Internet King: Start with Breathing Method

I chose this book title to compare it with another person 🤭

How much do you understand the characters? Can Qingxue be transformed by one person? Are you a decoration for that old woman Ryuzaki? She doesn't agree with your change. As the son of Nanjiro, Ryoma can be a first-year regular candidate. Others still pick up the ball. I don't know what you wrote. It's just a joke.

There seems to be only one word difference between this book title and the next door "Net King: Starting with Breathing Method" (ᇂ_ᇂ|||)

I really like Snake's Breathing, but the writing of this one is so confusing and the creativity is very good. Go check out "Starting with Breathing Techniques" of Net King. I feel like your writing is vague about your strength.

So is this plagiarism? 😏

The biggest shortcoming of this book is that it abuses the main character and ignores the actual situation for the sake of so-called mental growth. A few examples: (●—●) National-level doubles and Kanto-level doubles. In order to describe the growth of mentality, I just said that the arrogance was shattered by the Kanto level, and then the mentality grew and turned defeat into victory. I am at the same level, but even if I am arrogant at the national level, I can beat you two Kanto-level noobs, but I was beaten 5:0 because of my arrogance?

The author feels that he doesn't have a clear understanding of the strength of Net King's characters. You must know that Sanada, Yukimura, and Tezuka were already selfless when they were in Kunichi. It's just that Sanada and Yukimura disliked being selfless and it took too much energy, so they sealed themselves away. Then you said that I don't fully agree with their special skills, but it's not like they are nothing. Not to mention Sanada's Fenglin Volcano must have developed one or two moves. Then, the original author of Ninzu claims to know all kinds of special skills, even if he didn't have so many when he was in the first country, he could know hundreds of small skills. However, he was easily defeated by the protagonist who only knew one "snake" ball and his basic skills were not good. Now that I'm done, let me tell you something. If this continues, the protagonist will be able to reach the national level in a year and a half. What's wrong with you? As a golden generation similar to the protagonist Echizen Ryoma's generation, who among the ministerial figures has reached the national level without being the first in the country? Yukimura, Sanada, Tezuka, Atobe, Tachibana, Chitose, Shiraishi, Kite and so on. Then he talked about what counts as national level. In fact, national level is also the second creation in the fandom. But according to the description of the original work, the team enters the national competition, and then the players can use it as a trump card of their school to compete with other schools in the national competition. Those who can crush other famous players can basically be classified into the national level. To put it bluntly, this player is the first level in the country.

Xiang Ri: He is so cute, of course he is a boy

Haha, I just know that it is a mess that follows the trend of making a society eunuch. I wrote it without being familiar with the two worlds of Net King and Demon Slayer.

Emperor

Xiangriyueren꒰ঌ(˚ᆺ˚)໒꒱

Do you know why things are changing so fast these two days? Because the author was locked up in a small dark room by me, and if he didn't write, he wouldn't be given food.

Golden Koharu and Ichiji Yuji

To be honest, after reading it, I felt that the writing was too messy. I haven't even finished the snake's breath yet, but the sun's breath. The snake's breath is just a derivative of the water's breath, and the sun's breath has derived from all other breathing methods. Now that you know how to breathe every day, what other breathing methods do you need to learn? Then can a solar eclipse change the celestial phenomena? I remember that the abilities from different dimensions can't change it, right? You can change the celestial phenomena. How could Sanada go to such lengths to fight him? This ability system is really written in a mess.

"The fiery bond between movement and stillness"

Let me share my personal views Characters: I don't know what the author thinks. The protagonist feels a bit casual to me, and it doesn't leave a deep impression. Even if I don't write about his main perspective, I don't feel that he is the protagonist. There is also the protagonist's attitude towards the trainee reporter in recent chapters, from the first year to the third year, I can't say. It feels very poisonous to have this kind of plot here, and if it is done this way, Shiba Saori will be gone. Although she is indeed insignificant, she has experienced a lot with Inoue. In addition, other characters, such as Akutsu and Tezuka, are really poorly portrayed. For example, Akutsu, although the impression given by the original work is bad, is really exaggerated to smoke a cigarette in the first year of junior high school, and he also has to find a way to work to support his family. The portrayal in the original work later also shows that he has a bad temper and is easy to get angry, but he still has some good intentions in his heart. However, the impression here is that he is a street kid, and his character is also bully and afraid of the strong. He is completely different from the imaginary Akutsu. He also said that he learned Taekwondo to protect his mother. Moreover, he was rated as a once-in-ten-year sports prodigy by his companions. He was completely defeated by the protagonist without saying anything. It was not right to be beaten like this by Atobe, a freshman in junior high school. Even if he was really completely defeated, given his character, he would try to find a way to fight back instead of just running away in despair. Tezuka won't give examples, there are many flaws. I hope the author can do more research on the characterization of the original work. I have read a lot of fan fiction. Although the plot may be different, the character traits are still very similar to the original work. This change has really made the difference a lot. (What kind of idea is it to let Akutsu play doubles, and the character is portrayed like this, I really don't understand it, and I am directly poisoned) Plot aspect: I always feel that the rhythm is not right, and the specific details of the game are not developed very much. It is like a plot, and then I write a few sentences when the game comes. It feels that the main content is written in the training and training matches. It feels like it is not very competitive writing, but urban writing. There is no sense of place, and the underground emperor is a bit inexplicable. Also, the solar eclipse of the protagonist is really outrageous. You said that waiting for the other-dimensional realm to make the sky darken for those present, I can understand. This is mental power, but now it is written as if the protagonist really caused a total solar eclipse on the real sun, and it was the kind that everyone around the world could see (such as the chapter about hunting an eagle). Although there are many unscientific phenomena in the new King of Nets at the beginning, they are all limited to the opponent. If it is stronger, it is the competition venue. I would like to know how the author explains how the phenomenon of total solar eclipse comes about (the article says that the whole earth is dark like Dragon Ball Summons Shenron, and here is a total solar eclipse). Summary of my personal opinion: I feel that the author should first think about the matching of the character descriptions in the original work and some of the strengths and moves (complaining about Total Solar Eclipse again), and then look at how other fan fiction is written. Let's not compare it with the Breathing Technique book, but other newer ones like Genshin Impact, Stadium Emperor and Sharingan. There is a lot worth learning in terms of character description and some plot transitions. Because these similar routines and breathing methods are both similar, the two books will definitely be compared frequently. I hope the author can write down some of his own characteristics and highlights. At least for me now, there are more flaws and poisonous points. (I don't have much writing skills, so I just expressed my feelings after watching it, because I really like Net King, and I hope the author can write well)

The first four chapters feel like they are screening readers.

I felt that the final battle with Sanada was too simplistic. It would not be fun if the fight continued like this. The main thing was to win by such a big score. Although the original Wind Thunder Mountain Yin Thunder was only used in the finals against Tezuka, but I remember it was said in the drama that the Yin and Thunder were only sealed in order to compete with Tezuka. Does this mean that Sanada has already learned the Thunder and Yin in the first grade? I feel that this final wave can be arranged, even if it is just a prototype, to pave the way for the future. I also feel that Internet Kings watch a lot of TV dramas, and many people behind the World Championship comic are not familiar with it. If I want to write it, it is not very easy to write, and I am afraid it will alienate some readers. I still like Sanada very much, please strengthen it a bit, 😭