Refuse to Ascend at the Beginning

Faster and faster, it took me a day to read the entire content.

Um, why do I think this Chen Chuyao is so troublesome the more I look at it? The protagonist saved her, died for her mother and brother, taught her how to practice, and wiped her butt along the way. He talked a lot and had many things to do. Once inside the sect, there will definitely be more things related to her. What does the protagonist want?

Everyone knows: Chapters 8-35 have been changed, some details related to Chen Chuyao. There is no doubt that the character Chen Chuyao was relatively failed in the first edition. Because most readers don't seem to think highly of her, when some book friends first mentioned related things, they were just expressing their dislike for her, but I didn't realize the underlying reason why she was not liked. I only realized the problem after the book friends [{"NickName":"Picture C","UserId":360800173}] and [Cangshengranfutu (I don't know why Aite couldn't find it)] posted. The problem is simply that the psychological speculation about Chen Chuyao in the early stage was wrong. Originally, this character was designed to give the taciturn protagonist something to say, so it was set up in a more out-of-the-box way, but her life experience was ignored. In the early stage, she should have been immersed in the shadow of losing her parents. At the beginning of his training, he had no combat ability, a lot of dialogue, and unlikable psychological activities. Silly Baitian was only left with "silly white", which turned this character into an unlikable vase. I didn't realize this during the writing process, but I discovered this problem later after being reminded and revised by book friends. Therefore, while keeping the story line unchanged, Chen Chuyao's psychological condition was adjusted in Chapter 15. In Chapter 25, the psychological state has been transformed, and it should seem smoother. The silly dialogue and psychological activities in Chapters 8-35 have been deleted. The approximate modification is this. Thanks again to book friends for their feedback and corrections.

Drive high and go low, and refuse to ascend at first, it seems there is something, and then in the fifth chapter, I will have a hero to save the beauty. This old routine is really...

First-class beginning, second-rate writing, third-rate plot...

Why should Xu Feng's cause and effect be returned? If he was allowed to die, his mother and brother would not die. However, Su Han took Xu Feng's body and only slapped Mr. Ding in the face instead of killing him directly. After angering him, he did not return to Xu Feng's home to protect his mother and brother immediately. It felt that Su Han was only talking about cause and effect, but actually deliberately killed Xu Feng's mother and brother. He was not worried about retribution from the beginning. After reading Chapter 15, I felt really uncomfortable. The writing is there, but the characters are not well written.

Hello, everyone. If you have any suggestions about this book, you can leave them here. But it feels like it will take a long time to stand alone before you see anyone.

Problems with the book 1. Problem with the title of the book: The title of your book is to give people the feeling: I am already invincible, brothers, come in quickly and watch me show off. But after entering, I found out that it was a rebirth story, and it was neither high nor low rebirth. Because there was a fairy world above it, it felt like there were nine levels in the apocalypse, but the protagonist only rose to level six, and was finally reborn due to the war before the doomsday begins. It's not an invincible novel, it's a rebirth novel. If the name is inconsistent with the content, people who like to read the content will give up after seeing the name, and people who like the name will give up after reading the content. 2. Array time problem: You can only live for 3,000 years after cultivating to the full level. What energy source do you rely on to power the array to support 1,000 years? The most important thing is that you said you would wait until you are dead before activating it. After you die, what if those two people don't activate it? They are only on the third level and have only known you for ten years. Either they have to suffer for another seven or eight hundred years to reach the ninth level, or they can directly divide your inheritance and save hundreds of years of trouble. Which one do you think they will choose? Your rebirth may not be successful, and if you succeed, the possessed body may not be able to cultivate, and the possessed body may not necessarily have good cultivation aptitudes, and you may not be able to come back alive, and you may not come back until you reach the peak of cultivation. If you only cultivate to the fourth or fifth level and then come to find the junior brothers and sisters, they can easily kill you. 3. You can live for a total of 3,000 years. Doing nothing and just wasting 1,000 years is a poisonous point. 4. People of different levels have different shooting speeds. After practicing martial arts for many years, the body has developed instincts and the shooting speed is faster. Even if you can see it, you can't hit it. So it is unrealistic to exploit weaknesses and hit people. 5. I don't know how to evaluate the protagonist who took the initiative to die twice because of his sense of justice. If the young man doesn't let go, the protagonist will die. If his ribs are broken, he will fight one by one. He is still on someone else's territory. Both are fatal situations, and the protagonist takes the initiative to exploit them. 6. One thing to say is that the protagonist has such a strong sense of justice that he only kills the perpetrators. This is not normal. If you have such a strong sense of justice, at least kill the head of the family, otherwise the second and third rich second generation will appear. 7. What is the use of accepting a disciple? What help can the apprentice provide you? What is the use of becoming a sect? Your master knows more than you? It feels like a waste of the protagonist's time. I think what you want to write is a story about a passionate young man like One Piece who travels through ancient times, fights for justice, enjoys grudges, and finally becomes invincible in the world. But no one has read this kind of story for a long time. It's not that you didn't write it well, it's that traditional martial arts has been badly written. Everyone will know where the following millions of words are going after reading the first word. 8. A novel is a story, and a good novel is a good story. What is a good story? A good story is one that others cannot guess. Would you watch a TV series again right away from the first episode after watching it? No, because there is nothing new in this movie. What is unpredictable is a good story. Your story is so old and not new at all. 9. Two ways to write a good book: 1. Damn it, this idea is great, I want to write it down immediately. 2. I just make money. I write that one to make money. When I write a book, I just copy and paste it. It doesn't mean that I can't use it if I change the name. If you update ten chapters a day, there will always be someone who will be fooled.

I took the time to change some details in chapters 5-15. Due to the opinions of some book friends, I also found that the opening was not handled delicately. So I spent some time tonight to change some content. The general context has not changed, but the details have been adjusted and a few bugs have been fixed. For example, after the original boy was injured and died, the protagonist was reborn. But the protagonist only lost his soul and his body did not change. Then, the protagonist's body at this time should still be a dying body. But I described the protagonist as if he had improved a lot before. This was a bug, so the subsequent plot was a bit strange and not detailed enough. This is where I am inexperienced. I stood up straight after being beaten. So the main change is: after the protagonist was reborn, he fell into a coma after leaving Ding's house because of his near-death body, which led to the subsequent events. Finally, I would like to thank the book friends who pointed out my shortcomings. In the future, if I think about it carefully and feel that there is indeed a problem, I will do my best to adjust it. Thank you everyone. ps. It's almost three-thirty in the morning to edit the article. I have to get up and go to work in the morning, ah...

The writing about this woman is not good. Most of the flaws are around this woman. The writing is inexplicable.

It was good to see Chapter 15, there are many women, I feel familiar, old-fashioned

Most people don't hate good guys, and they don't hate that the protagonist is a good guy. But the plot shouldn't be so bad. The protagonist either wakes up and kills people and goes home, or he or she lies down temporarily and goes back the next day. If you want the plot to develop normally, you can write that Ding Er wants to feed the protagonist to the dog, and then the supporting character appears to save the protagonist. The protagonist must be made to do things without thinking, which is very contradictory to the previous protagonist's low-key cultivation of demons. The second point is to write down the young man's family to death, which shows that good people are not rewarded, and good people deserve to die, and the whole family is aggravated by the previous act of mindlessly saving people. Most readers like to see smart protagonists who do good things, are courageous and not reckless.

I want to complain, the author, didn't you realize that the biggest mistake is that the protagonist is a peerless master in the world? Where has the master's state of mind gone? Does such a master's state of mind match his strength? The plot unfolds later and becomes twisty and twisted. This is a common problem in novels. A practitioner has been cultivating for many years and his strength has increased, but his state of mind is still the same as that of an ordinary person who wants to be a grudge. Can such a state of mind master peerless power? Is cultivation like child's play? When you write these, you should not have the memory of a master, and you should start cultivating your strength and state of mind from scratch, so no matter what you write in the future, this joke will attract readers.

It's very strange. For a person who can be said to be an old demon, what is the use of the so-called sect? You can become stronger on your own, but you have to join a sect? What kind of logical thinking is this? Just grab whatever you need...

After the war was over, it was as weak as a chicken and had no cards at all. Just like an old man commented before, open high and go low. My mother's younger brother also died tragically. Apart from reading books and other things, I can't accept the sense of substitution. If I want to appreciate literature, wouldn't it be good to read the four classics? It was rather uncomfortable to watch. I personally don't really like torture plots, or I don't like stiff and forced torture 😐. The above is just my opinion and represents my personal opinion.

Boss, the book is very good, but it would be better if Chen Chuyao didn't understand anything. After all, all immortal cultivators know that she is superior, but the protagonist taught her to cultivate immortality. Not only was she not excited, but it was also a bit of a drama because the smoke was fun. She is also a child who has suffered a lot and should know the importance of power. It is reasonable and she has the kind of eager pursuit of power. And although her parents have just died and left with the protagonist, her personality should be more withdrawn. I feel that she is too flowery. Regarding talent, it's also a little bit poisonous. It's unreasonable for them both to have extremely talented people and no one accepts them. They go to a distant place to participate in the Immortal Cultivation Conference, and the only people who can go are the young masters. Is it true that cultivating immortals requires money first and qualifications second? Looking at the first picture above, I feel that talent is very important. But the importance of talent is not mentioned later. It feels like all immortal sects develop according to fate.

I can't stand it anymore, because the main character's original mother and younger brother are both dead. To repay the woman who caused the original person's death, you would have died without the original person, which is equivalent to your savior. But now because the main character's original person's family is ruined, there is no protagonist to occupy his body. Although the original person is going to die, his mother and brother At least I'm still alive, but in the end you went to repay a person who has nothing to do with the original person and want to settle the cause and effect. It's really disgusting. If it weren't for Chen Chuyao, at least I could still read it. I feel very poisonous when I write this. This article itself is disgusting and I can't read it. Even if Chen Chuyao changes her settings, it makes me uncomfortable.

The protagonist does not reincarnate and starts the game by seizing the body. . .

So why didn't the junior brothers and sisters leave their contact information in the cave before reincarnation?

After reading Chapter 60, why not arrest someone and ask who entered the cave? Go directly to Qingli Sword Sect? ? ?

I'll update it once it's on the shelves. How many more chapters are there?

There are too many people. Write more and reduce the burden on the earth. It's up to you.