There's Something Wrong with My Female Apprentices

... It's chapter twelve, and the first disciple hasn't started yet. Isn't your progress a bit too slow?

It's originally a light-hearted and joyful book, and it's not about hard-core cultivating immortals. Why is it so frustrating to get into the plot? I'll wait until the beginning of the revision to read it again.

The author's writing is really not good. The first 14 chapters are all about recruiting disciples, and there is nothing exciting about it. It's really easy for those who are impatient to leave.

Daily poisoning, real poison, Shen Nong tasted hundreds of herbs, took a bite of this poisonous grass and died on the spot

The conflict and bet at the beginning of the recruitment of the disciples were completely unnecessary It felt like the author forced the protagonist to commit suicide and then tried to keep him alive It was very unreasonable.

I had to feed it to death. It's a good thing I didn't read it, otherwise I would have to send the author a machete again.

It's too time-consuming. Your subject matter only needs to show the cuteness of the female apprentice, the interaction with the protagonist, and the deterioration of filial piety. Simplify the rest if you can. Whether it is the world view setting or the plot, it is of no use. I directly said that you are a useless spirit root, but I am willing to accept you. The female apprentice agrees, and then returns to the sect with the protagonist. The door can be completed in three or four chapters. After that, the protagonist gives things, breaks through, and teaches the apprentices. The apprentices make rapid progress, and then lead the apprentices to show off. Ten or twenty chapters are enough. After that, they recruit new apprentices and repeat the same operation. The Shura field begins, daily, and dungeons. In the first hundred chapters, it is basically decided to accept a few apprentices with different personalities. 😅

There is no chapter left and all have been ordered. You would be very sorry if you cut it off😓. It is undeniable that this book is not as good as the previous one (so far), but in reality, many books look more like things than the starting point. Although it has a brainless system that I am particularly disgusted with, it still has some brains when combined. If the score is poor, there is indeed a suspicion of authorship and delay. If you cut it off like this, it would be really disappointing. The story line has not collapsed, and the plot can still keep up. It is actually good to carefully plan the outline and study the content and plot carefully Okay, come on, author.

Either have more fun in daily life, or write seriously about cultivating immortals, and don't make up for the show-off routines from 20 years ago As a weak chicken protagonist with a thin skin and big stuffing, the routine of buying exercises and malicious bidding with others to pretend to die, spending a lot of money, and then being robbed is not exciting but only mentally retarded And the show-off plot is extremely blunt

Sorry, I will die when I see the bet😭😭😭I can't stand it

You are so good, you have written 14 pieces just by recruiting disciples.

Accepting a Disciple in Chapter 13, I didn't even get started.

I can't tell what's wrong with it, I can only say it's a waste of life.

To be honest, I was scared when I saw this book not updated for seven days today. It was the first time I invested in a new book, and the investment failed after not updating for seven days. Actually, it doesn't matter. Unfortunately, I can still read some of this book to pass the time. However, the result is that this book will be discontinued. I am unspeakably disappointed. I have ordered it all so far. Please let me know if you want to discontinue it or continue it. It is very annoying to open the starting point and wait for the book every day. If it is discontinued, I will delete this book. If it is continued, please update it quickly. I am very impatient.

It's not the finale. Let me give you an update? At least I can give you an ending!

There are too many typos, punctuation marks, and incomprehensible English words popping up. You don't even have time to read it over after you finish writing? ? ? It made me sick🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢 🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢 🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢 🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢

This kind of novel should directly describe the daily life with the apprentice, instead of delaying ten or twenty chapters before starting to accept the apprentice.