Got You!

My nickname is Yuan Yuan, and my friends all call me Xiao Yuan or Bao Baobao. This is where my pen name comes from. I am posting some of my paintings to see if they can make me more lively.

When it comes to writing a book, the author writes his or her own story, and sometimes makes some adjustments to cater to readers. But it's probably pointless to just cater to others. Some people always like to make irresponsible remarks and have too many opinions. When it comes to reading, just read it if you like it. If you don't like it, read other books. You can comment, but don't be too aggressive. If you insist on writing what you want, why not just write one yourself? Let the author write slowly and let us read slowly. If you can read it, just keep reading. If you can't, just leave.

The author must be writing for the first time. The author writes very well but the readers are speechless, at least I am. It feels like reading The Riddler's Diary. After reading my daughter's copy, I was confused the whole time. Mystery readers must get more information than the protagonist, including perspective, scene switching, communication between supporting characters, etc. The clues are both right and wrong, and only when the secret is revealed can there be an unexpected and reasonable feeling. This is called foreshadowing. Just like lying to others, you have to use various methods to make the person being deceived believe you, instead of saying "You believe me, I am right" all the time. Suggestions: 1. Give readers more information clues so that readers can make their own guesses, so that they will feel enlightened as the plot progresses. 2 The supporting characters are too active and the protagonist has too little sense of presence (especially the daughter copy) 3 The role of Xiaobai is very stiff. Forcing fun for fun

I always feel that the author has a feeling of self-pleasure, and the reader experience is not that good, and the dialogue is pale and naive, the script is a little short, and the supporting characters are slightly intellectually dull, About the Riddler I personally think that more riddles can be added to the villain, the protagonist is unnecessary, otherwise it will be too uncomfortable to read, just like the second copy, the villain looks purely mentally retarded The original script is a plus It is recommended that the length of the article be lengthened and polished carefully so that it does not appear too empty. Overall, it is worth reading despite its shortcomings. Of course, the premise is to read it as a good article.

I just finished reading "One More Person" and "Daughter", and I always feel that I have read the book but not yet read it, as if the author has written everything, but also seems not to understand anything. In this copy of One More Person, it can be seen that the author wants to be sensational, but there is no foreshadowing in the writing. I wanted to write about the harm caused by "big mouths" spreading rumors, but did not foreshadow the impact of the rumors on the parties concerned; I wanted to write about the horror of the "RTQG industry chain", but also described the cruelty of this group of people; I wanted to write about the deep love between father and son, but did not explain the warm daily life of father and son; even the last " "Secret Recipe for Resurrection" does not explain the cause and effect. It only writes that the father begged for it from the gangster boss. It is not known how the gangster boss got it. It is not known how the missing gangster son was summoned. There is no explanation of the father's psychological change from an old farmer to a corpse collector. The main theme is inexplicable. (I originally wanted to complain about her adding supernatural elements to the dungeon, but it was not reflected in the dungeon exploration. But after thinking about it, the coffin-like house, the fog around it, and the "oil lamp" lit by the father seemed to have given hints, although the hints were so dark that they were almost invisible) But in terms of reader experience, I feel that she wanted to write about broken beauty, but only wrote chopped onions. Then there is the copy of Daughter Daughter is the name of the copy, and the first seven chapters focus on describing the mutilation of the daughter's body and the strangeness of her environment. Having experienced the wonderful development of the last dungeon, I had already sketched out a story in my mind about a monster daughter longing for her father's love. Just when I was looking forward to the next development, it would be like Jing Yuan and Xiao Yun'er in "Wasteland Drifting", or Bai Wu and her daughter in "Doomsday Jigsaw Puzzle". The author writes that the protagonist discovers that milk powder is poisonous and all the children are poisoned. It turns out that my daughter is not a powerful monster, but a miserable and discriminated monster. Parents in the underground city have all been brainwashed and feel that they are inherently inferior to others and that their children become monsters because of their inferior genes (I will not complain about the extent of brainwashing to the point where they are played until they have no children and no grandchildren, and they dare not rise up and attack the people in heaven). Looking at the story alone, it should be a story like Vanishing Light where the whole city becomes a testing ground. I just started to wonder how the protagonist is going to track down the truth and uphold justice. The protagonist went directly to Tianshang City, and his teammates on the same team directly gave him the truth information (it was said that the people in power wanted to live forever, and developed a mechanical immortality and genetic immortality. The poor in Tianshang City used machines, and the people on the ground used genes. We poor people would not die well anyway). Then the protagonist was very angry and decided to report it? Then, after a wave of werewolf killings with teammates and players, the report was successful, and the mayor and chairman were put on handcuffs. The protagonist feels like he has seen the light of righteousness, and I was confused when I read the book. I thought I would see the original Arasaka Tower-style savior in cyberpunk, or the Silko-style resistance of the city dwellers led by the Twin Cities, but I didn't expect to see a game. The life and death of two million people are decided by a mayor and a chairman? Simply by arranging a regulation, millions of people on earth will be literally cut off from their descendants without any resistance? So many people have died, so many people are disabled, and no one at the top knows anything about it? Was it all hidden by the mayor? An uncertain genetic drug for all babies in the city to try? Are adults resistant to antibiotics or what? Can small-scale human experiments be done? Afraid that too few people know? Are you afraid that these low-class people will not riot when they see that our children have genetic defects? (They really didn't riot, which is outrageous) Besides, you, the mayor, are so awesome. You conducted experiments on more than two million people, and you are still afraid of reporting them? The protagonist can actually successfully report it easily? (I really thought that the protagonist had to make his own signal line to spread the news and report. In Disappearing Light, the protagonist risked being hit by a nuclear bomb to spread the news) By the way, in this copy, the protagonist shed tears because of the tragic story of the people on the ground, and decided to overthrow the superiors. But until the end, when the people on earth were poisoned the most, the people on the ground had nothing to do with the story of resistance. Even if the daughter was removed and the game started directly in the city, it would not have much impact. The protagonist just played in the city and killed the werewolves and it ended. The protagonist even felt that he should not tell the people on the ground the truth, for fear that they would cause trouble. I think of Luo Ji's anger towards the Trisolarans. Silence is the greatest contempt. Aren't the people on earth just such a background for the protagonist? There is no need to know the truth or anger, he just needs to accept the thunder and rain in silence. Even if the interest groups and the executioners did not explain anything, even if they found two scapegoats, the protagonist still feels the light of the right path, and believes that the so-called "United Nations" that has ignored (a generation of urbanites) for at least ten years can ensure that the remaining old, weak, sick and disabled have a good death. To be honest, I felt that the author was being sarcastic when I read it. Back to the title of daughter, there are twenty-six chapters in total, from one to seven. The author describes the strangeness of her daughter and her living environment. Then starting from Chapter 8, the daughter becomes the background story, the kind that may not appear in one chapter. In the finale, the protagonist expressed that he has become more and more affectionate for his daughter and feels like a father! I??? When did you secretly develop a relationship? Back to the story. . . When you become a father, are you worthy of the protagonist? The daughter is only 5 years old and is missing an arm and a leg. The protagonist scraps the black factory that can provide her daughter with a mouthful of food (can a 5-year-old make five hundred gloves a day? I can't guarantee that I can finish it in 24 hours now) and then gives the daughter's father an injection of poisonous milk powder. The real father, who was originally a fool, was paralyzed. While the protagonist talks about his reluctance to part with his relationship with his daughter, he leaves his 5-year-old daughter with a paralyzed father who needs her care. I saw my daughter crying while holding her father who was paralyzed "because the protagonist wanted to explore the world". The author writes that players will indeed not get hurt because someone will take the damage for them. I was indeed emotionally aroused for the first time. This was a real birth!! To summarize, when playing games, you should carefully conceive the logical battles of the game, and when writing the plot, write more about the joys and sorrows of the characters. Don't follow the player's style and create sensational plot stories, which will only result in pale puppet-like characters and birth-shaped protagonists.

I just want to know, do you insist on writing some sadistic plots? I'm not a pervert, I just read books to relax, not to torture, and the plot of the female protagonist and the male protagonist is really annoying, does it have to be written like this? Forget it, just wait for one copy, and then another one comes. Do you want to do the operation tomorrow after tomorrow? It's disturbing to watch

Love is mutual

I only read the first 100 chapters and couldn't stand it anymore. The author deliberately wrote the book for a specific plot. When the male protagonist entered the game, he didn't know why he didn't enter the novice dungeon that everyone would enter. This is a routine operation, not to mention too much. Then the first dungeon showed many points of the male protagonist's caution and careful thinking. As a result, after the dungeon was released, the first self-selected dungeon chose a medium difficulty and did not choose the only novice dungeon, which suddenly overturned all the previous settings. Anyone who is cautious will choose to enter the novice copy to collect more information at this time. There is an experienced player nearby who can stay in the novice copy to collect information. As a result, the male protagonist drifts away and reaches the difficulty level. The woman who was waiting for the male protagonist in the novice dungeon also had a different idea than ordinary people. She clearly had teammates there during the day but she couldn't find a way to contact the male protagonist. She went directly to the novice dungeon and waited without any communication. Everyone was mentally ill. Just wait until the male protagonist reaches the intermediate level and cannot enter the novice dungeon, and then describe a poignant wait, which is quite bad taste. If you think about the content of the game in this book, there won't be much problem. Once you start thinking about the characters of the characters, you will find that it is extremely awkward, the logic is confusing, and sometimes even conflicts.

I don't quite understand the author, but what does it mean to deliberately prevent the protagonist from having hatred for his enemies? As long as Hooligan Lu lives, this book will never come out. The purpose of several copies is to kill other players. Every time he wants to force the protagonist to death, the protagonist doesn't mind this kind of person at all, but just thinks he is a bit perverted? What kind of rubbish book are you writing? It's okay if you don't kill this kind of person. You also want the protagonist not to feel hatred. What a shame for you.

I feel that in the past two years, more and more people have started to squirt when they find out about male videos (is it an illusion?). I have been reading two or three of them recently and it is like this. Even the ones that originally had a good atmosphere, there is a sense of impatientness and the beauty of exposing one's ignorance. I just finished reading the first dungeon, and I was actually a little bit addicted in the first three chapters. I felt that the male protagonist was pretending to be bad. After letting it go for a while, I read the first dungeon. The more I read, the more familiar I became. I was very touched by the author's opening words (face covering). This writing style! ——Isn't it me?! Then when I went back and revised the article, I added a million details. The first article was really a lot or less. Alas, I hope that both myself and the author can make progress, increase the scope of the limit, and not be too wordy 😂 I still like Xiao Cheng's temperament, especially the empathy for the old man, I feel like The unique delicacy of the female author, and the praise of girls, I like to read it (raised tail) I have been disgusted by the XSR-style humor of male writers in the past two days and abandoned several books That is, Xiaocheng, don't be too pretentious, you will fall over (sigh) (wag your finger) (serious words)