Reborn: A Random Talent Every Week

①Rebirth line. The protagonist is reincarnated and plans to make up for his regrets + the warm dog food article about his current girlfriend + the girls (previous life) mentioned from time to time ② Extraordinary line. Martin's Morning + Official Organization + The End of Law (?) These are two lines in this book, but these two lines are somewhat... Separated (for example, it is very abrupt for the protagonist to celebrate the heroine's birthday immediately after fighting the vampires), and the author did not combine them well.

It is highly toxic, the subject matter is eye-catching, the content is all poisonous, there is no need to read it, the previous plot, novice writing, a lot of bugs, messy plot, vulgar development, all the mistakes that should not be there are all there. Only the subject matter is good, so it is better to start writing. Generally, few people can persist in reading. Even if the author writes well later, most people will be persuaded to leave the first part.

The first identity of the protagonist, a vampire, seems to be quite invincible, but it turns out that it takes a long time to beat him up.

Author, if you want to force the plot, don't use the word "China" to name the country, okay? The China you wrote is leaking like a sieve. Hundreds of vampires blatantly successfully entered China to cause trouble, which is not realistic at all.

The topic is very good, I thought it was about some kind of weird superpower, and then it was an easy everyday article. As a result, it turns out that for a long time, it was still the same as the vampire elf Taoist, the national superpower agency, the most nb old man in China, and the east and west were opposed to each other. . . Moreover, it is a 99-year-old old man and a young girl from a different family. Does the author want us to bring in a 99-year-old man? . .

This is my first time writing an original work. I found a lot of problems during the writing process. I'm sorry, everyone, please feel free to complain...

The content you wrote is too false. What can be changed in 30 years? Ever since you started practicing Tai Chi, time has long since diluted those feelings, and you still have such intense feelings towards that school beauty. It's so fake. Now that you think about it a long time ago, I don't believe you still have that. Also, the protagonist behaves completely like an adult, has no understanding of human relationships, and has a horribly low emotional intelligence. Slip away

I have read Chapter 20, and the plot is okay. The daily life of the school beauties is quite cliche, and it is not too poisonous. The 99-year-old setting is indeed problematic, and the main character's mentality is that of a young boy. You can delete the 99-year-old setting, it's not necessary, just write about terminal illness. The rest is fine. If I think of the protagonist as a young man, he won't be poisonous, but if he is 99, there will be problems.

After reading books for so many years, I thought I wouldn't be poisoned, but I didn't expect that this book would be a concentrated poison.

The plot is too toxic, the protagonist is played like a primary school student, and his combat power is greatly reduced...