We Are a Civil Service Group

He is another self-righteous young writer who writes in a cloudy and foggy way. He thinks he is brilliant, but in fact he has no idea. Goodbye

It's so well written, it's good that you don't want to write it. Brother, you are a new author with no fan base at all. You did this chore at the beginning. Are you afraid that new readers will understand it? Your narrative angle jumps around, making people confused. What is going on? You don't explain the events at the beginning, how to use the golden finger (recurrent dreams), a hammer in the east and a stick in the west. I read to relax, not to burn my brain here. If you want to write a literary masterpiece, don't post it on an online platform; if you want to make money, write something that people can understand. If you are just happy for yourself, then I will respect you first.

A bookworm of more than ten years couldn't understand the first three chapters.

People say there are three golden chapters, but these three chapters of yours cannot attract people. The narrative is too vague. The timeline jumps too fast. Dreams and reality are blurred

Because the water is too cold and I haven't bathed for several days, my scalp is itchy.

It's so hot, it would be nice if I could share some of the temperature with Ming Mo.

Wang Mang, a civil service scholar, can directly replace Ming. It is too tiring to lead Ming. It is not worth it. Just destroy him.

Historically, when vicious industries began to flourish, it was precisely when great civilizations began to decline. When Rome abandoned the pride of warriors and took pride in luxury, it began to go downhill. When capitalism emerged in the late Ming Dynasty, those wealthy people from maritime trade supported industries such as Yangzhou Shouma. Ming Dynasty began to end.

The beginning is too stream of consciousness, and it seems to imply that this world is just a virtual world. I can only say that it is really unpleasant to write like this.

Who is the protagonist? . . It feels very messy

It feels like there is no main plot. After reading ten chapters, I don't know what story to tell.

As mentioned in the previous summary, the author and the reader think in different directions. The author considers how to express a story completely, which requires some writing skills, and then considers what is thoughtful, cool, blah blah blah. Readers read the book directly, so their first instinct is whether it is good or bad, such as the three golden chapters, and they decide whether to read it or not. Based on this difference, first of all, this article will go through the core, that is, change something to achieve different results. Although the so-called beginning of a dream is just for the character to appear with a reasonable identity, after all, there is no scene where modern people travel through ancient people. In my opinion, dreams are similar to the function of a system. You can check for deficiencies and make up for them. When logic doesn't make sense, you can use this to get around things. Actually, I didn't plan to write science fiction, fantasy, or any other fantasy, just to borrow a shell. I still like to pretend to be slap-in-the-face, happy-go-lucky, and laugh-out-loud style. There are two dreams at the beginning of this article. The first one happened when Wanli was about to die, and the second dream was to introduce the character Goldfinger. As for why they say they don't understand, I'm also very confused. Maybe some words need to be modified, but the logic is very clear. Or maybe a lot of time words have been added to the narrative, which interferes with the train of thought. I did use a lot of stream of consciousness in this novel. The stream of consciousness itself is the main narrative with flashbacks or interludes. The time may seem chaotic, but in fact the main timeline is very clear. This is based on the historical events in this article, and I am not pretending to compare. During the forty-eight years of Wanli's reign, many historical events occurred over a long period of time, ranging from several years to more than ten years. It is impossible to write clearly and clearly in one go. I don't want to start a new narrative line. It would be too procrastinating to write one hundred and eighty chapters for one event. So, stream of consciousness can express a complete event in a relatively small number of chapters, and it progresses normally. It is very effective and friendly for my novel that is not a grand narrative. I don't want to write a book that comprehensively transforms the Ming Dynasty. I just want to show a certain aspect of it and express it completely. Some people think that the Chinese is too literary. In fact, I write in vernacular and just quote some awkward memorials from Shenzong's Records. I cut off the sentences myself, and there may be errors. Wanli is a homebody, and his daily job is to read letters, reply to letters, and quote just to make the story complete. I'm also very annoyed about why he doesn't learn from Jiajing and at least meet the cabinet ministers. In subsequent chapters, we will try to reduce or simplify it as much as possible. Finally, don't know what I should write? Even if there is no explicit explanation in the first three chapters, there are hints. If you don't have money, think of a way. If you don't have money, think of a way. If you don't have money, think of a way... They are about how Wanli can't get along with money and how to get money. Okay, let's just say I don't know how to write a cool beginning.

I feel like the timeline is so messed up. There's no priority. It's so confusing to watch.

The literary and historical information is very solid, which is rare, but the writing style is not suitable for online articles, or even for publishing a book 🙂 Chun Chun loves to generate electricity.

I found that you are very good at choosing topics!

I can't understand it. The first few chapters are so confusing.

The writing is quite good, the author generates electricity for love, great

It feels like this is a group portrait article