From Kamal Taj to Hogwarts

Write a long review: ·Story background: A rare Hogwarts during the Grindelwald period. I have read "I Am Legend" before for novels of this period. The story of that novel is very good, but the setting is too different from the original work, which is not acceptable to the original work party. The overall setting of this book is relatively close to the original work, and the author should have done more complete research. In addition, the author said that he is learning English and has referred to many settings on the Pottermore official website, so the credibility is relatively high. ·Characterization: The protagonist's character should be considered relatively gentle, but sometimes a bit childish, maybe the author didn't handle it well. The overall image is still pleasing. In terms of supporting roles, the female characters seem to be more outstanding than the male characters. It's not entirely clear which one is the heroine now. . However, this book portrays the professors in a more complete way, especially Dumbledore's grasp of them quite well. ·Update speed: The author said that his updates are stable, which is indeed very stable. Two chapters a day, but it is not enough to read. It is recommended to speed up the progress... ·The story is good or bad The articles during the Grindelwald period certainly did not have such lightning points as the death and plot. The author's imagination is also big enough. The plots such as the soul leaving the body and transforming into a ghost, and the Defense Against the Dark Arts professor being the mastermind behind the scenes are all good. It can be seen that the outline is quite complete and the author's plan is quite big. I hope it won't collapse. ·In terms of writing The overall story is relatively coherent and the readability is good. But it can be seen that the writing style is a bit immature for a new author, and the author himself admits it. It doesn't really affect the overall situation, but I still hope it can be improved. It's almost like this. I can give it eight points out of ten.

From the moment of being imprisoned, the protagonist and his soul-splitting vest seem to have become two people, one stretching the hips while the other keeps showing off. I know you don't want to write an invincible novel, but a coming-of-age drama. If you want to highlight your youthfulness, it's okay to be defiant, but you should pay attention to the fact that in the eyes of readers, the deflated and crotch-stretching on one side and the pretentious and coquettish on the other side appear at the same time. This looks very awkward. I can't figure out whether the protagonist is young or just pretending to be young.

In Western fantasy works, no matter which novel or legend it is, excellent mages have a common trait: the insatiable pursuit of knowledge. This protagonist possesses the magic system and knowledge of two worlds, but it makes people feel that this knowledge has been in vain for him. To give a simple example, change the protagonist to Khadgar in Warcraft or the wizard Gandalf in The Silmarillion. In a world like Harry Potter, which can be regarded as comfortable, I believe that these two people can't wait to sleep all day long thinking about how to make these two kinds of magic go further. Where is the protagonist? A mage who came from an ascetic-like environment like Karma Taj, why are you so profitable? Does the current author not understand what the mage represents at all? A mage is the accumulation of knowledge. A mage must constantly research and surpass. He is not standing on the shoulders of his predecessors and copying their spells. The protagonist is not a modern otaku who has traveled to the past. He is an authentic Kama Taj mage. Why can't he even see the most basic curiosity and desire for knowledge in a mage? If it were Kama Taj's mage, how could the protagonist be so idle every day? With so many professors at Hogwarts, don't we have to go to the office every day? To strengthen the knowledge accumulation of Kama Taj, let's not say that you have sexy thoughts every day, but can you at least have some effect? You look really helpless and anxious. I only miss your bad flirting with girls. Don't deny it. Pretending to be a ghost and flirting with Helena is just to increase your favorability. It's really impossible to hold up the wall.

The Harry Potter-like protagonist has an inexplicable sense of justice and an inexplicable heroic style. Personally, I feel that the protagonist is not likable.

I read a book before, and the protagonist said: I don't care about pure blood or not, because in my eyes you are all the same, just like I never care about the blood of ants.

He has Karma Taj and a pure-blood family background, and he used his magic power to kill two dark wizards from birth. Withered away after arriving at Hogwarts? Not enough magic? After more than 20 years of studying magic, how many spells can you find at the bottom of the box? Why don't you study the soul if it's so powerful? I want to ask, is the protagonist zz?

Or do you want to understand what the protagonist is thinking? The current situation is like you met a murderer in school and caused havoc in the school. Your family is very rich, but if you go to find it yourself, shouldn't you use your family connections to go home and hide, and wait until things get better at school? You're not number one in the school, so why can't there be so many professors? You have to do it yourself.

Let me ask a question, why is it that the protagonist, who is obviously a seasoned veteran who has spent more than 20 years in Marvel's Kama Taj (the book also says that the protagonist likes to read), behaves so poorly in HP. The protagonist enters school at the age of eleven, even if he starts learning magic at the age of eight, it won't be like this (the protagonist's family is one of the 28 pure-blood families). Kama Taj basically knows nothing except a few spells. If there is no magic wand, you yourself mentioned in the article that there is a family-herited magic wand. And did the protagonist just wait to memorize it, or was he a student of the Ancient One, with more than 20 years of magic learning experience, an adult's thinking mode, and a good memory, and he behaved like this as soon as school started? I also need to borrow my senior's class notes, tsk. Aren't you from the 28 pure-blood family? Don't your magic-playing families have any thoughts of supporting their children? Even if the children in the past were young and ignorant, the protagonist is also ignorant? What books have you read in the past few years? I see that the only useful knowledge now is runes, which the protagonist learned in Kama Taj. Even if Marvel starts to reject your soul behind you, there won't be any in front of you, right? Do you look like a melee mage from Kama Taj? Aren't you reading randomly in Karma Taj? You don't know how to do alchemy, melee combat, and transformation. You said yourself that there are ways to increase magic power in Marvel and you don't know how to do it! As a result, the magic power is overdrawn at the beginning of the school year. How many magic powers did you use? Excluding your childhood, you have been a mage for at least 20 years. What have you been doing for so long? Just outrageous.

Creativity is great, but why do you need to be smart? The protagonist has no adult behavior at all and looks very childish. The plot is not very attractive, and the plot does not have an attractive introduction.

When I first saw Karma Taj + Hogwarts, I thought it was an excellent work. The beginning was okay, and I could at least keep reading. From the perspective of the protagonist's ghost, I couldn't stand it anymore. The more I looked back, the more speechless I became. Whether it is the description of the protagonist's mentality or tone, he does not look like a person with more than 20 years of experience, let alone a mage who knows so much about Kama Taj? The more I write, the more I feel like a 10-year-old child. And as an adult mage with no life limit and two knowledge of the magical world, he actually doesn't want to study more and study magic, but instead does things. And I've read 80% of this book, and I haven't seen any of the main plot! Why learn magic?

The whole book is quite good, the plot has ups and downs and is quite reasonable. I think the author's handling of original souls and new souls can be improved. The original soul's combat effectiveness was very high, but it was in this situation that Xiao Xiwen was beaten all the time. The logic is a bit rigid. After all, staying alive is the first priority. If it's cool, it's really cool. It's frustrating to see the original soul not play in several life-and-death battles. If you don't want the original soul to play, I suggest you point out that even if Xiwen is cold, ghost Xiwen can still survive, and use this as a back-up to separate the two Xiwen. But in the end, don't let Xiao Xiwen get beaten all the time. After all, it is written from Xiao Xiwen's perspective. This really looks unpleasant.

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Let's fight after reading the introduction The reason why Dormammu can solve the problem through negotiation is because he can sense that time is being reversed and he can sense that he is constantly going back in time. For him, this kind of backtracking is like a prison. For someone like Voldemort, it's not that I look down on him, he really has no right to be treated like this. For a creature that cannot perceive the flow of time, reversing time has no effect of imprisonment. Time will pass anyway, and he will not be aware of the feeling of other timelines.

After reading Chapter 50, there is basically no trace of Marvel spells. Throughout the Harry Potter fanfic, I can't stand it and have nothing to say, so I gave up.

I didn't see what the protagonist learned at home. In most of the novels I have read, the little wizard (protagonist) who was born in a pure-blood family has a reserve of knowledge (not weak) before going to school. It may be that the author wants the protagonist to play a role in the magic stone, but except for a few Kama Taj's magic, I don't see the protagonist's curiosity about a brand new magic system (maybe I haven't seen it yet), but it will bring me some bad reading experience. Of course, this is just my personal feeling, limited by my ability to express myself. Please forgive me if there is something wrong.

The protagonist of yours is very weak and not suitable for his role.

It feels like the soul can still move after being separated from the body, and the two of them even play a double act together, which is a bit poisonous. Is there a dual soul setting in the back?

Didn't it say at the beginning that the protagonist is a genius? Decades of practice can't compare to Voldemort, a twelve-year-old kid? The more I write, the more my hips stretch.

After reading forty or fifty chapters, I was looking forward to the collision of the protagonist's two magic systems after reading the subject matter, but now I feel like Xiao Xiwen is like a real child born and raised in the country (maybe because the secondary soul does not have so many memories? It feels like there is a lack of past life experiences and learned magic). Then I didn't study magic much (I don't know what Da Xiwen did, I feel like Da Xiwen didn't take the initiative to share memories with little Xiwen, and little Xiwen didn't get what Da Xiwen learned, I guess). I also don't like the setting of magic overdraft, but I can accept it, because my sense of Harry Potter's magic is that the wizard's magic is enough, but lacks sorting and guidance, so as long as you are energetic enough, you can use a lot of magic. However, it is okay to see whether the protagonist's magic is insufficient and he casts a dozen or dozens of cleaning spells. However, the description gives people the feeling that the protagonist's magic is very lacking. That's it for now, I just saw that the protagonist was rescued in the Forbidden Forest.

It is completely impossible to trust someone wholeheartedly, especially if you trust someone out of nowhere, or even trust without leaving any room, it is outrageous.

Happy birthday Dumbledore🎂 (Birthday in late July, every day after this month is possible, so I decided to book it on the 15th)

I think the protagonist is the kind of person who has no self-awareness and tries to be a hero. He goes up by himself every time and then ganks and is saved by others.

Haven't seen it yet, double pig's feet? The soul traveled through time and became a grandfather? When I see two souls, I dare not look at them. Now I am afraid of the kind of soul splitting, two souls, etc. The souls are not unified and have no sense of belonging. Even if the previous soul was stronger and weakened after passing through, it is more comfortable than one body with two souls. The subject matter is good and I will see what the situation is first. It makes me very conflicted.

Single heroine? No heroine? Multiple heroines? Can the author give an accurate answer?

Suddenly I found 310,000 popularity points w Damn it!

Why not stick a wand in Voldemort's nostril?

I have finished reading another book, and I feel that the ending is a bit rushed, with a lot of foreshadowing not appearing, and there are still many stories that can be written 🌹 Looking forward to more extras

Nice! This is my favorite character! Come on

Death, I'm here to negotiate again, get out of our world! The thief has a sense of imagery