My Cultivating Immortality Game Can't Be This Fun

Highlights and flaws are more obvious. The writing style is relaxed and the theme is clear. No one of the authors is like other newcomers who are stupid and awkward in their literary youth. The segmentation is okay. The computer version looks fine, but the mobile version is a little longer. The writing style is a bit immature, but it does not affect reading. The disadvantage is that there are no advantages or strengths. Every part is bland, and no one has any eye-catching highlights. Of course, there are also newcomers who have no good skills, but they honestly follow the template and write the same signature. That kind of template, what is cool, and which group of people it attracts are changing year after year. But as an author, your creativity is your own, and you have to find your own fun point, not a vague gimmick. The book is called "My Cultivation of Immortality Can't Be This Fun" But the author must confirm what is fun. When you conceived the first game, it was "Plants vs. Zombies". Was this the result of careful consideration? When designing this content, were you so amused by your own inspiration that you couldn't help laughing? Are you confident that it will attract editors and readers? In my humble opinion, I didn't feel the fun when I read the first game. It's like completing a task in order to complete it. After a short process, the game is over, you get the reward and leave. This could also be a problem with Plants vs. Zombies itself. There is no confrontation, no excitement, and no witty points. Apart from the sentiment, it has nothing to show its charm in the "novel". The performance of spiritual plant cultivation technique is quite interesting. The fact that sunflowers can help the protagonist return to blue is also a novel point. But it's not enough. The humorous design is a bit too deliberate. Play jokes in moderation. And this "Coach Xiaozhou" There is a passage in the article where Xiaozhou sends away a client with a big belly. "The sweat stains on the cheeks of the two people that have not yet dissipated show that they have just experienced some kind of intense exercise." Is the meaning of this paragraph a little ambiguous? There should be a certain amount of humor when making jokes on the sidelines. It would be fine if he was just a passerby. The problem is that when I saw three chapter titles with the word "small boat" in them, I almost mistakenly thought they were female supporting characters, and I felt a little uncomfortable. If you were a passerby, why did you give three chapter names? A bet is just a bet. I specifically added a person's name to emphasize how important I thought this person was Writing it down any further would be a bit nit-picky, so let's leave it at that. The writing is not bad, but it is not excellent either. If there is no interesting plot later, all I can contribute is collection and encouraging recommendation votes Come on, author, a mature writer is not accomplished in a day.

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Is the real world a single method or a resurgence of spiritual energy? Author

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