Start Practicing from Immortality

It was also fifth yesterday, and it is still fifth today. Is it only viewed by five people?

No, it's too poisonous. All kinds of forced intelligence and sensationalism. The supporting actor was subdued by the three successful powers with one blow and was able to assassinate the protagonist in his prime that night. He was over 20,000 years old and didn't know if he was acting or he was really a holy mother. He was whipped for some supporting actors. It's so poisonous that I can't stand it even if it's acting.

I thought I was picking up people's wisdom, but I didn't expect it to get better.

It's boring after reading the first chapter! I have waited 13,500 years for a technique! How utterly stupid is this! The protagonist is a human being, right? Not a pig, right? Don't you know how to create exercises yourself? Isn't it possible to create the strongest technique even when you have wireless time? Hide yourself in a ravine and raise a group of people to specialize in experimenting with techniques!

As a cultivator, the protagonist cannot be seen to be cautious. He assassinates the emperor, wants to conquer the Nascent Soul at the peak of the Golden Core, and is confident that the Nascent Soul will not come out without cowardice after finishing the exercise. I came here after reading a similar novel, and the whole thing feels like an assembly line.

The Emperor's Tomb Chapter is really disgusting. Is this the person who was cultivated by the so-called big forces? Stop being funny, there is Ksitigarbha girl, she is simply mentally retarded, and she has her cultivation level sealed! Look at how she handles things and her ability to adapt to events. Bah, are all the big guys in the power blind? Choose her as their spokesperson! Really stupid

Lived for 20,000 years Also lived for 10,000 years in the secular world In the end, I still have an ordinary heart, I haven't seen through love yet, and I want to To be honest, it sucks

Plant a picture

It's far worse than my immortality in the world of immortality.

It's awesome. Cut it after one chapter is on the shelf. It's really awesome. Then you should consider cutting it after you look at your follow-up reading. Cut it as soon as it's on the shelf. Your editor won't bother to care about you in the future. Your attitude is too bad.

It was quite interesting at the beginning and was good to read, but from the beginning of the Zi Mansion it became vicious and watery. The little Kara who can kill with one sword can write three or four chapters. As exciting as it is in the front, there will be more water in the back. He has lived for 20,000 years and laid out the plan hundreds of years in advance. When he enters the Immortal Secret Realm, he has to write a burden just to pretend that there is a woman to avoid the shock, and there is no need to arrange such high-level enemies for the protagonist when he is not strong.

Don't look at it. It's really poisonous. It has lived on a dog for 30,000 years, which is not even as good as the 1,000 years of Emperor Shakti!

Alas😔! This chapter is full of forced writing. In terms of connotation, there is none. A favorite among novices.

I will live forever in the world of immortality.

Halfway through the book, I feel like I can't stand it anymore. The cultivation system is too confusing. There are golden elixirs, spiritual roots, and Zhetian. I don't know what kind of monster system the author wants to combine into it. It seems to be a reference to Zhetian, but the writing skills are not enough. The practice system and some fighting scenes are messy, and the descriptions are not clear enough. It is difficult to have a sense of substitution. I feel like I can't stand it. After writing it like this, I feel that it is a bit difficult to become a god.

The best part is all concentrated in the first chapter. In fact, when I first read the title, I wanted to watch the protagonist play in the human world. As an immortal, he has seen all the mortal world. In short, he travels everywhere, meets interesting people and interesting things, eats occasionally, leaves behind some wonderful legends, and leaves a deep impression on some people. As a result, from the beginning of the chapter on cultivating immortality, it is completely... Cultivating immortality, which is no different from other novels about cultivating immortality.

Throwing away some settings, the writing is still good. Just when I watched it, I couldn't help but feel very uncomfortable when it comes to the setting. The protagonist has lived for ten thousand or twenty thousand years, but the result is that he is still so rich in emotions... Reincarnation for hundreds of lives, that is, being a mortal for ten thousand years, constantly experiencing birth, old age, illness and death, and the aging of people around him. Death is enough to make a person's emotions become indifferent. Then there is the chaos of combat power... With the realm of swordsmanship, you can cut off the sword light without energy, and the peak of the first realm can compete with the peak of Qi training... This is what the world is like. The problem is that under the sealing spirit formation, a person who has not been practicing Qi for a long time can also 1v3 Jindan? After playing for a while... There is no spiritual energy in the combination, and the golden elixir is the same as the qi training that I just started? You don't know any sword skills or footwork, and your spiritual energy doesn't support your body at all? Or is it purely a blessing of longevity?

Another dead eunuch who cuts it off in just one chapter

The book is very good, but I hope to see three updates tomorrow. ()σ

A newly trained qi-training realm dragon set can block eight golden elixirs and a Yuanying for a period of time, and even inflict injuries on their bodies. This ordinary person can kill Zhuji.

A particularly big problem with this book is that of emotion. The author really wanted to write some explosive points, but in my opinion, what he wrote was not only neither explosive nor flammable, it was also embarrassing. I think the most critical reason for this problem is that the author has no foreshadowing. Emotions need to be laid. For example, if you want to write about a person, you not only have to write about him, but you also have to write about him in full, including his experiences, his pursuits, his changes in mentality, and even his appearance. You must first let readers have an impression of this character before you can write about him and create an explosive point for this. The most important thing for setting the stage is the number of words. For example, in the chapter "It turns out the rain hasn't stopped yet", the author used one page to finish the process of the bloodbath of the Immortal Sect and the theft of the Hand of God. If you just want to write about this incident and lay the groundwork, then one chapter (half a chapter) is enough. But if you still want to vent your emotions, such as writing about that little insect, Yi Fengliu, and Yuan Chonggang, it is far from enough. Writing a novel requires not only studying how to reduce the number of words, but also studying how to expand the number of words. Because the emotion expressed by the text itself is limited, when the author is writing, you may have a full sense of pictures in your mind, and the emotions you write will make you excited for a long time, but in fact, the expressiveness of what you write is not as profound as what you have in your mind. You think what you wrote is a movie, but in fact the effect is just a comic strip. Therefore, in order to enhance the effect of expression, appropriate foreshadowing must be increased and the rhythm must be mastered. That's it, I hope the author can gain something...

You fuck, you always give me a lot of surprises

I can accept the Riddler, but I can't accept pretending to be deep. When the protagonist encounters something he doesn't understand, his eyes suddenly look deep (but he actually doesn't understand anything): This is a game. Can you see me? ? ? The description of the fight is the same, He cut the air. The other party avoided. How could the other party? How could Zhang Wen do this? (Excerpt from the original article) I was so happy to see it.

Does anyone know what's going on now? Is there something wrong with the author? Or is it tj?

Why did he die? He was so beautiful

Why don't you want such a good thing? Harmful

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This book needs to be read on a rainy weekend. Slowly taste it, you taste it, you taste it carefully, you taste it carefully, one team is shortlisted, the second team is in the circle, three pairs are in the group, four pairs are introduced, five teams are recommended, and six teams are chasing books! ! !

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~