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First post, I am currently reading Chapter 5, and I have some suggestions, don't describe too many female figures or other things. It looks weird with the background you set. Your background should give people a strong military atmosphere, and this kind of female description pops up suddenly. Just like that. Both heroic and heroic are reasonable. As far as urban descriptions are concerned, it's weird.

This book was probably written by a relative who edited it.

The most disgusting thing about this book is that most women like the main character, no matter their age.

How did this... Get on the bestseller list?

When I read Chapter 14, the description of the military academy was very unsatisfactory. It even overemphasized the female body, but did not show the fortitude and valor that the military academy should have. The description of the protagonist also feels a bit like a hungry ghost who is isolated from the world.

With such a violent personality at the beginning, I ran away

I looked at the first few pictures and they were so embarrassing. They kept describing women's figures. At the beginning, I introduced how awesome the protagonist is, but in the end, they were still forced to be awkward.

Something is very wrong, the writing is inexplicable

In the quiet night, the crescent moon is crescent, and the soft moonlight brings me deep thoughts. The warm night, the stars are beating, and the twinkling stars convey my sincere blessings. On this happy night, a good night will take you into a beautiful dream.

Your book has a strong flavor of the times. Do you know what I mean? Pretending for the sake of showing off, a book from ten years ago.

There is no woman in my heart, so I draw my sword to the God of Nature

Write well and don't write too watery, like a running account.

It almost tastes bad. Also, what bothers me the most is that I feel like I don't even need to use my brain when I faint after a fight. Adults need to be steady. But to be honest, the author's writing style is okay. When writing about girls, I almost started reading. Then he forced himself to show off and I quit the state again. Hey.