Become Invincible from the Moment You See the Health Bar

Common problems with this kind of book 1. Over-leveling. The author over-levels things at the beginning and later finds out that he can no longer control them, so he uses various methods to under-level the book. Among them, making the protagonist lose his wits when adding points and using various coincidences to waste the protagonist points are the most disgusting to readers 2. The combat power collapses, the over-hang is too large, and the world view is designed to be too small. As a result, the writing power cannot be controlled, and it usually ends with a eunuch. 3. Not remembering the data. Some authors are lazy and ignore the protagonist's data, thinking that they can remember it with their brains and do not record the data in the document, resulting in some large and small errors from time to time when the protagonist updates the panel. 4. Plot design, some authors may suddenly have no inspiration and will use some outrageous events to promote the plot, but this will bore the readers Writers must be careful about these points, and I personally do not particularly recommend writing emotional dramas, and the 'sister' is really bad. Don't let the sister cause trouble (whether active or passive) and then the protagonist wipes the butt. No one likes this routine, just let her live a normal life and then slowly fade away. I read a lot of attribute flow system flow and yakuza flow novels that were originally good ideas, but because they added an emotional scene that the author thought was 'good', this novel fell off the shelves. Because when you write a love drama, you screen out more than half of the originally small readers, leaving only those who like the system and like your love drama. And after it is put on the shelves, at least 70% to 80% of people will go to prostitutes for free. After screening out more than half of the already small readers, you will then screen out 70 to 80%. Then subtract the commission from the platform, and you will hardly make much money. If you can't make money and don't have the motivation to continue writing, you will end up on the street. If you want to make money, be as pure as possible in a restricted circle, do as little as possible, and make fewer mistakes. Readers not only want masterpieces with millions of fans, but also food and fodder without poisonous points (the absence of poisonous points is a highlight)

This book is okay, I can read it But there are so many little poisonous points In the early stage, the male protagonist's sister purely relied on the halo of the protagonist, even in the later part, otherwise she would have been killed long ago. The male protagonist is not a treacherous person, but he is a member of a gang who runs casinos and brothels. He makes everyone laugh. His character is very contradictory. I hope the male protagonist is more cruel, so that it can be connected with those fighting scenes. The description of the battle is definitely not good for the male protagonist. The most outrageous thing is that the female character who has a good relationship with the male protagonist is arranged. I am really speechless. What do you think of this terrible street routine? What kind of logic can make a female character follow the male protagonist to commit suicide and then disappear? What kind of logic can make a female character happen to be born with a furnace body? You can't have sex in advance, otherwise you will explode and die. I don't want to read it on these two points.

It's okay, there are some minor flaws, but it's not a major problem. It's just the protagonist going to the toilet to upgrade. It's happened a few times. Do you think it's humorous? No, it's just annoying. And the Fox Skin Immortal Sutra will only make people think of the resurrection of terror and drama. I will compare, and to be honest, I will only feel that there is a gap between what you wrote. Totally unnecessary.

In fact, the core of system writing lies in the system, and the novel revolves around the system settings. The problem with your book is that although your system settings refer to many settings, there are still loopholes, and to a large extent, they still suppress the protagonist's strength. Let's not talk about why the protagonist, who has been criticized many times in the text, does not practice archery. Let's take the experience of killing animals as an example. Before it was put on the shelves, the protagonist himself also thought about gaining experience of killing fish, but he did not proceed. The reason given was that killing fish in the river was too troublesome. Then why not dig a small fish pond at home, buy wild fish from fishermen and put them in? Is it troublesome to kill fish in a small fish pond? Your chapter clearly states four points of experience for black fish and three points for crucian carp. How many fish can you buy with the money you have on hand? Couldn't the protagonist have imagined this? The most popular system flow in Qidian right now is proficiency. Why? Because he has solved many previous system setting problems very well, it is generally difficult for readers to complain and find loopholes. It is recommended that the author write the proficiency level directly if he writes the next book.

The writing is okay, but there is something wrong with the brain of the protagonist in your setting. The attribute points for upgrade are destined to be rare, and the upgrade will definitely become more difficult as you go to the later stage. Since skills can be upgraded with practice, the skills can be upgraded with attribute points both inside and outside the words. I didn't expect the proficiency to increase. I didn't expect the protagonist's imagination.

Yahuazi laughed out loud. Although it was a little watery, it was not bad

Think about it, a dart was sent out earlier, which was a life-saving job. Normally, it only cost one tael of silver, but this was only five taels due to an unexpected gain. When going up the mountain, if you are accurate, you can just pick up a bow and buy a few arrows for three taels of silver a day. You have to work hard for this little money? And none of the experienced hunters here can use bows and arrows, right? He has no accuracy and no hunting experience. One rabbit a day. The protagonist is holding a bow and has a see-through device to kill indiscriminately. Is the protagonist a sharp archer? 😒😒, I just want to know what the basis is, let alone the question of how much money can buy...

The biggest poisonous point in writing Jidianliu novels is the confusing data. The author really poisoned me. The 5 attribute points from level 2 are gone when you upgrade to level 3. There are only 5 points from level 3. Have you eaten it?

The writing is good, but the plot is terrible. The main character is passive and just goes with the flow. Shouldn't the protagonist find the best goals and methods to gain experience? It's also indispensable to build up power and cultivate subordinates. It's very useful whether it's finding skill pills, collecting information, or protecting your sister. There is also the fact that the whole world feels too isolated, the spread of information is slower than in ancient times without extraordinary beings, and it feels unreasonable to have families doing business everywhere. Finally, the officialdom is very weak and has no sense of existence. Why is this human race not extinct?

The protagonist killed an adult insect on his own. Although tigers are not very scary creatures in this world, they are still tigers after all. They are dangerous to a certain extent, otherwise the government would not reward him with a reward. Several gangsters who usually show off their ferocity know that the protagonist killed the tiger, so why would they provoke the protagonist? The biggest characteristic of little hooligans is that they bully the weak and fear the strong. Even if they have no brains, they should know that the protagonist is not easy to mess with. Are they seeking death by provoking the protagonist? I really don't understand this brain circuit. The same goes for the companions of the protagonist at the beginning of the dart game. Although the crazy maniac was injured by others, it was the protagonist who made the final move. The companions seem to have forgotten the same thing and are very disdainful of the protagonist. Want to get some benefits from the protagonist? What kind of brain circuits are these? Do people in this world want money rather than their lives? If that were the case, they would have rebelled long ago.

Try not to do these pretentious and slap-in-the-face scenes all day long! I started to subscribe, but writing like this all day long has completely lost my interest in subscribing!

Killing people outside is fine, but killing a senior brother in a family is a bit inexplicable. Even if the senior brother gets the senior sister drunk, the crime will not lead to death. The law of the family is to beat dozens of sticks to the sky. Normally speaking, it is not easy for a master who teaches boxing to train a senior brother. If you are asked to kill him casually, this master also said that he killed well. I really can't understand it. That Wang Yan killed him secretly was reasonable, but it was really unreasonable to kill his senior brother openly and openly in front of his senior sister.

The theme of the Yakuza's rampage and killing is a hot topic. This book is okay as a background reading, but it is not recommended to read it in detail. It is best to read twenty lines at a time or listen to the book at high speed. Don't think too much about it, otherwise it will be difficult to read. The beginning was pretty good, but I almost thought I was watching the Martial Saint of the Ten Directions. The births, relationships, growth trajectories, and advancement events of the characters are almost exactly the same. They just changed their names and changed the cheating device. Fortunately, the difference was written after leaving the novice village, but the intelligence is getting more and more serious, especially for the villains. No matter how strong the pig's feet are, no matter how weak he is, if he sees all the pig's feet and takes off his brains and goes up to do it, even if he is killed instantly, he will have inexplicable confidence in himself or a certain superior at the moment before death. The supporting role is slightly better, but he will also rush up and shout 666, sighing that he is almost better than me. Pork trotters are not much better. When adding more points, we never consider maximizing profits. The author has written so many books. The routine of having fun for the sake of fun is fine, but you can't force it all the time, otherwise it will quickly lose its appeal. I hope the author can calm down, add some IQ to the characters, try to figure out the rationality of the plot, and be strict in logic. Don't keep a running account just for the sake of word count. Remember to write something like: When you see a glass of water, say oh ~ I understand, this is a glass of water! I believe the results will be much better, and the improvement of writing one book in this way will be far greater than stacking four or five books.

Although there is no acute poison, there are a bunch of chronic poison spots

Is the protagonist from a slaughterhouse? Killing people is all about crushing and blowing up the brain. Has the author seen the head explode or seen the scene after the big truck runs over the person?

It's a good book for beginners, and even old bookworms who are short of books can read it, but don't read it with your brain in mind, otherwise you won't be able to read it.

The ghost plot made me increasingly visually tired and uninteresting. The Zombie Land and Wizard Town were of no help or benefit to the protagonist at all. It would be better for the author to tell you two more short stories besides this novel. The plot unfolds when you meet someone. The background plus a conversation leads to several chapters. For example, the part about getting the demon flower. In my opinion, the plot with Zhao Xiangyi and the others is just a trivial matter. It is just a matter of picking up the demon flower in the mountains. Another example is the plot of Fairy Qin who just came to Qingzhou Continent and lost her memory. It was uninteresting, not to mention the impact on the progress of the main plot. It seemed redundant and did not help the protagonist. In my opinion, it would be better to just briefly touch on the strong points of Fairy Qin writing about negative things. I think the author's writing style is very good and his insights into life are also very rich. However, I have to complain that this novel does consist of many stories with different backgrounds, but it still gave me a repetitive feeling.

Everything written in the back is broken, all kinds of logic are wrong, I have forgotten my realm, so I won't read it.

Subscribe to a chapter specifically to comment: Why don't you split up after killing someone? We all know the experimental change time, but don't know how to deal with it? Don't talk about double experience, just say that the sect disciples who leave the factory at the beginning are not processed near home. There is also a bug in the settings. No one knows the time of change, no one studies it, but they don't know if the monster transformed from a corpse? No one takes precautions? There are still many parts of the description that are not clear at all, especially the ruling class, which has yamen but no administrative agencies? Writing about anarchy?

I just want to ask him where is his eldest brother? I wrote about the eldest brother and the little sister, but I haven't seen the brother yet until it is about to be released.

What's written in the front is pretty good, but what's written in the back? Why.

After four months of killing in the ghost realm, my experience points were upgraded from 6,000 to 9,000. All I killed was air.

I just read it the day before yesterday and I thought it was okay, at least the first chapter didn't drag on. The protagonist also kills decisively without any hesitation. Why does it feel normal for the protagonist to cut all the way down? Because there is a blood bar

I don't know what I'm writing at the back. It's really hard for me to read.

When I saw Chapter 141, similar plots and similar plots were repeated over and over again, just with a different map,,, it was boring.

All kinds of forced plots. Cynicism

What the hell is she writing about? The more I read it, the more I want to scold you.

What military attache at the beginning looks so much like the lime warrior saint who got away?

Chao Gai attacked Zengtou City and was about to die from an arrow. He shouted: "If he catches the one who shoots me to death, let him be the Lord of Liangshan Po." Song Jiang was unhappy. Chao Gai's funerals, from the Song Dynasty to the Ming Dynasty, all wore filial piety; the small bosses and all the minions also wore filial piety headscarves. Lin Chong also offered the oath arrow in front of the spirit. You Lin Chong, who has a leopard head and ringed eyes, thinks that he has a better chance than me in martial arts, right? Song Jiang was even more unhappy. After the funeral, Lin Chong, Gongsun Sheng, Wu Yong and other leaders discussed and established Song Gongming as the lord of Liangshan Park. The next morning, Lin Chong spoke: "Brother, please be the master of the village, and everyone will listen to your orders." You Lin Chong, who seems to be a loyal and good man, offered the oath arrow to the soul yesterday, and today he wants to trick me into breaking my oath and ruining my reputation, right? Song Jiang was secretly angry. So, attack Damingfu Lin Chong was left to look after the house. Lin Chong went to Zengtou City and was left to look after the house again! Shi Wengong was killed to pay tribute to Chao Gai, but Lin Chong was sent to guard outside the stronghold. Attack Dongping Prefecture and Lin Chong serves as Hua Rong's bodyguard. After attacking Dongchang Prefecture, Lin Chong still served as Hua Rong's bodyguard. "A generation of god generals has been lost to everyone since then." Chao Yu sighed softly: "It's a pity, it's deplorable, it's hateful" Want to make changes?

Damn it, it's a waste of time.