Start a Colony Ship

The writing is okay, and there is still a lot of room for improvement. I look forward to the author's next book.

? ? ? Is this a colonial ship? What kind of colonists are there with this configuration? Just rush to their home planet and take possession of it. When the fallen father comes, you dare to scold him 🙂🙂🙂

When you woke up... Has the Geller field on your ship been damaged? If it is broken, you may have been fucked by Tzeentch. The fact that you think you are wearing or being penetrated may be a false memory written by Tzeentch to you... You will find that the players under your hands have a smell of Khorne. That is when the warp demons under Khorne invade the material world in the name and identity of players... When the Emperor's glory cannot shine in this desperate starry sky When the warp F4 is playing with your soul with a hideous smile and you don't know it ... So, when you wake up, your soul no longer belongs to you... But belongs to the great existence deep in the warp... Finally... Praise the Emperor! FOR THE EMPORER!!!

The culture of Slaanesh harms the youth of the empire

Let me tell the truth, you, the author, cannot control group portraits. Stop struggling, the first volume is a mess. There's too much useless dialogue and it's too colloquial. What... This... Um... There are too many useless dialogues. The unnecessary bickering and Riddler seriously affect the reading experience. The plot is too scattered. As the author, you should arrange a step-by-step story development for the characters of your work, so that the characters can be shaped smoothly. Instead of a bunch of funny guys coming in suddenly. Where to chat. Maybe those characters are people familiar to the author, but they are unfamiliar to most readers.

I really don't understand why there is such a thing as a player. It was quite enjoyable to watch at first, but now I don't want to watch it anymore.

Why is it Eve's ship? It's so good to use the stars. A 300-meter frigate, an 800-meter destroyer, a 3-thousand-meter cruiser, a 10-kilometer battleship, a 50-kilometer flagship, a juggernaut with a long axis of more than 200 kilometers. The more it is, the bigger it is, the more beautiful it is. Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...

It was originally a group time travel, but now a group of players have joined in, and it looks messy. If you travel through time and develop well for a while at the beginning, it will still be interesting to travel to other universes.

Stellar players said they couldn't watch it at all.

I was really looking forward to it, and the first chapter was pretty good, but when the second chapter told me that it was about group travel, I instantly lost interest. If the author really wants to make money, he shouldn't write about group wear. This is a niche among niches. The number of readers who can accept group wear is much smaller than the normal size, and the number of readers is too small. If this book is not a group novel, at least it is a fairy tale for me.

Fake colony ship: no mission and large weapon configuration, real colony ship (used for colonization): the size of the sun, with tens of millions of G firepower.

The group of stars and sand glyphs is very abrupt.

I think the author's ideas and subject matter are good, but he still lacks some internal skills and can't write with that flavor (=_=) I can only hope that the author can write better and better. I am a poor reader, so I can only give you three recommendation votes, 😄

The Dilian League is extremely pro-foreign, the Human League is a military state, Xinghai is a giant company, Hyacinthia is going to take an unimagined road, repeating the previous route, the duplication rate is too high, and it is not easy to show its own characteristics. I'm done. I want to read the text.

[Small suggestion, may be added] As a Stellaris player, but also a reader. I think if the author wants to consider a wider audience, he can consider how to concisely reflect the setting and plot of the stars in the text. Because most readers of Qidian may not be players of Stars, and are not familiar with the unique settings of Stars, such as hyperspace channels, various ships, etc. In addition, Stars will weaken some factors in terms of reality for the sake of gameplay. However, for the authenticity of the story, the novel may also need to make some adjustments, unless you want to write it as a strategy game or data text.

You can only look at it casually, but you can't study it in detail. Mad's internal team members have not grasped the psychology of the group before recruiting players, and they have not even said hello to the earth. It is really an NPC. The integration department has not done a good job internally before recruiting new civilizations. It is really bold.

The hyperspace channel was built by the ancient empire (L Star Gate) connecting 1,000 nodes. Civilizations not born on these nodes are indigenous (I am definitely not complaining about a certain pioneer with excellent freezing technology)

Group wear? If there is really no good results if they wear it together, people's hearts cannot stand the test.

Golden seat? Golden toilet!

The fourth natural disaster is coming

Author, can you explain why you are not allowed to randomly create characters? I think male and female gender is not important at all. With the current development trend, the current ethics and way of thinking are likely to begin to disintegrate within a hundred years. When interstellar civilization is definitely not the state that humans can imagine at present, it is not a taboo for civilized genders who are willing to play with cloned bodies. I suggest that just like the 32 children, you can clone people as much as you like. As for any problems, you should be responsible for the consequences.