Mr. LOL Key Bureau

The author is awesome and will be punished if caught with any opinions.

Your book is definitely not good. First of all, the subject matter is wrong. You describe too much about love, which is not attractive at all. It's not impossible to have a love relationship. Which LOL novel is not based on competition? Others will want to read it if it is more enjoyable. Moreover, your plug-ins have too many limitations. They are all heroines. Handsome and cool are the mainstream of boys' novels. You are not as good as a light novel.

This comment represents my own opinion only and does not represent the general public. The words mentioned in this post are all complaints, not rhythmic or weird. This review is like when you go to a restaurant to eat and the food is a bit salty. This feeling. This review is only for the protagonist of the novel and does not rise to the author of the novel. First of all, I have only seen Chapter 17, which is a bit unbearable in my opinion. There are two reasons. One is Chapter 13. Let me introduce the protagonist. When the voice communicates and teaches me skills and techniques in the game, I will subconsciously understand the other person as a person, someone who is relatively the same as me. The protagonist also said before that the opponent might really be Raven. The plot in Chapter 13 is that the protagonist bought a Raven bunny skin and equipped it with the bunny skin when sniping a big anchor. After starting the game, Raven was surprised and clearly refused the skin and said that he would not come out of the spring unless he changed into normal clothes. The protagonist said: Skin is a must, and you must win the game, otherwise I will not play games for the rest of my life and lock you in a dark room forever. At this time, I felt that the protagonist was extremely arrogant, that is, arrogant. The second point is that the breakup plot in Chapter 17 is that the protagonist broke up with his girlfriend in the original timeline, and was devastated after the blow. After traveling to the next timeline, I decided to break up with my girlfriend because of what I did in the previous timeline. She was indifferent in public, ignored my partner, and used the girl next to me as a shield to accuse me of cheating. In this timeline, the girlfriend did nothing to offend the protagonist. She got up in the morning and put on makeup for a long time to meet the protagonist in her prettiest and best-looking appearance. From my perspective on love, the protagonist can be said to be selfish. If it were me, I would ask Raven Equipment Bunny Girl's skin first during customization or human-machine training, or just show it to myself and wear it thickly for others. My girlfriend can break up in a gentler way. She can go to a milk tea shop and coffee shop in a less crowded place one night, saying that we are not suitable, and saying that I want to be the king of League of Legends! Sorry or something like that. It can only be said that the author's protagonist can be said to be selfish and arrogant. This is unacceptable.

This book is biased toward romance, and the plot of League of Legends is an auxiliary book. The book is also used to screen readers. The title of the book is the first, the introduction is the second, and the content is the third. It is recommended that the introduction be slightly modified. This is just a suggestion. Good luck to the author. (Too many negative comments)

What should I write about? If you don't know how to write about emotions, don't write about it.

Stop writing emotional scenes, it's too lame

This kind of subject book cannot be popular, at least the author cannot afford it, because... Too few people read it I know that the author is not technically capable of writing NB operations... But it is too niche Author, you should change the category, such as light novels

If you don't know how to write an emotional line, don't write it. Don't you feel uncomfortable watching it?

Heroes can be controlled by themselves, and players can click on them at will... Isn't this just scripting?

Also, the author's laning ability is really quite strong.

What did you write? What's the main plot? It's just the love life of the parallel import protagonist, right?

What's going on with Huang Mao? I feel like the yellow hair in the book, so disgusting.

It's off the mark, one of the worst, there hasn't been any plot advancement yet, I wrote a game after only 20 chapters, and I still lost, it's funny

Don't be too frivolous when it comes to relationships. The interaction between heroes is the most interesting. Take your time with family and love and don't collapse 😅

A bit too romantic

I am also here to support Sponge's new book. Ever since I read the author's "The Villain Fantasy Heroine Is Completely Collapsed", I have been attracted by the author's thinking. Now the new book is also about gaming and e-sports. For an old bookworm, this type of book is still worth reading. After a brief look, the author also used a brand-new way to write this book, using a parallel world and a new setting of game characters with independent consciousness to write a game competition book. It can be said to be eye-catching, and I sincerely look forward to Sponge's subsequent performance.

Sa Diao Sponge, I heard that you have published a new book. I support it. I must support it

When can I connect with Sacco? It can't just be a female hero. I want to watch Sacco talk about criminal psychology and the sword demon's madness.

The author's thinking is smooth and the plots are interlocking, making people read as if they are actually there.