Swallowed Star: From the Start, Slaying the Savage Rong Jun

I suggest the author revise Chapter 8, otherwise many people will be dissuaded. A time-traveler, who came here from a dead body, gives away the opportunity related to Golden Finger to anyone who is not related to him or her, even the original eldest brother. Where is the sense of identity? Seize the body, the devil from outside the territory came, too much to persuade you to retreat.

Emm, I read dozens of chapters in one go and would like to comment on it. Let's talk about the advantages first. The first advantage is that the start is attractive and the imagination is good. I really want to read the story of Hong and Thor in the original work. It would be better to start from the mutation point. I guess the author doesn't have the writing skills. Secondly, the overall writing style is brisk enough to fit the character of Thor. The disadvantage is. 1. There are many places where the logic is not self-consistent. Let's talk about time travel first. No matter how good you are as a thunder god, Luo Feng may not be able to detect it if you have little contact with it. How can brothers Hong and Thor still not understand each other after decades? Moreover, Hong and Thor have always been together from the earth to the universe. Can Thor have any adventures that he can hide from Hong? This roundness is not enough, the second is the state of mind and will. The thunder god, heaven and man are one, and they just brought it with them when they traveled through time? No matter what treasure the Yuan Embryon is, there are no secret patterns that can directly enhance the first-level level of the Lord of the Universe. A cosmic-level treasure is just ordinary in your hand. And so on. Finally, many details are poorly described, and the characterization is very thin, such as the description of Thor's family, the details of the apprenticeship of the Lord of the Eclipse Palace, Bolan's inner change, etc. I hope the author can improve it later, otherwise it will be difficult to get better results.

Your naming skills are a bit poor. Either you can't afford it and just call me Lei Dao Yi Type Two, or you can look up a dictionary and browser to name someone with a higher standard.

If the avatar technique is so awesome, why not make the original universe a clone?

I really can't understand this earth clone. The nature of the earth means that it cannot be moved and can only be left there. Apart from a small role in the early stage, it is just useless. It is really a brainless choice.

If the protagonist is killed, will the entire earth be buried with him?

. You can just fix time and add lightning, so why do you need to touch space?

The protagonist is Hong's dog, right? Essentially speaking, the protagonist is not the God of Thunder, but the extraterrestrial demon who took away the body of the God of Thunder. He treats Hong as his father, and puts his wealth and life in Hong's hands.

I wonder who doesn't need this piece of law. . . Everyone in the Origin Continent needs it. Not to mention in the original universe, there is no realm where it is not needed.

The clone of a stupid dick is annoying to look at. It's useless to make a clone of the earth.