NPC from Novice Village

How should I put it? The author's writing style is quite good, but the problem with the article's conception is quite big. While he is clearly paying attention all the time, he deliberately portrays an indifferent appearance. Since you don't want to care, why are you paying attention all the time? This kind of portrayal can be less, you are not a nanny. There are also some places, such as Shen Xiaoshan and the mountain spirit, where there are too many characterizations in the early stage and a lot of pretentious plots. As a result, the ending is a bit anticlimactic. After a head-on fight with the protagonist, the film ends without even two sentences. There are some minor issues with the characterization. There is another point. Since your disciples are all big bosses, how can you be unknown and anyone can step on you? This kind of forced blood plot has been written by too many people in the past few years, so you can change your thinking a little. All in all, you clearly want to portray the current protagonist as an indifferent and uncontroversial old man, but in fact it makes people feel like a nanny. Things related to the apprentice instantly become a wet nurse, from feeding to wiping buttocks, and being manipulated at will. Mocking Yuan Pipi actually doesn't want him to waste his time, but your character is torn apart immediately. It is impossible to coexist with indifference and cold-heartedness. I hope the author can work hard. After all, when all these points are written, it is very rare that the writing can be so smooth and attractive. Come on! !

After reading it, the new book is passable, but some parts are too Riddler. I don't know if the author has not thought about how to write it or if he really intends to hide it from the readers. There is no introduction. In addition, the background of the world has not been revealed yet. I don't know if the author has seen Gu Zhenren. Without spoiling it, he can imitate and write an ancestral biography to supplement the background story. Also, the background of the protagonist is a bit vague. I know he is a time traveler, but I don't know what type. The above are just some of my personal opinions. If the author finds it useful, please refer to it. If not, just ignore it, or delete the post directly to avoid misleading subsequent readers.

Taking care of others everywhere, just like a nanny. He was actually threatened by a student. This was because he was cultivating immortality, not a servant who just thought he was a relative and went to serve him.

This fluent writing made me look forward to it, but after reading it, I really didn't know what the plot was about. First of all, the protagonist helps, of course you can help, but the result is a long-term calculation, and repeated pulls using the relationship between the characters, but in the end it is resolved directly by force. So what is all this going on? Secondly, people from various factions took turns to come on stage with their own plans. They were the Riddler, playing chess, and keeping pieces. In this regard, the protagonist was none of my business at one time, actively participated in it, and was forced to get involved at the other time. It was weird, not to mention, I wrote so many things and went so far, and finally I found out that it was just to send the protagonist out. So what are you doing with so many games? Is the protagonist's invincible power in Taoyuan ineffective against the white jade chassis? Is it because the protagonist has lived for 200 years and has no relevant knowledge? Or have you taught students for 200 years and can't find anyone to help? If your basic settings are not perfect, it would be weird to write those roundabout situations, and Chen's sacrifice would become a joke. Finally, the protagonist is like what was said above: one moment his attitude is that it is none of my business, but after a while he becomes willing to help others and takes the initiative to help, which is very magical. He seems to be a mastermind behind everything, but many times (including out of Taoyuan) he falls into the trap of others. Even the protagonist has made it clear that he may not care about the fate of those who live in the same hometown as him. So what are you writing about in so many chapters? If you sort out the plot, it can actually be written well.

Thanks to several readers who pointed out the problem to the point. I have tried my best to correct it while keeping the main line unchanged. {"NickName":"Practice poison and resist trumpet","UserId":388392218}{"NickName":"Looking at the rain through the cold window","UserId":225926067}{"NickName":"Ling Zhongjian","UserId":332780810} Special thanks to reader {"NickName":"Long Night","UserId":323434373} who has been paying attention to the book since its inception and often voted for recommendations. I am not against keeping books. If you think you can read it, just add it to your collection. If you think there is something wrong after reading it, I hope you can correct it. I used to write short stories, but I am new to long stories. There are so many things I need to learn. I hope you, the readers, will give me some advice!

The story is well written, but it's a pity that it's not a novel.

The book is okay. I have submitted it. I don't want to be a eunuch.

Looking at Yuan Wazi, who was rejected by other book friends, was like seeing myself. It was not about experience, but the ignorance and the idea of ​​wanting to climb up. When faced with the opportunity to climb up by choosing the death of his father, his and I should have made the same choice, but I was more considering whether to change, because the benefits were not big enough.

I have read more than 20 chapters, and the main thing is that the protagonist behaves like a coward. Although he is very happy to kill, he is always being plotted against. It is a bit unworthy of a setting that has taught countless geniuses after living for two hundred years.

I have been thinking about the evaluation of this book for a long time. I have many words of praise on my lips but I don't know how to say them. After thinking about it, there are only three words that I can't say out loud, that is...                                    I, first blood

I have just read Chapter 13, and the names are very confusing. For example, in Chapter 13, Shen Xiaoshan is sometimes Shen Cuiting, and sometimes Bai Yourong, which affects the perception very much.