A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality: I Have a Heaven-Palm Bottle Too

The most poisonous thing is Tianlinggen. . . . He was accepted as a disciple by an old guy who had no hope of forming an elixir in the foundation building stage. Alas, the original Tianlinggen was one that formed an elixir and rushed to accept disciples. The most rubbish Tianlinggen is that there is no bottleneck below the Nascent Soul. It is equivalent to the peak of the Golden elixir, and the success rate of breaking through the Nascent Soul stage is 20% higher. It's too poisonous, this old guy has no chance at all

How can I put it, the author's idea is quite good, but the character of the protagonist is not clear and too impetuous. After reading the original work, I am still not wary at all. Maybe you want to write the protagonist's growth step by step? You can add some mental description and write out your mental journey. The latest one is probably because I didn't write it down later, it feels a bit abrupt. Come on, the subject matter is very good. Mortals has become popular recently if I write it and it will become popular.

How can I put it, the author still has no idea about the Tianling Root. As the owner of the Tianling Root, the protagonist is definitely an ancestor of Linghu who went out to recruit disciples. He is also a late-stage pill-forming monk. How can a person in the middle stage of foundation building accept the protagonist as his disciple? If he does not die, he will definitely be a Nascent Soul monk in the future. Oops, the writing is a bit unfamiliar. Moreover, the protagonist has a sky bottle. How can he be worthy of being in the middle stage of foundation building?

You, the protagonist, are not even worthy of carrying Han Li's shoes, with such a character and such a brain. The original work appears in three chapters and must die.

There is no heroine, so you don't dare to seize the opportunity, saying that you are afraid of ruining the plot. In fact, since you time traveled, you have already ruined the plot, and you are timid in doing things, fearing to steal other people's opportunities. Fortunately, the author knows that the book he wrote is a little bit poisonous. I hope the author will continue to work hard

It's so difficult to defeat the seventh floor from the tenth floor. Why don't you just go in and attack directly? You talk so much, and you spent all your time at Qixuanmen like an idiot.

Can you accept Chen Qiaoqian? It's such a pity for anime.

This is the worst mortal protagonist I have ever seen. He has a Sky Bottle and a Heavenly Spiritual Root, and he is so miserable that he can't beat anyone.

Author, why don't you write a fan novel about a mortal with an intellectual protagonist?

The writing makes no sense. The character of the main character couldn't survive the first episode. It made me feel uncomfortable watching it.