short. The protagonist's current cultivation system has not been set up at all. He just relies on the accumulation of attributes. To suddenly realize a skill is inappropriate and abrupt. If you don't make efforts in this area, it is completely unjustifiable. And how to reasonably write the protagonist's integration of hundreds of schools of thought to create a skill also requires rationality.

First of all, thank you for your comments, I have seen them all. Let me talk about it here, because I am just a small author now. There are no veteran authors or great authors who have so many old readers who can explain the new book. Therefore, many things in the book need to be explained in more detail, otherwise there will be a lot of points, so some readers feel that there are too many explanations. I thought that might be the case until I saw a comment that completely shocked me. Injustice ghosts, I think it should be clearly written in the book. This is a level setting. All ghosts that reach a certain level of power are called injustice ghosts, and then there are fierce ghosts. As a result, some people say that only those who die due to injustice can be called injustice souls... Is this all quantum reading? Thankfully it was written in detail, otherwise I wouldn't dare to imagine how it would be sprayed.

Since the Yin-Yang Corpse has grown long and smelly, a Yin-Yang Corpse in Chapter 20-30 is just water, water, water 🥵

It is recommended not to add any messy settings. If you want Eastern fantasy, just be Eastern fantasy. If you are horror and supernatural, just be horror and supernatural. Don't just add random settings like Cthulhu as you write. It is easy to collapse. For example, learning other people's skills will be regarded as food. This looks a bit Cthulhu. Lu's feeling, and it's only been a few dozen chapters, and you've dug such a big hole. If you continue writing this idea, the probability of collapse is quite high There are many novels that collapse like this. They were originally well written, but suddenly they had a brain convulsion and added a bunch of messy and incorrect settings, and then they couldn't come back together

Seriously, author, your latest chapters fully demonstrate that the protagonist is an idiot.

Does the author understand the word kill differently from me or from most people? In my understanding, killing means killing, but the author's killing means beating?

Two-thirds of the whole article is set up and explained. A lot of explanations are either useless or not close together, which is too verbose.