Taiping Collar

I came here to ask for advice from the author's comments. I only read the first chapter. Let me talk about the shortcomings. In the fast-paced era, most people read novels at a glance. However, when I read it, I didn't understand what was written at first, so I read it again word for word. The main events at the beginning cannot be placed in an eye-catching place. Readers can't understand and may abandon the book in the first chapter. There are also parts that should be briefly described, such as the storyteller's writing battle. The point of contention is too wordy, and then the author uses several words in succession, that is, Xin Qiji..., That... The author is not writing an essay (covering his face and crying), this part is too wordy, and most people like to read exciting articles instead of reading nonsense. Readers cannot continue reading if the storyline is not advanced. The first chapter at the beginning is not attractive enough, and many people abandon the book directly. Only the first chapter that catches the eye can keep readers. Of course, the author also has merits and his writing style is good.

It can be seen from the first chapter that you really want to write a more emotional historical article, and you are also developing in that direction. If you have a sufficient fan base, it's okay to write like this. But the problem is that there don't seem to be that many people who understand history. At the same time, if you don't have a fan base, then your fans come from a wider range of sources, including us who were brought in by you to ask for advice. The long list you mentioned is confusing to me, and I am only familiar with the following ones: Yue Fei, Qin Hui, Xin Qiji, and Lu You. So my advice to you is that when writing a novel, you must determine a tone. What kind of novel and what style of novel do you want to write? If you are sure that you want to follow this style, it may not be so easy to become popular, or it may not have many fans. Some people do read purely historical articles, but that is only if your plot has no bugs, your writing is fluent, and the plot is still attractive. Of course, what I am talking about is the premise for the article to become popular. If it is just a mediocre novel that is rated 60 to 70 points, it will be an ordinary novel on the shelves. You also need to have a few points that attract readers. Otherwise, why would readers continue to read and subscribe to your novel? The first chapter actually gave me a pretty good feeling. The description of the environment and everything else were okay. However, remember that the plot is the most important thing in a web article. You can make an analogy between Yuantong's new book "Embers of the Deep" and his previous book "Sword of Dawn". The attractive point of these two books is that while the plot is attractive, he always mixes in some descriptions of the environment, which will make people's eyes bright. It can be seen that environmental description is the icing on the cake, or the finishing touch, for online articles. If an online article does not have much description of the environment, people will definitely read it, but if an online article only has environmental description, it will definitely not work. Whatever comes to mind, I just read the first chapter. There are still 11 chapters left that I haven't had time to read.

Let's look at Chapter 2 again. The overall plot of Chapter 2. There are no problems, it is very consistent with the first one, and it introduces new characters. But it's still the same question as before, what kind of historical article do you want to write? If you want to write a more lively story, there is no problem in adding some plots with comedic effects. If I want to write something more emotional, it would be as black as black stockings, which I don't think is appropriate. Also, a level of martial arts appeared out of nowhere. It was not stated clearly, but was just mentioned. This makes us who are reading historical articles suddenly seem to have jumped a category. Of course, it may be your consideration that you didn't say it, because sometimes if you talk too much, others will find it annoying, but if you don't explain it clearly, some people will find fault with you, okay? This is a double-edged sword. There are problems on both sides, but it depends on how you arrange it to make it more reasonable and appropriate.