Tokyo Mystery Story

The first few chapters will drive away old bookworms, and the last few chapters will drive away the readers of refreshing articles... But it can be seen from the text that the author has read many books, and only such authors have imagination, writing style, and thoughts. I have great confidence in you and am optimistic about you.

Self-congratulations, just write them for yourself.

Sister, can you finish writing... I have already written two eunuch books.

Tell me something you don't like! Point one. The main character is too arrogant. Second point. The writing is messy. Begin the first chapter with a flashback. What happened next was a mess. The behavior is also very unrealistic and erratic. Description of the environment. The scene is very jumpy. There is no addition to the character's heart. Basically, I write whatever comes to my mind.

I can't stand it, I feel weirdly awkward

There is no outline. I just write whatever comes to my mind. It's so messy.

The first half of the plot will drive away those who want to read a good novel, while the second half of the plot will drive away those who want to watch a good plot.

I can't understand what's written. The first chapter is okay. I wrote it as the first one. It's pretty good. I'm confused about what's written at the end.

You can see a lot of what the author wants to express. The main reason is that the article is a bit messy and the perspective is not focused on the protagonist. But overall, this novel gave me a very good impression. Just a small amount of optimization is still needed.

Why does the protagonist pretend to be inferior in front of that woman, compared to his original image? There is no reason at all.

The writing is actually quite tasteful. It's different from the assembly-line writing, but it's a bit jarring to suddenly become a scumbag.

If the author feels comfortable writing, he doesn't have to care about the readers. If you want readers to follow it, the plot setting is crappy. The author's writing style and character creation are very wonderful, but the plot suffers from the stench of neon literature. In the first ten chapters that I have read, the protagonist is a bit scumbag in cheating the girl out of money. It would be okay if the girl had a normal identity, but she did that and asked others to make money for the protagonist. Is the time traveler going crazy, or is it a day of performing and integrating into the neon society? At the beginning, the protagonist Qingmei is wonderfully portrayed. The character stands upright, and the backhand throws a circle. Is this the indispensable condition of neon literature without broken shoes? Of course, the author is a Dark Flow Archmage, just pretend I didn't say that. To be serious and documentary, the protagonist should be made more decent, like Ergen's "The Immortal Rebellion" and "Seeking the Demon", with several tragic events. If I want to write a cool story, I will change the plot setting of Qingmei. Such a lively character will naturally be disgusted by the setting.

It's a bit messy, and why does the protagonist want to finish the thesis that he didn't finish in his previous life?

It can be seen that the author has a lot of knowledge and the description is very delicate, similar to the style of a light novel. But the character of the first protagonist is not likable and too disdainful. He uses the girl's feelings for him to defraud him of money. It doesn't matter how the other person feels about money. This is not a dark novel. The second plot description is too fragmented. One chapter writes this and the next chapter writes that. The structure is completely unreasonable. It takes some thinking to link to the previous chapter. There are too many Baidu-style popular science and detailed descriptions of irrelevant characters. The protagonist feels very marginalized and is easy to get tired of reading. Does the author have no outline?

I have read three of the author's books, starting with the last one, The Evil Dragon. First of all, I would like to state that I have not written a book, and the following is just my personal opinion: (Actually, I quite like the author's writing and characterization of the characters). Generally speaking, I personally think that the author has profound cultural background, clear narrative, smooth writing, and is not tiring to read. The author has a deep understanding of the myths and stories of various countries, and also has his own unique understanding and application of these stories. The storytelling also has obvious personal characteristics, which is what I personally like. But I also have a lot of doubts. First of all, the author does not like to establish a relatively fixed power upgrade system. The previous comparison of characters in the story is more like an animation, which blurs the levels between characters. But I'm not sure whether this is a good thing or a bad thing. Jin Yong's martial arts novels without a clear system are also very good, and the fantasy immortality novels that focus on qi training and building a foundation are also good. And I personally think that a complete power system can also attract people. This will not have a big impact on the author's own style. The author can still use combat styles such as wisdom to describe. At the same time, it can also enrich the various settings of this world. And from my experience of playing games, there are only two kinds of pleasure in the game. One is that my character becomes stronger, such as equipment upgrades, character level upgrades, etc., Or even though I myself have not become stronger, I use my own skills, similar to Souls games, to kill the boss. These two kinds of achievements and happiness. So I found that many novels are actually written like this. The protagonist keeps getting stronger, not only does he have new and stronger enemies, but he also constantly solves crises. Most novels seem to follow this routine. Although this routine is very cliché, I think it's okay. Of course, this does not mean that you must follow the traditional upgrade route. I have also read some other novels. Although the protagonist has become stronger, there is no obvious level distinction, but he does make people feel that the writing is not bad. I have to admit that sometimes it has to do with the subject matter. When I read the author's book, I still found it interesting, but the various plots and conflicts always felt not satisfying enough, and I always felt that the conflict was too limited. When I read the book "Evil Dragon", I felt that when the author was writing this book, the genre seemed to be constantly changing. It started with an ordinary fantasy theme, and then began to travel through various worlds. But the problem is that the world chosen does not seem to be very famous, or when the author writes about traveling through these worlds, I always feel that the protagonist does not know what he is doing, does not have a clear goal, or that there is not enough conflict with the characters in that world, and it does not make me feel that there is too interesting interaction between them. Secondly, the author does not seem to have changed much. They basically have a similar background (the one with the evil dragon is not). In modern Japanese society, the protagonist gains power through fantasy and conflicts with official power. But I think the background is a bit small, the fight is not intense enough, the excitement is not enough, or the pretense is not enough. Moreover, the author has mentioned that many of them are written now. I am a demon slayer in Tokyo, I am a monk in Tokyo, etc. You will find that most of their themes are about slaying demons and slaying demons, constantly getting stronger, focusing on daily life and the struggle with monsters, or they are invincible articles. And I personally think that the author has an advantage in writing these things. The author has his own understanding of various cultures and stories, and he has a certain background. If the author were to create and design monsters, wouldn't this be an attractive place? In other words, this is also a big advantage. Well, all in all, I personally think that the author does have some new ideas and has his own style, but it is exactly like what I said. At the beginning, but after reading too much, I always feel that it is very dull, especially in the middle and late stages, it becomes more difficult to attract people. Another very important point is that the opinions raised by readers may have certain reference value, but they are not the ones who wrote the book. You are the one who wrote the book. Only the author can do what the readers like to read. I mean these are purely my personal thoughts. (Disclaimer, the dog's head saves his life😂)

Why does everyone say it's a mess? I feel very comfortable just looking at it! I don't feel confused!

In fact, it's well written. I couldn't read many of the great books on Qidian. I enjoyed reading this one. The author has a lot of imagination.

Is the author still opening a book or finishing the previous ones, such as The Evil Dragon?

It feels similar to the writing style of the breakfast article I read before. Why not write it?

Actually, I feel like the previous story line is better abandoned.

In fact, the author doesn't need to pay too much attention to readers' comments. After all, there are people who come to eat shit, and those who watch it for free and don't return it are the same ones. There is no need to spoil them. For this kind of people, they like to watch, but not to leave. You must have a certain ability to withstand stress and write your own ideas well before you can make progress. You don't need to pay attention to those comments. After all, most people who read novels now have a similar understanding to Internet trolls. Come on, write your next book and write your own thoughts. Don't worry about other people's comments. After all, you can't satisfy anyone.