Elf: Red Trainer

How can I put it, it's a bit forced to level up, and the writing still needs to be polished. If you don't know how to write characters, you can weaken it and highlight the battle, cultivation and imagination. You can read the book with krypton gold. Your character descriptions are honestly very awkward. And what I can't accept the most is that your green caterpillar evolved directly without any cultivation? Not even a few additions. Others who are poor people who have not failed to use Unicorn Worm are at the same level, and even kill enemies beyond the level. Without a system, they can play the thread-spinning insect bite to perfection. They learn the power grid, develop electrical attributes, and even lose their money before evolving into pupae. You have not failed, let alone killing enemies beyond the level, and are in the forbidden realm. I am afraid you have been killed by someone overstepping the level. It's not like we don't have money to buy resources. For example, the tentacles of the green caterpillar can emit odor and resist enemies. This can be expanded (from the brainstorming of the boss). There are also tentacles that can touch objects, feel airflow, smell various smells, develop the mind, see, hear, and even make a paper drawing. After hardening and developing it, it becomes iron blocks and armed colors. You can learn about the pupation and emergence of insects in nature, as well as the fantasy of shedding their skin, about nine lives and nine deaths, experiencing great terror, and nine transformations into chaos. Don't be limited by local moves. If you learn the power grid and get the electric attribute, you can develop some kind of thunder armor, three-level swords, etc. Your evolved Bad Butterfly is definitely stronger and has greater potential than your ordinary evolved ones. After evolving into Bad Butterfly, it will take off completely. Start with the wind and add three powder combination skills for basic operations. Butterfly dance adds a buff, insect buzz adds ultrasonic chaos and debuff, plus charming, feather perching, ultimate absorption, sucking kiss, etc. Learn some things, don't fight the opponent head-on, release poison, fly a kite. (Anyway, I can add some) The protagonist also takes supplements or joins Baobao and the like, he is too wimpy, even wimpier than Shi Yu. You can get the money by playing games and learning from Teacher Lu's gauze baby cup. If you can't write the emotions well, you don't have to write them. Just be a ruthless tool. How can you, a trainer, get so many dramas? The main reason is that now the protagonist loses his physical strength every day. As a player, I am really anxious. Everyone is already in Ultimate Body. You lazy guy is still relaxing and sleeping. If I have a system that has enough physical strength, I will have to fill it up even if I scream. I will fill it up with everything I can. If you're afraid of not wanting to train, just say you don't want to train and don't add points. There are many elves who need to add points. Of course, the elves are all naive, and they will definitely repay you with a peach in return. I failed and still looked like those who said that if I could go back in time or repeat the exam, I would definitely do well in the college entrance examination, but ended up sleeping all day and waiting until the last hundred days to read.

I feel that the writing is a bit messy. I suggest you slow down the pace and sort out the plot. I feel that if you continue writing like this, you will not be able to avoid Cavan. The character of the protagonist is a bit confusing (the protagonist should not be just a ruthless tool person, but the character image is not clear). The elves have a large combat power span, and then there is the issue of combat power. The pace is too fast. What do you think of the strength of the university team? This is also something I hate. It's a poisonous point. You can't compete with the elves behind by random passers-by who have resource elf talents and can open up the protagonist's elves. Someone said before that you don't have to go out of your way to suppress your combat power, but you don't have to let yourself go so much. This is unreasonable. The savings of the protagonist's parents for more than ten years are not as good as the protagonist's search for a few treasures. This unreasonable world background will either be diluted later, or I suggest restarting it directly.

Jiangjiang is here, bringing fried dumplings, noodles with soybean paste, hot fried dumplings with scallions and egg custard to support her. I strongly support the great book, yeah yeah!

I don't care about the protagonist's emotional problems, but the more I watch Bada Die, the more unhappy he becomes. If the protagonist hadn't added some points, no one would be able to help him, he's a professional level. Now Baddie is still acting out because of the protagonist's emotional problems, and even secretly talks about the protagonist to the team members. He doesn't care who laid out his growth path, because he asked for the dance of the phantom butterfly. It's okay to say a few words about the protagonist. After all, it's also a part of the entire group, but can it stop being so arrogant all the time? Now it is still serious about business, but if we don't stop it now, there is no guarantee that it will show its temper in the future. The author wants to prove that ordinary Pokémon can also counterattack, but can this description not be focused on Baddie who is about to counterattack? The experience of counterattack alone is rich enough, and there is no need to add other things to it. This period of being petty made me feel uncomfortable. This bridge can also be written on other Pokémon with good talents and need to be educated.

By the way, does the author plan to cheat the protagonist by giving him a recipe to start a company? To be honest, many of the protagonist cheats in this kind of elf novel are tall and tall, but they can't change the fact that the protagonist is a poor ghost. The protagonist can only have money to raise his own main elf, and the protagonist is not a strong orphan at the beginning. There is an open source avenue for parents to manage their own efforts to cultivate elf, and solve problems such as resources. Can these parents also be rich people and live a better life? There is no need to work for others. Even if the protagonist is not short of money in the future, he will not become a strong person. At least it is of little use to the protagonist now. Since he does not plan to be an orphan and strong person at the beginning, he has to solve family problems. Also, don't you plan to give the protagonist a wave of power? Later, I want to write about how the protagonist can protect himself from evil forces, and the elves can use all their strength, like some silly thing in anime has the power of a wave-guided hero, of course. You can write that you can become an invincible strongman like Chi Ye in less than a year without doing too much. Having said that, this system is far inferior to Chi Ye and I feel that plug-ins are a bit useless. Chi Ye is really awesome. Maybe he can catch other mythical beasts except alpacas. It depends on whether the elf ball can hold such powerful mythical beasts. You can press the special chapter. Like Guliu Big Mouth Bird and which water fish were both caught🤪

In fact, I want to read the elf text of the red lineup, let alone Pi Shen. I was the first to play Pokemon in the past. How can I count if I don't have a Pikachu in the team? Lao Feng is his biological son. Three championship lineups have him as the main force. He can fight, scout and lead. Garlic Bastard, fight in wild group fights, open a hardened plant, three powders, various recovery, top-notch monster clearing, and strong survivability. A turret like the Water Arrow Turtle also has a little meat and is extremely comfortable. It is not bad for any generation of the Kanto Royal Three Family. Lapras, 2 championship lineups, a king main force, a must-have for private yacht travel, and it is also okay for playing dragon type. Not to mention Big Kirby, a must-have cute thing for a macho man, it can fight, it looks good, and it can also be used as a sofa. Let's not talk about the sun elf, is there anything wrong with petting a cat? Still a super cat.

I have abandoned it for more than half a month. I just saw it when I saw Conquering Bad Butterfly. Now I clicked back and read the reviews from book friends. Sure enough, I am still dissatisfied with the plot of Bad Butterfly. The other contents of the novel are okay, but I can't accept Bada Butterfly. Isn't this reason too far-fetched for saying that I don't want to make Marsh Jumping Fish sad? Is it okay to keep a Bad Butterfly as a pet? Can't we just give it basic food and let it live a normal life without wasting time and resources on nurturing it? This is really a bit intellectual! To be honest, as long as Bad Butterfly is around, I can't stand it. I can accept another insect-type elf. Isn't Big Sting Bee delicious?

By the way, the author, you gave the protagonist a main position to a green caterpillar. What do you want to express? To express that even a green caterpillar can defeat Rayquaza? You want to express that the plug-in is so awesome that even a green caterpillar can evolve into Rayquaza. To be honest. I'm really speechless when I see that the protagonist must collect a green caterpillar (if you wrote such a bad plot, it means that the protagonist must do it). To be honest, it would be better for you to have a leather god. Seeing the protagonist like this, I feel that I really have no expectations for his third elf. Maybe the next one will be Lada. I feel that this green caterpillar is really disgusting. You haven't met the pink devil egg yet, after all. The novel is written by you. You can even accept a monster like a green caterpillar. Why is it a little lucky egg? And after all, few elf novels write about this kind of elf. After all, the powerful auxiliary cow is still exclusive to Joey. This is how basic elf novels are written. No one has ever thought of accepting such a super team doctor.

I can't stand it anymore after reading Chapter 8. It's too vicious. I was a sophomore in high school in my previous life. Is it possible to hit someone so hard? Is this what the author is like? He beat people to bleed for the slightest mistake. That's awesome.

I think it might be better to change the introduction. It looks awkward and a bit like a wedding vow 😳 (I almost got embarrassed, so please give it a try)

By the way, how does the author plan to help Ba Da Die improve his qualifications? Ba Da Die is becoming more and more like a hindrance. If the protagonist spends too much time on it, it will be unfair to other elves.

The author's protagonist, the elves, are so differentiated, right? The strongest ones are almost at the top level, and the weak ones are still kids. Chiye is not as differentiated as you are. Although some are the absolute main force, they are really similar. If you don't upgrade a group quickly and get to the Swampert, how can you fight with people of the same level in the future? Even if you can fight more than one, six elves can help in team battles.

I find it weird to have two boats in the Elf World (personally, just check it out🐶). Do the protagonists and Swamp Monsters really have a spiritual connection? It seems like there's nothing wrong with it, but it feels weird.

Your current average order is around 100, how about you combine it and send it together, so that the average order can be increased

The main thing is that Baddie cannot accept it. Wouldn't it be better if he wanted to support him with a wind fairy or a hairy troll at the back? Everything else is just okay, right?

Team Space, Team Sandstorm, Team Sunny?

Do the lineup have these elves?

Doesn't the author consider some powerful elves? Baddie and Charmander can be replaced by a Vulcan Moth, and fire, insect, and super skills can be used.

By the way, isn't it Bada Hu? How did you become Baddie?

Say! Love me!!

Do you want me to wait until after 11 o'clock again?😭

Isn't the Wave Fist an exclusive skill of the Swampert in Guandu?

It's a direct two-female lead, with a little emotional drama occasionally, and the rest is just fighting. I just like to watch those guys who are pretending to be sluts, kill them if they can, and kill them if they can't. I don't care about life and death. If you don't accept it, do it!

When will the author's new book be released? ? ? ?

This is equivalent to the real world. Don't you engage in polygamy?

Dear author, could you please tell me if I need any relevant knowledge to write Pokémon fan fiction? (I only know part of the plot and the general world view and setting)

The elves look like humans, and Shui Yueyu is almost like a fantasy human.

There has been no update for two days. Is this going to the palace? ? ?

I think Badadie can use a magic butterfly to control and assist in one.

Why is it not updated? Three months of perfect attendance is gone? Didn't meet the 500 uniform requirement? Don't be a eunuch