Log Cabin in the Rain

"This is my first book, so the description is too thin and straightforward, and thank you for reading. There are many insufficient descriptions in this book. For example, the character creation is not rich enough, the story is too simple, and there are no branches to control the plot. There are also some backgrounds and characters that are not clearly introduced. This book will continue to go forward, and at the end there will be a revision to add some descriptions in the previous article. Okay, let's stop here!" At 9:20 on January 10, 2023, Twilight Rules

This short story... Is really short Let me summarize it. 1. The writing is still too unfamiliar, and many places are not described enough and dry. For example, Luhun's drinking habit basically relies on Tom constantly repeating "he is an alcoholic". If there are some examples, such as when he drank for several days without eating. Or even describing it in another way, such as letting Tom say: "I feel like all the blood flowing in his body is wine!" Will be more vivid. 2. The character description is too flat. There is no description of the character in the whole text. Will and Betty did not participate much in the main event. Lu Heng's subsequent transformation was too blunt. Even if you describe in detail how high-spirited he was when he was young, let him compare it in his mind with his current depraved self. Instead of just mentioning that he thought about going into business when he was young, this change would be more reasonable. 3. The story arrangement is too simple, just a straight line, old friends meet. Adopting Will was too simple. It was mentioned at the beginning, but it didn't have much impact after that. How did he get adopted? What happened before you were adopted? How does he accept this new family? If it is not written out, this story line cannot be considered a story at all. Even if I just list it casually, there are so many shortcomings, but the advantages are also very, very prominent, that is, the author likes to write. Being interested is the most important thing. After all, judging from the author's introduction, he is probably not very young. He is probably only in junior high school. It is not easy to reach this level. What's more, this is the first book. The author may have better ideas in his mind, but he just can't express them. So it doesn't matter, you can practice slowly. Anyway, this is a good start. Come on.

Come on, keep updating every day.

I wish your new book will be a hit. It is highly recommended. Your words flow slowly like water, and people can always feel the ups and downs inside.