Full Level Mechanical Talent at the Start

After reading the latest chapter you revised, overall I quite like it, so I plan to write a book review to help you out. I think the overall story line is very good, the plot is also very simple and clear, the writing is pretty good, and the overall quality, at least I think, can crush a large number of people among newcomers. So, you don't have to be too impatient, think more carefully, and don't post a lot just to catch up with the progress, but make your updates unstable. Judging from the current situation, it is still worth pursuing. Tell me my suggestions First point: I think the grasp of the rhythm and overall context of the chapters you revised is much better than before. At least there are not a lot of messy settings and it is clearer. But you must not change it again in the future. I guess you are a newbie and don't know the impact on old readers. Since you are better now than before, I will forgive you for once (if you dare to do it next time, prepare to commit suicide) Second point: Regarding the system settings, I think we need to expand more. To be honest, many readers are addicted to settings, but if you are really not good at it If the system is long (you feel this way), don't add too many settings Third point: In terms of pacing, I personally recommend slowing down a bit and adding more transitions. Your writing is still good. Of course, this is a matter of opinion. Some readers just like a fast pace, but I think adding more transitional plots can make the story more tense and not seem stiff. The above are my thoughts. Of course, I am just a rubbish writer who has never even signed a contract, and I am not qualified to teach others. I can only provide you with some thoughts. I wish you a prosperous literary career.

I don't understand what the meaning of that woman is, is it Lily?

The revision of your book has caused confusion and loss of memory. When will the revision be completed? The book is a good book, but it makes people feel familiar.

The country has made it up, but the text actually still speaks Chinese? The currency is US dollars? Accepted

Are you ready to imitate "Super Mechanic"?

It seems that the changes were messed up by me. Now I don't know what they are.

After reading one or two chapters, the overall feeling is a bit stiff, which is understandable if you are a new author, but I have some ideas, whether there can be fewer firearms and bullets. I feel a little tired of looking at it. Although the firearms are indeed very strong, they are nothing more than fire suppression, and it feels like a flowing mechanical novel.