I’m an Evil God’s Devotee in the World of Immortal Cultivation

Let's talk about the two main problems of this book: 1. It's written in a way that readers can't understand; 2. It's written too hard The first three chapters of this book are still very well written, and they can be said to be the three golden chapters. Although I was very upset by the plot at the end of Chapter 3, this is considered a matter of personal taste and will not be discussed here. Here we discuss the two questions in the title. The first one is the key point, I will talk about it later. Let me briefly talk about the second point first, the problem of excessive force. Actually, I read the author's book many years ago. Just like now, the force is too strong, and the "drama" of the characters and plot is too strong, which is extremely unnatural. Generally speaking, a story must have climaxes and slowdowns, battles and daily routines, and tension and relaxation to be enjoyable. But it seems that the author lacks the ability to write a gentle plot that is interesting and interesting, so he chose another very strange path, which is to not write a gentle plot at all, and to "complete the climax". The story is always full of heavy-tasting material, including all kinds of heavy-tasting killings, various descriptions of severed limbs and internal organs, disgusting monsters, the protagonist is always on the verge of life and death, and all kinds of suspense to whet the appetite, etc. It is completely too hard. What's also over-exerting is that the character descriptions are also over-exerting. The female character has a life-and-death background from the beginning, and then she feels like she's completely devoted to the protagonist. Then let's focus on the first point, the problem of writing too complicated and readers simply can't understand it. This point should be more fatal. As we all know, the author's perspective and the reader's perspective are different. There is an information gap between the author and the reader. Many things that the author feels are very clear and understandable in his heart are unknown to the reader. Therefore, the author must explain more and smooth out the information gaps so that readers can understand what the author wants to express. This kind of explanation does not mean that the explanation of a certain setting is hidden in a nook and cranny of the text, and if the problem is dealt with, then the task is completed and everything is fine. The author's job is to [leave no stone unturned! Do your best! ] So that his content can be understood by readers! Different authors have different techniques in this regard. For example, highlighting key points through paragraphs, for example, foreshadowing multiple times or explaining multiple times, etc. Let me give you an example of how the famous "Lord of Mysteries" introduced surreal settings. He introduces a new setting, usually, someone else tells the protagonist a piece of information, the first time; the protagonist thinks about it in his mind; the second time; the protagonist tells others the information in the Tarot meeting, the third time; the audience in the Tarot meeting thinks and chews the information in their own minds, and everyone repeats it in their own minds. In this way, if a piece of information is repeated four or more times, readers will remember it no matter how poor their memory is! But even if the Lord of Mysteries uses various techniques to explain more, he still will not introduce a lot of surreal settings at the beginning of the story! It is basically 90% realistic and 10% surreal. Control the pace and slowly introduce settings. Wait until the readers have digested and accepted the surreal settings before continuing to introduce settings. In this way, the transition from reality to surreality will be smooth and readers will not be confused. In fact, most fantasy books are like this. They start with points that are familiar to readers and slowly introduce surreal settings that are unfamiliar to readers. Then talk about this book. The settings are crazy from the beginning, and basically every chapter will lead to a lot of new questions for readers! In the case of introducing a large number of self-created settings, the pace should have been slowed down as much as possible and a lot of ink should have been spent to explain these settings clearly to the readers. As a result, the author did the opposite. The plot was faster than a roller coaster, and the screen cutting was very frequent (few authors have ever dared to use this kind of screen cutting), giving readers no time to digest it at all! As a result, readers cannot understand it at all. For example, the transition at the beginning of Chapter 14. At the end of Chapter 12, the protagonist is still looking at the severed hand. In Chapter 13, the screen cuts to the enemy. In Chapter 14, the screen cuts back and inexplicably jumps to a dream. And what I had was not an ordinary dream, it was a bizarre time-traveling dream. The development of this "abnormality" exceeds the readers' expectations, and if something exceeds the readers' expectations, it is necessary to use pen and ink to pave the way for the readers to accept it. If the plot is not laid out well, the reader will be confused for no apparent reason. It is obviously not possible for you to just jump over without saying anything. Too hasty. If it were me, I would probably write like this: 1. First, at the beginning of Chapter 14, start from the time when the protagonist saw the severed hand, and write about how the protagonist returns to his residence. On the way, you can sort out and review the previous information through the protagonist's thinking, which is equivalent to taking the reader through a summary of the situation and reducing the difficulty of the reader's understanding. 2. After arriving at your residence, write about food and drink until you go to bed. And then there's the preparation for having strange dreams. Write about abnormalities while sleeping. The protagonist definitely cannot have such a dream for no reason! So you have to write down the reason or at least hint at the reason: for example, something given by Tianzun starts to shine, or something Tianzun said has an impact on your mind and leads you to a dream. Only by giving readers good expectations of this "abnormality" will it not be abrupt later. 3. After entering the dream, even if the foreshadowing of 2 is done, the reader will definitely still find it strange. At this time, you can explain it to the readers through the psychological activities of the protagonist. For example, the protagonist's psychological activity is "What's the situation? Why did I dream of this? Could it be...", And then the protagonist makes guesses one, two, or three. Lord of Mysteries often uses Klein's psychological activities to write like this. These are questions before dreaming. And the dream itself is also... It is very strange to have this dream in the first place. The "dream" itself is a burst of information and requires readers to digest it for a while. Then the content in the dream came up with a lot of settings, it was too urgent. The first time you have a dream, you can keep it simple, just make it acceptable for the readers to have strange dreams. Then after the dream, there was no relief at all, and the reader was not given time to digest the information. The plot began to advance rapidly again, and suddenly a new abnormal situation appeared. Originally, the readers had a lot of question marks in their minds, but the author felt it was not enough and continued to add more question marks to the readers. What happened to the protagonist after his dream? Why can't I move? Why do you feel wrapped in a membrane? What is a membrane? Who is close to me? Why can the body regain consciousness by pushing the membrane surrounding itself? There are other things like belly bulges, body ruptures, and seeing yourself in the back. Then he said it was a dream within a dream, and I was really confused. If it doesn't involve subsequent important settings, then just briefly describe it in two strokes and go through it. Why do you write so specifically? And if it involves important subsequent settings and needs to be described in detail, why don't we just write a plot, but immediately follow the dream with a lot of settings in the previous paragraph? Readers have not yet digested the previous content. A roller coaster has to go straight after a bend. Your story goes from one bend to the next, with eighteen turns in a row, and the reader is thrown away. Then the plot progresses by leaps and bounds, and every chapter is full of questions... For example, what is the power of the black shadow? It has not been explained? What is Nam Ji-hyun's ability? Why can the woman whose hand was cut off before be able to remotely control her hand? Wait, a lot of questions. Oh, by the way, there is also the fact that those things in the text that are incomprehensible are often closely related to the main plot. Unlike other people's books, you don't have to skip over anything you don't understand, and it doesn't affect subsequent reading. Actually, I think the author can focus on a few points and make them clear. Instead of introducing a lot of suspense points at the same time, all over the place. Also, the story really needs to be told more slowly. I'm afraid it would be too late to write 30 chapters of your first 10 chapters. Internet articles are paid based on the number of words. If you write more words, you will earn more. Why are you in such a hurry? To summarize, the author needs to make a lot of subtractions and simplifications to make it easier for readers to understand. At the same time, it needs to be watered down, slow down and then slow down again, and add a lot of foreshadowing and explanation to explain everything clearly. This does not mean that you cannot leave some things that readers do not understand as foreshadowing and suspense, but these should not be too much and should be limited. You have to fill the readers with a lot of things they don't understand in every chapter, and it will be difficult for them to read.

Some people say that they don't understand the God of Ke. Then someone used the term high-dimensional existence to describe it. The public still says they don't understand the setting. How can I understand the existence of a high-dimensional thing that I can't see or feel? I just don't understand, why am I crazy? Then, I thought back and took out advanced algebra... The matrix is ​​more than 3rd order, isn't it... But, if this is the so-called high-dimensional activity... It can really drive people crazy. Thinking about the calculation formulas and processes, and the torture, I feel the fear of the unknown (╯‵□′)╯┴─┴

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Let me tell you, the protagonist is a ruthless person, and he started talking about his teenage sister😱 which shocked me 🙂

🙂 This is another novel that uses the Western "Cthulhu" to defeat the Chinese fantasy fairy... This must not blow "Cthulhu" to the sky!

The book is a good book, but the title, introduction, and content give people a rather disconnected feeling. The title and introduction give people the feeling that the protagonist is cheating and pretending to be awesome, and is making great progress all the way. Therefore, if you look at the title and introduction, you will preconceptionally think that this is a book that relies on evil gods to cheat. This kind of person is more impatient than a cool article about reducing dimensionality and attacking the traditional cultivation of immortality. Most people will leave after reading the beginning and find that it is different from what they thought. Therefore, there is a high probability that those who like the title and introduction of the book will not stay, and those who do not like the title and introduction will not even take a look at it.

I'm afraid you don't understand the meaning of stir-fry

Female protagonist: Resistant, heavenly, and approachable, isn't this Klein🧐🧐🧐

Seeing Su Lin going through all the things in the Ant Immortal Sect, I had some thoughts. Of course, it was not the thoughts about "The Ant Immortal Gong has a wrong understanding of ants" published in the chapter, but the thinking about whether the "Yi Immortal Gong" can really realize a utopia if it is not controlled by "people with evil intentions" like the leader. Let me state my conclusion first, no. Because, Ant Immortal Gong actually integrates all the people who practice Ant Immortal Gong under the whole body of "people who practice Ant Immortal Gong". Such a macro narrative whole is even powerful enough to allow people within this group to eliminate all internal disputes. However, such a whole must be based on the fact that "someone has not yet practiced the Ant Immortal Kung Fu." Because the internal contradictions that were eliminated did not exist, they were just suppressed. The "internal morality" forcibly shaped by the Yixiangong practice group cannot really solve those contradictions. Without the combination of magatama and iron, those conflicts will only be transformed into external conflicts, and then intensify the tendency of hostility towards "groups that do not practice ant immortal skills". The product of the development of this hostile tendency to the extreme has also been reflected in our history - "Rites cannot be extended to common people, and punishment cannot be extended to officials". The "high morality" within a certain structured group, when the productivity itself cannot support it, is often achieved by shaping the exploited outside the group into "non-humans" - "humans" cannot kill "humans", but as long as they are "non-humans", it doesn't matter. Ant Immortal Skill is just like the Green Forest Consensus Algorithm in "Cyber ​​Heroes" next door - the Green Forest Consensus Algorithm was originally designed to unite all human beings through perceptual unity and make all human beings feel like one family, thereby completely abolishing the old collective cognition of countries and races that provide a sense of identity. However, the final result is a complete failure - the price of the Green Forest being as close to each other as a family is to be completely aggressive and destructive to groups outside this group. And when it reaches the upper limit of the number of people that humans can naturally know (generally speaking, it is the upper limit of the population of a small tribe, which is about 150 people), Green Forest will have to face "split nesting" - yes, an overly expanded group will overload human beings' perceptual and moral processing capabilities, so that they cannot allocate enough emotions to each other, which will lead to the outbreak of internal conflicts. The construction of "collective" inevitably requires the construction of an "other" to stabilize the "collective" itself. Therefore, Ant Immortal Gong is destined to fail to realize the utopia of all mankind, even if it improves many disadvantages that are not conducive to communication, it cannot change this.

Your first book was High Dimensional Hunters. It was very amazing, but unfortunately it was unfinished at a certain point. But for most of the first part, I think the quality alone can really catch up with the top 20 authors. Personally, I think the main reason for High Dimensional Hunters is that the world view was not well constructed at the beginning. As long as the book is doubled in length and the quality is maintained, it should be able to become a very good masterpiece. After reading the book to the end, I can feel your feeling of not knowing what to write, but I I feel that when writing weird books, the protagonist should never be invincible. In other words, I think the real problem with the book High Dimensional Hunters is that the protagonist is too confident and invincible. He should be a person who cowers slightly in the firelight and looks at the black people around him. Yami, the person who holds the Sand Eagle with only three bullets left in his hand should definitely not be the person who can entangle a large number of humans, establish an organization, and become a leader, because once humans gather together, they will be invincible, invincible, and there will be no secrets to write about. So I feel that in order to keep the darkness of the world overwhelming the sunshine, the human order cannot be too united. How to put it, after all that, I still can't forget the feeling when I first saw High Dimensional Hunter two years ago. The author is really capable of becoming one of those best-selling authors. I searched for the author's current book along High Dimensional Hunter, and there were only a few hundred reviews. In fact, I felt uncomfortable because he was the one who could write such an amazing book as High Dimensional Hunter.