Reborn, Starting in a Mountain Village World

The protagonist himself is immoral and always suspicious of others, which looks quite awkward.

If you pass with 60 points, I will give you 65 points. A few comments: 1. Your pace is too fast. It has only been a few chapters and you are almost going to be a ghost. Unless you plan to finish it in about 300-400 chapters. If you plan to write a long article with thousands of chapters, your current pace is too fast. 2. The descriptions of spiritual practice and the like are too vague, and the realm, strength, etc. Are a bit unclear. Many of them mention one or two sentences at the end, which makes people confused. 3. Your dungeon setting is not user-friendly enough. Not everyone has seen the old corpse in the mountain village, so you should design it before entering the dungeon and briefly talk about the plot, so that some people who have never seen the movie will not be confused. 4. The protagonist seems to be a little inexplicably confident? You didn't know anything at the beginning, but you had the courage to brave the ghost world? An out-of-body tour of Hong Kong and a glimpse of the Maoshan magician? It's a bit speechless to watch... What does he rely on? There are also some small points. Some of them were written down while reading, and some were forgotten later.

After reading more than ten chapters, why did it say that the protagonist's sister has gone offline? She is really a novice guide. When I went to the old house, I didn't even ask the seniors, I just went in. If you know that the protagonist is a novice, you are not afraid of death.

Ma Xiaoling

If you have any opinions, you can mention them in the comment area or in individual chapters.

First, hahaha (ಡωಡ)hiahiahia

How much money does the protagonist, who lives in a rented house, get so much money?

I really like this type of novels, but almost all of them are eunuchs. Some authors write a hundred or so novels and go straight to the palace. There is actually no point in writing a finale of 4 to 5 hundred novels. There are many ghost films in Hong Kong, but few authors write them well. In other words (the ghost film lottery system genre) is the most rubbish.

Don't write paragraphs in long paragraphs, it will be very tiring to read.