Don't Wait in the Red Mansion

Drive high and go low! The opening background design is very good, the historical background, family background, and the reasons for the decline of the Jia family are all very reasonable. But the character is really bad. Who is the audience for a protagonist with this kind of character? If you are writing a book for college students, your protagonist should have the maturity of a college graduate, because no one will think they are stupid. So your character is very inappropriate. There are still some questions: 1. Recognition of blood relations. Any kind of marriage is a marriage between two surnames. In the ancient patriarchal legal system, the elders had great rights 2. Both mother and grandmother said that the four princes and eight emperors represented by the Jia family were political enemies of their own family. The protagonist also licked his face and forced himself on the women of the Jia family 3. As the prince of Wuxun, after returning home, he went to the Imperial Academy to read the Four Books and Five Classics? The country has just been founded, and the protagonist's father still has military power. Shouldn't he read more military books, practice weapons, and learn from Wu Xun's political experience? He went to study stupidly and found it difficult to understand. 4. How could a concubine come to Lin Daiyu's eyes when her parents ordered her to be a matchmaker? Just get rid of his father, right? There were a lot of young couples in ancient times. They didn't consummate the marriage until they were older. They had to fight with the Jia family. How many words are there? It's not appropriate for Lin Daiyu to call you a foreigner! 5. It hasn't been explained yet what the protagonist is going to do? Are you going to use the Great Thousand Mirror to interfere with the plot and gain rewards for training? Or are you going to rebel? Or will he inherit his father's title, lead troops in war, and use his golden fingers to strengthen his force? Or should I imitate Jia Baoyu and be a wealthy and idle person, and write a bunch of words about Yingyingyanyanshui? 6. The character is too bad. He respects the imperial power and rules. As a powerful person, rules are not only constraints but also privileges. The protagonist seems to have no understanding at all. I just lie down at home and study in the Imperial College. I have no idea at all I suggest the author reopen it! The background is also reused, and Goldfinger makes it clear. The protagonist is smarter (which can be reflected in adapting to the rules and using them to facilitate himself), and uses his power to overwhelm others (rich background)

The introduction is pretty good, but the content is a bit lacking. Especially the part about confessing and having sex.

She forced herself to have sex, she was so brave. . .

Red Mansion: Mo Dianxian Book Club: 703857463 My new book is in the process of being revised. All book friends are welcome to provide comments and corrections.

Is the first heroine Daiyu? Will he accept Baochai, Baoqin, Sanchun and other beauties?

Why write a lot of history in such an important place in the first chapter? ? ? Can't things like this worldview be put back later? Can't you just write the story? Readers' trust level is very low when they first read the article. After seeing a long paragraph of unpleasant world view/foreshadowing/background introduction, etc., Do you still want to retain readers? ! ! To be honest, readers, including me, must have found this book by searching for "Red Mansions" (you haven't recommended it yet, have you?), So what we want to see must be the plot about "Red Mansions", not some messy secondary setting. It's not that you can't have a second setting, but in order to retain readers, you must first write the plot of Red Mansions to attract readers. Red Mansion! Drama! I write so much because the author's words are acceptable and his attitude is quite good, so I can't bear the author to go astray... If you write it for your own entertainment, it doesn't matter if you ignore or delete my words. If you want to sign a contract and make money, let me tell you from the reader's point of view: readers will not buy it!

I read the latest chapter and it was boring. Why should you imitate Jia Baoyu, pursue him if you like him, and guess your thoughts again and again? .

The author, after the two updates today, I sent a small red envelope for recommendation tickets. Originally, I wanted to thank my friends who supported me! I also want to inform you. The result was gone in one second, so shameful! Not sure why this process can be so fast! ! !

The writing is strong👍but there are some exclamation marks that make the emotion seem a bit too much in some places (maybe it's because I don't read this much and I'm not used to it) In short, it's overall very strong (big cheers for the author)

First of all, thank you to all the readers and friends who have supported this book since its launch on July 1st. Yesterday, the book was recommended for the first time, attracting the attention of many readers, and there were also some comments about some chapters. First of all, it was the annoying chapter "Recognition of Family". After the book was signed, the editor mentioned that the character setting should be conducive to getting closer to the main plot. However, men and women cannot sit at the same table at the age of seven, women cannot leave the house without stepping outside the door, and men cannot enter and leave the boudoir at will. In the original novel, female characters rarely go out unless there are important events. As the male protagonist Xu Muqiu, he must have a suitable reason to enter and leave Jia's house, and his identity must be at least close to that of Jia Baoyu. As for the character of the male protagonist, the author's original intention was to make the male protagonist flesh and blood. He was set as a modern college student to Pingbei Hou Shisun. The change in personality must be due to his experience. When I first arrived in another world and saw the beautiful Leng Shen, I thought it was a normal reaction of an ordinary man. It was not a lustful reaction, but a subconscious reaction. It may be that as a newcomer, my writing skills are not strong, which makes some readers feel anxious. The author is even more anxious, so anxious to push forward, and the writing is a bit stiff. I also feel awkward, so even if it is recommended, I am not in a hurry to update, but calm down and sort out the manuscript. Next, I will slow down the pace and will not advance in order to advance the plot. I cherish every reader and friend and hope to write better works. Finally, I would like to express my gratitude again, thank you for your support! ! !

To be honest, I have been reading for a long time and don't know what to write. Could it be that the purpose of coming back from Wudang is to fight with others? Didn't he come back to inherit the title and carry it forward, and by the way inherit the foresight of the time traveler, the prophet is the first? ! ! ! !