Pokémon Go, Pikachu

I hope that Xiaozhi's CP: Xiaoxia, Yuto Sundae, Nazi, Kona, Xiaoyao, Lila Sirona, Mingyi, Kamizilei, Serina, Maxiu Liliie Xiaogang's CP: Xiaoxue, Xiaoji Xiaomao's CP: Touko, Ai'erElu

Master Zhi CP: Serena, Xiaoyao, Xiaoguang, Kerni

We don't want the heroine to fall in love with JB at the age of 10. The plot should be slowed down and interact more with Pokémon. Don't write jokes or anything like that. Use more paragraphs.

I'm not saying that, almost all the paragraphs in your book are followed by your own words, which makes it very difficult to read. The number of words is obvious, but you have explained the words. Let us think about it. If you ask questions, put them at the end of the chapter and say not after the paragraphs. If the characters say a few words, you will clarify it at the end of the paragraph and ask questions. The poisonous point is that you actually said that Xiaozhi is the grandson of Da Mu. It is very poisonous.

The progress is too fast, Xiaozhi is like a ruthless fighting machine

Watery and short, but not bad