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God's Righteous Companion, how old is the author? Are you still writing lines that are so mediocre? The protagonist is already a social beast, but after traveling through time, he becomes a middle-aged and middle-aged person?

The author was in too much of a hurry, and it felt like thin steel rather than text. Especially the fighting aspect was too sloppy.

It is recommended to add a lord farming tag. Just looking at the title, I thought it was just a fantasy adventure article. The result is that in a fantasy world locked in technology by the author, sci-fi equipment is developed through plug-ins, and then a power struggle for hegemony is established.

To a certain extent, the author is quite strong. Whenever you skip a chapter, you feel like you are reading a new book, which makes you wonder if you haven't read dozens of chapters.

Tell me what you think. The protagonist killed those evil mages without any explanation, just like the earth mage (80% of whom were persecuted, after all, it was a different world), but the protagonist's self-proclaimed righteous partner didn't even ask. The common man is not guilty, but he is guilty of possessing the treasure. The protagonist, who is only at the Black Iron level, exposes a gun, high alcohol and other things, but he is not afraid of being spied on.​ ​ In addition, since you want to develop your power but sell your own gun technology, doesn't this increase the difficulty out of thin air?

The pace is too fast and the plot jumps

Humanity's greatest and last ultimate blow, destroy it with disaster! ! Tian Ting No. アーゼウス! ! ! ! !

The writing is a bit messy. Not clear. Writing about the protagonist and the boss lady also reduces points.

I hope I can write my own style and works

You can take out the remaining bullets before the bullets are refreshed every day.

Just came from Mink Street😏

Slow down the pace a little, add a little more daily life and dialogue