The Human King Body in Zhetian

After a cursory look, there is always an indescribable feeling. The most important thing is that the dialogue between the characters feels too rushed or something, which is not good. After awakening the memory of the Immortal King, he does not have the demeanor and strength of the Immortal King. He should be more calm and composed, but the words and description of the protagonist do not reflect this at all. The overall style is... Funny? Probably so. Anyway, it has nothing to do with the identity of the Immortal King. I don't like it very much.

Liu Shen is the heroine? Are you not mistaken? Creatures that have reached that state will not have any thoughts of male and female at all, and enlightenment is the only goal. If you want to write fan fiction, just write it well and avoid making a fuss.

Come on, finally the personal king body is here. I am a little uncomfortable with the group of personal king bodies.

Brothers and sisters, sign up immediately next week. Hurry up and count the coins with your first bite.

Let's put away that forced and inexplicable emotional line. I know it doesn't sound good, but it looks like a person is enjoying themselves, and the embarrassment is about to overflow from the screen. You can feel at ease! Write more! Write more about monasticism! Stop jumping back and forth between love literature and cultivation civilization (cover your face and laugh and cry). If you don't believe it, look back and read it yourself. Half of the book is currently written about this female protagonist (maybe) who has abnormal thinking ability. I dare not say most of them, but there should be quite a few people who don't want to see this. In a big world that can be said to be cruel and ruthless, and people will do whatever it takes to make the ultimate leap, some people are stupid enough to engage in love brain. The painting style should be basically correct, rather than distorted into weird shapes, like you are practicing again, and then there is Yin Qingwu in your article next to you, acting like a fly and a steam girl in your ears. It's not that you can't touch the emotional line, but it's true that your description is not very good. Why don't you make a big change? Just cut off the emotional scenes and arrange less intersections. There are a lot of reasons.

Come on and update, Zhetian's favorite thing is the Human King Body

Due to the epidemic, the signing may be postponed. So, the price of this book has been temporarily reduced from 4,000 per day to 2,000 per day. Improve quality. If there is an update, you have to ask about the epidemic. ಥ_ಥ

Um, how should I put it, I can't guarantee four thousand a day, but I can still guarantee two thousand in two days ๑v๑hehe Then, I really don't have much inspiration lately ಥ_ಥIt's not that I'm lazy

Did Shen Nong test poison? ? ?

As long as I sign the contract, how about I invest 100 points?

You'd better keep Yi Qingwu's appearance rate down, not many people like her!

Let me go, investment requires level, and the newbie will be slapped in the face

Keep it up first, maybe there will be surprises

As long as you keep updating, your results will definitely be very good.

Will the protagonist go back to the ancient times to find Shi Hao, God Liu and the others?

Will the two Xu Xings become one in the future?

Come on, write, don't be a eunuch, I will chase you

Am I the only one who can't read Chapter 16?