The Boy Who Traveled Through the World

Don't think that you can write a good book if your sentences are smoother. After reading three or four chapters of this book, I felt that it was awkward everywhere. The dialogue between children was inconsistent with the times and age. It was very blunt. When I saw five yuan buying fish for several days, what did I want to do? The normal logic is to get one without paying, or to pay to buy it when you go to your hometown, especially when it is a huge sum of five yuan. At that time, the monthly salary of temporary workers seemed to be only 18 yuan, and buying oil, salt, sauce and vinegar was divided into units. You can tell if a book is good or not only after reading a few chapters. This book is full of bad things. Just try to be a perfect worker, there is no future.

This includes the entire fishing team, the school, the tofu shop, and the hotel! What era were you in? Not to mention that even a community committee or a provincial committee would not dare to agree to your doing this, okay? A little brat does this and that! Do you think it's possible? In which era, who would dare to believe it! Who has the guts to do it? ? ?

The writing is quite good, I just hope it has a single female protagonist, Zheng Juan, and the protagonist should not be too busy. Watching TV makes me really feel sorry for people like Zheng Juan, and in my understanding, it is very uncomfortable to have a playboy-like protagonist in a novel with a strong sense of the times, especially in this special time period.

A social veteran who was once unconfused, his IQ dropped sharply after his reincarnation, and he was like a child again. While showing off his cleverness, he was like a monkey climbing a tree, showing his stupidity clearly in front of people's eyes.

I couldn't watch it anymore from the time Director Qu came to the government. The sense of déjà vu that the old man at the door chatted about national affairs to the inspecting senior government officials was too nonsense. He was obviously talking a lot of rubbish that was unrealistic in times of discord, but the supporting characters gave a deafening performance. The protagonist's IQ failed, the supporting character's IQ dropped to zero, and he was forcibly fed poison. There are three chapters in one, and there is a follow-up that can't be skipped. It's too depressing.

​ ​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​      It was well written, and some flaws were okay (too clever), but suddenly I wrote 2 pictures of some kind of fox shadow, which made me confused, and I didn't know until I saw the ending that I had to do a time travel. All kinds of strange authors spread poison in all kinds of strange ways. If you are just writing for fun and what is on your mind, then just pretend that I didn't say anything. If you are making money, then I wish you good luck.

There is another time traveler, and I also wrote about Bright Sword. I'm confused about whether there will be more time travelers in the future. I can't stand it anymore and gave up.

The golden finger is too strong and you can't control it.

It was confusing to read, and the setting was sixty years ago. Then it started with the protagonist traveling through time, becoming a ten-year-old child, and being adopted by the Zheng family. From the front, it looks quite normal, but from the back, I somehow let myself go. It's so foggy that I can't see it at all. First of all, I want to complain about one thing. Since the fishing team has cooperated with the streets, is it still necessary to secretly use the space to catch fish and sell them on the black market? There is also a bright sword world background that suddenly appears, and the protagonist obtains all the memories of a suspected former owner of Goldfinger with the tiger head mark. There is also a pile of materials left over from the Japanese invasion period in the space. There is also Grandmaster Tai Chi. Then there is a paragraph about the reincarnation of the adjutant of the Liangjian instructor? He didn't show up for a long time. I don't know if it will appear later. After that, I paid for a construction team to build a bunch of six-story houses for the villagers to live in. Also has more than a dozen dogs. The more I write, the more confused I become, and the more I write, the more messy I become. Seeing people confused. The reason why it has not been put on the shelves is because of these things. There are too many settings and too many outrageous things.

Brother, can you check the era before writing the book? In 1963, I was given 5 yuan for buying a few fish! I would like to ask how much the monthly income of a two-income family was in 1963. You can check it out and ask! ! ! Don't make people feel too embarrassed

The more it was written, the more mysterious it became. The male protagonist looked like a magician. He couldn't stand it anymore and gave up.

I won't say whether the content is reasonable or not. At worst, if you write it randomly, I will read it randomly and pretend not to know which era it is from. But the protagonist's mouth is so rude, I really can't stand it.

A little kid has to talk to adults about big things every day. It's so childish.

The front is okay, but someone's memory pops up in the back, and there's also a time traveler.

After reading the previous dozens of chapters, it is acceptable to be one, two, or even three or four steps ahead of others of the same age to do what you should do at that age. After all, you have family background and other things will be taken into account by others. This one or twenty steps ahead of others can only be said to be too magical.

The protagonist starts opening schools and restaurants at age 10? Are you sure you're writing about a ten-year-old? How can a director compare with your 10-year-old child?

I don't know if you are a new author, but Qidian. Com is very friendly to new authors, that is, someone will point out your shortcomings in the comments of new authors' works. Other websites will not help you point out your shortcomings. You must know that Qidian has a large readership, but it is good if five out of 100 can speak. If he can speak, it means that it represents the thoughts of some readers, so if you can see these problems, it is best to correct them. If you can't change, you should also think about how to get closer to the more popular thinking instead of writing a personal work.

It's so well written that I can't understand it. I'll leave it to those who are destined.

You're a little confused here. I feel like the protagonist traveled back in time before the founding of the People's Republic of China and fought in a war. Later, he lost his memory and turned into a child and was picked up by the Zheng family. He was also an instructor and the Dragon King with a crooked mouth?

The writing is a bit hard to understand. The protagonist has a very weird personality. It seems like the author is enjoying himself. I don't see this situation in books like Chen Dong's Mao Ni elbow. Therefore, the author's writing is anti-reader.

Today I wrote two chapters about the three children of the Zhou family. It was so exciting! It has content, humor, and thoughts. The key ideas used to break the situation are amazing, and the personality of the protagonist is basically completed. Furthermore, since the article was published on the 8th, there have been nearly twenty chapters in five days, which is a lot of volume. It is a period article, and the whole text does not have any anger at all, which is rare!

It would be great if Zheng Juan got married and kissed her even more

When reading a book, look at the heroine first. If the heroine is well chosen, readers can't live without it.

It's a mess, no clue

I don't know what I'm looking at! Sorry

Alas, there is a reason for poor grades

What a great article. It makes my heart warm when I see it

Since the beginning of the plot, everyone has been speculating, and now you want to cause trouble.

Less than 4,000 words, not perfect attendance. No more perfect attendance

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