Medieval Cathay: the Rise of the Dragon

Make a few suggestions and consider them as appropriate. Although the medieval warhammer theme is niche, it is actually easy to achieve results. The reasons are as follows: First, the medieval Warhammer world view is very complete, with a complete historical context from beginning to end. It is easy to edit and select materials, find entry points and breakthroughs for secondary creations without worrying about being read. Second, the magical background and rich magical elements of medieval Warhammer are very suitable for a wide range of public tastes. Especially since it saves the effort of re-building a world, it can definitely attract and retain unfamiliar readers who are not Warhammer fans. Third, fan themes will naturally have a diversion effect. Moreover, thanks to the popularity of the Warhammer Total War series of games in recent years, groups such as Warhammer fans and gamers are natural audience groups. So let's go back and analyze the favorable factors, and then let's talk about why this novel, which has good writing, good character creation and story development, can't get better grades? Firstly, although a mature worldview facilitates writing, it does not mean that there is no need to describe and expand the world. It does not mean that the setting is thrown away blindly, but that some content that Warhammer fans and game players know very well is briefly explained. This process is not only to solve puzzles for unfamiliar readers, but also an indispensable task for a full novel. A complete work must have an unfolding of the worldview, and it must not exist in the reader's mind or the so-called "self-evident". For example, the concept of the Eight Winds of Magic is difficult for most new readers to understand, because it is not a "magic network" or "magic power", but comes with a price. The second is to make choices in writing techniques. The scene switching and multi-line plot techniques are really cool, especially when several clues intersect. It is estimated that the protagonist returns to Cathay or meets Miaoying, which will definitely be very exciting. However, the purpose of multiple clues is to serve the main plot. The main clue is the story and growth of the protagonist. The author always switches jumpers at critical moments of the main plot, which will inevitably cause the separation of the main plot and seriously affect reading. I believe many readers will react to this. This is like having a problem with the editing of a movie. It always cuts to other places at critical moments. Not only is it confusing, but it is also a gamble on the stickiness and patience of online readers towards your work. Third, there are some flaws in the character creation. When your reader realizes it but the protagonist does not, the reader will predict the development of the story and watch the protagonist act stupidly with ridicule. If there is a reversal, it is a wonderful plot. If not, after enduring it once or twice, the reader will have the idea of ​​"that's it?". The protagonist that online readers want to see does not necessarily have to be wise or powerful, but they must have expectations. The masochism that hits the wall at every turn is not within the scope of this book's genre. For example, when many readers have guessed that Veronica has a problem in advance, it not only means that the method of half-covering, hinting, and setting up suspense has failed (the reason for the failure is that the character appears too many times but is delayed for too long), and it also means that it is unforgivable stupidity for the protagonist to let go or fall into the trap at this time. Of course, based on the set character background, some of the protagonist's behaviors feel disconnected. Although he does not have to be like the Astartes, he just does it (although it is reasonable, but it makes unfamiliar readers feel like a lunatic), but it is somewhat unreasonable to let the followers of Slaanesh leave from under their noses and go to Marienburg (fishing for a long time? But the protagonist's current behavior does not seem to have such wisdom and government), not to mention there are so many "confusions" that appear from time to time that still puzzle me. Fourth is the audience problem. In the case of the above problems, it is difficult for readers who are unfamiliar with the Warhammer theme to stick to it. Many "self-evident" become "confusing" to them. For Warhammer fans and game fans, the current plot is not a "renovation" of the original plot, but more original, and telling a good story is particularly important. Under the combination of the two, some issues must be paid attention to. If you don't want to make a trade-off, you have to find a good balance. This is difficult, but if you do it well, you can retain a stable readership. Finally, it is very surprising to be able to write about medieval warhammer, not to mention the perspective of Cathay, especially the writing style and other aspects of this book seem to be stable. I hope it can be written well. Come on, author! Write well and get results! (PS. The "Proof of the Sun King" next door is a relatively successful medieval warhammer work. Unfortunately, the more you go to the back, the more you let yourself go. The length is too long and the harem is so exciting that it is difficult to describe it in one sentence.)

I always feel that adding 40k elements doesn't feel right. The power level is too different, especially since Pigfoot is a veteran of the Extreme Legion.

I just guessed that it would be bad. I didn't read the book reviews, didn't listen to the advice, and insisted on writing Warhammer as an adventure story about finding relatives. I insisted on writing an Astartes with decades of experience as a brainless reckless man. I insisted on writing the psionic dragon as a half-hearted man who was tortured and left bloodless. . . There are too many people who insist on going their own way, and the result is like this. I don't have the courage and motivation to persist. This may not be the original sin of so many novels. . It's just a pity, such a good subject

Feeling okay? But let me make a suggestion first. It would be better to multiply the protagonist's service time as an Ultramarine by 50 times in his previous life. Eleven years of service is shorter than even a new recruit and a scout, let alone a think tank.

What everyone wants to see most. In fact, it is the plot of the protagonist returning to Cathay and his fellow tribesmen. You are just like traveling to the West to learn the scriptures. On the way, there are nine, nine and eighty-one difficulties arranged by the four gods of chaos. Moreover, the protagonist is set to have lived as an Astartes for decades, but the actual performance is completely inconsistent. It's like a bad check. I was jumping to watch it because I wanted to ask when the protagonist will return to Cathay and have already filled the Dragon Soul pit. Can anyone help me find out?

After getting through all of Cathay, I have to say that Zhao Ming is actually the strongest lord with more than 90 special guards. He is unparalleled. After arriving in Cathay, he established a good relationship with Zhao Ming and got a set of legendary equipment. After all, he is an alchemist master and has an average relationship with his brothers. He is easy to mess around and has no airs.

The setting story is quite interesting, but the writing technique is a bit poor. There is a section in the east and a section in the west. If the author wants the protagonist to slowly travel all the way back to Cathay, then he should not let Cathay appear too early. If you let Cathay appear early and let the protagonist grind there, this rhythm will obviously make the readers unhappy. And the weirdest thing is that from time to time you appear in a few lines about Sinian's plot. What do you want to do? Maybe you want to finally connect the two sides, but you still have to complain that this reading experience is terrible! Just because there are no competitors of the same type, we can't just settle for nothing.

My feelings after reading it are as follows Various awesome settings before the appearance (more than 400 years of service, excellent psychic), various grinding after the appearance, and a good comparison before and after, reminding me of the urban novels in the past (traveling to become an immortal emperor for hundreds of millions of years, the first thing after returning to the earth was to play basketball in middle school to win the cup), full of sense of dissonance

Author, please stop testing the waters. This book is already out of date. No one wants to read The Great Eunuch. Just accept the reality.

This book is also called "The Ultramarines traveled through Jackie Chan and discovered that dragons can't cure brainless people", hahahaha

Yesterday, Warhammer 3 Cathay Bipolar was difficult to clear. How can I put it... It's a bit hard to describe. CA has made it clear that it wants to sell the dlc. The troops are flashy and the plot of Cathay is also nonsense. If it weren't for the cultural bonus, there would be no sense of substitution. It feels like they have let themselves go since the Dark Elves and Skaven dlc of Warhammer 2, and they will do whatever it takes to sell the dlc 😓

Someone has mentioned many times that Pig's Feet was an interstellar think tank that served for hundreds of years in its previous life. The will should be as hard as iron, the actions decisive, and at the same time full of wisdom. To me, the current pig's feet are just ordinary people who traveled directly to the past and gained power, without any flavor of space warriors. This is not a criticism; it only represents my personal opinion. Overall, the novel is acceptable. I also like the Warhammer world very much, whether it is 40k or medieval. Unfortunately, there are relatively few similar novels online, and the official setting collection is obscure and boring. I hope the author can conceive the story well. This story feels very unique. A novel with unique characteristics can kill 60% of the starting works in an instant. It is not a dream to persevere and reach the popularity of similar Warhammer Gods.

Fight against Chaos, fight against Chaos. It's very well written. Don't try to pair up the women in the harem. It doesn't matter if the plot is over or not. But don't deliberately add it. People who come to watch Warhammer are 🎲 and 📖🐛

Logically, why can't the dragon fly back to Cathay and follow the caravan on foot?

From what I've read so far, I feel that the writing is okay but the story is messy and the characterization is not good. I suggest the author make the setting more concise and clear. At present, it feels like the protagonist is trying to sew a little bit of any kind of character but can't get it in, as if it's for the sake of the story. Not only does the character not feel vivid, but it feels very inconsistent. You can consider adding some supporting characters to do things that are not in line with the protagonist's personality.

Bator's foot-controlled Gray Knight master has been tortured by GW

I've tried reading eighty or ninety chapters and let me share my current views. I've never played Warhammer and I don't understand the plot. The plot of this book is relatively slow and the plot is scattered, which is very unfriendly to people who don't know Warhammer. (I found this book purely because of the Longwen label). The protagonist's journey home is full of obstacles, comparable to Journey to the West, and he is always being led by the nose. But the author's writing skills are very good! Best wishes.

Author, what do you want to do? With the protagonist like this, I really can't chase him...

Let's not talk about where the stable double updates are every day. Up to now, how many chapters have it prepared for Miaoying's appearance? Where is the plot? Does the ambassador's conversation and exchange advance the plot? The topic is so well chosen. There are obviously a lot of things that can be written about the Battle of Changyuan, the chronology, the plot, and the character stories. I have to write this tasteless and tasteless plot. I really don't understand what the author wants to express? Kawen said generously, seeing now, I always feel that I have been defrauded.

The author writes at a very slow pace. The protagonist has to stay in one place for five years once he returns home. After five years, he goes through a series of twists and turns, and even encounters the devil three times.

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