Flirting the Devil

This is a transformational work by an author in an urban area. He is determined to walk in his comfort zone in order to seek progress. This is worthy of recognition. But I think the work still involves some problems that need improvement. 1. The performance of returning from time travel is unreasonable The protagonist traveled through hx and experienced more than 20 years. Once he woke up from the dream, his performance was irrational. He quickly accepted the present and did not show the feeling of being separated from another world. I wonder which ordinary person has experienced the baptism of time and can his memory heart be so strong? 2. The presentation of the world needs to be improved After reading more than ten chapters in a row, I found that the level of completion of the world presentation was only rough, and some details were not reflected yet. The country was directly used as the map from top to bottom, which led to a sense of detachment. Original fairy tale novels are different from the urban setting and Journey to the West, where fans can directly rely on readers to figure out the world view. This needs to be presented as soon as possible in conjunction with the plot, but this is a test of the author's writing skills. 3. Some places seem awkward I found that those double and triple sentences with question marks like "That's it? That's it?...?" Still rarely appear, and "That's it?" Internet nouns like "That's it?" Appear as little as possible. Although the protagonist is traveling backwards, I believe it is rarely said in reality. Moreover, such nouns are easy to jump out of the scene, which is not conducive to readers' integration into the plot and the display of world customs. The setting of indigenous wisdom is a bit abnormal. Theoretically, the response of a person who can be a national master cannot be so simple. There must be many expectations. It is difficult to look at the past from the modern perspective. They are just limited by the times. Above the court, those who can survive are human beings. There are also some redundant narrations that lower the overall quality of the book. 4. The overall writing style of the book is heavy and the reading difficulty is high. It should be reduced without affecting the plot. 5. The first three chapters of the book have no highlights and are not handled very well. 6. Cheat Finger Problem I found that when collecting emotions, I was a bit weak and didn't know the amount collected at all. Then I used it directly. I looked a little confused. How much was collected? Have no idea. You can say whatever you want, but this is a major drawback. Want to set up something that can reflect the collection number without being too dramatic, such as a progress bar? There is also whether there is an upper limit for emotion collection, and the settings need to be sorted out. 6. Do not set speaking restrictions during the new book period. Seventh, when I saw the title of the book "Inspiring the Demon", I thought of another high-quality fairy tale book "The Demon in the Heart". You can check it out. There should be something in common with it.

Handsome boy! Great writing, handsome boy.

I read DaDaXin's book carefully. The pace is not fast and the plot unfolds slowly! There are only three chapters so far! Gu Zun accidentally drove across time, and now he has a flower of his own, but its function is unknown. Is it to accept other people's souls or something else. But the flowers in my heart will be full of joy when they bloom, and then they will wither. I don't know if Gu Zunshou will be affected! In short, the concept of the author's new book is quite novel, and it will attract people to continue reading, and they will continue to read it. Come on, author!

First of all, I must praise the author here. The title and introduction of the book are really well written, especially the introduction. It has a vague and ethereal feeling like the ancient fairy tales. It is much better than the flashy introductions of many fairy tales nowadays. But success is also a brief introduction, and failure is also a brief introduction. If you just look at the title and introduction of the book, I believe many people will think that this is an antique fairy tale. They will recall the time when they read those classic fairy tales, and click in with a nostalgic attitude to take a look. Then he will be introduced in the background at the beginning and suffer the first wave of poisonous attacks... Cola City! ! ! I don't know whether the author did it accidentally or on purpose. This place name is really funny! ! ! At this time, new readers will think, okay, this little poison can be tolerated. Maybe it's just the author's prank? The plot behind may be exciting. Looking back, okay, the emotion collection system... Has directly changed from a classical article about cultivating immortality to a cool article about cultivating immortality that follows the trend, okay? (Some book lovers with weak hearts have quietly canceled the "Add to Bookshelf"). Some book friends who have gone through all kinds of ups and downs still insist that the author transitioned from entertainment literature, which is understandable. After all, the two genres are too different, and it is understandable that they cannot be converted. In the end, he died of a poisonous poison in the part where the protagonist and the Master Zhuyoshi fought with each other. The two used illusions to attack. It was very normal and very fairy. The protagonist is fine and normal, but the key is the behavior of Master Zhukoshi after the protagonist's counterattack! Those familiar words one after another... Hehe, hehe. Exited the reading page with an expressionless face, took a look at the subject matter, ah, this is a fairy tale, and looked at the label again, ah, invincible flow, decisive killing... What kind of fairy tale is this, ah, ah! ! ! You can't write fairy tales like this, right? Taking another look at the elegant introduction, the contrast is so great that I can't bear to look directly at it. Sorry, Shennong is dead, please look for Datong. (Funny) Let's get back to the subject, I don't know what the author originally thought about writing such a fairy novel. If you want to write a classic fairy tale, then write a classic fairy tale. If you want to write a funny fairy tale, then write a funny fairy tale. I wonder if the author hasn't changed from the relaxed and funny writing environment of the previous Korean entertainment book, which had too many jokes. You must not write fairy tales that are serious at one time or not at other times. That doesn't mean you can't do it, but there are really very few that can do it well. Anyway, I find it very embarrassing. I won't talk about the setting and writing style. The author's writing style is quite good, and this can be seen. The setting and world view are not too problematic. The key lies in the details. The key lies in the writing style. If you want to write in a relaxed writing style, don't look too lofty. If you want to write in a heavy writing style, don't write in such a serious way. It's really discouraging... In addition, it can be seen that the main line of this book is that the protagonist achieves the peak of immortality through this emotion collection system, so please write this main line well. Don't write too much side content, otherwise you may not be able to collect it later. Last but not least, I hope the emotional drama must be well written. The road to immortality is bitter and cold, how can we not be accompanied by a beautiful woman?

The author doesn't write much at the moment, but when I see some long articles written about them, I can't compare them. There are so many shortcomings in the book at the beginning, it's deliberate. Black Stick Heart Flower should be the golden finger of this book. Its function is still unclear. I think this book is readable and I look forward to the author's support.

There is nothing to say about the writing style, the concept is unique, the results are novel, the writing style is smooth and flowing. The more heroines the better. It's just that a hundred more is not enough.

The male protagonist was originally a native of the world of immortals. He was injured by a demon and fell into a coma for two years. During these two years, his soul traveled to the earth and spent twenty dream-like years in the world of mortals. When he returns, he is bound to make a mark in this world. His golden finger is very interesting. You can earn points by harvesting emotions. It can be said to be simple and direct. With the help of Golden Finger, the male protagonist can quickly improve his cultivation level in order to take revenge on the witch. After that, the sea will be vast and the fish will leap, the sky will be high and the bird will fly. The excitement is yet to come!

Give some ideas for the author's reference. First. I think the core of Xianxia novels to advance the plot and gain excitement is the golden finger, so it is very important whether the golden finger settings are reasonable and consistent. The golden finger of "The Devil" is an emotion collector, which weakens the enemy and strengthens the author by collecting emotions. This setting is still relatively rare, so the question is, is the collection of emotions unlimited? If all the enemies' anger and other negative emotions can be absorbed by the protagonist, does that mean the protagonist becomes invincible when he appears? So how to quantify the absorbed emotions? Are the emotions collected in different situations the same, slightly angry, particularly angry, and furious? Do more people and fewer people provide the same amount of energy to the protagonist? In short, the current setting of the cheat is still a bit rough, and it is difficult for the cheat with uncertain logic to give readers a sense of satisfaction. Second. I've read the first two books on Taika, so I'm starting to get into it again. Maybe it's because the book has just started during the transition period, and the language style seems erratic, sometimes normal and sometimes off-kilter, and the clever laughs are a bit awkward. Maybe it's because the heroine in Shura Field was well portrayed before, but after reading these ten chapters, I feel that it has not met my psychological expectations. I hope Taika can find a style suitable for this story as soon as possible, keep going.

There are two reasons for recommendation Firstly, the golden finger setting is very clear. By completing the tasks of the inhuman Lao Yinbi, you can gain abilities and various skills. Readers accept it quickly and have a clear understanding of how to become stronger by improving their strength. Secondly, the male protagonist has a clear and stable character. He gets laughs and a sense of control through various behind-the-scenes manipulations of the villain in Naruto, but he is also very kind to his own people and has a lovable character. The shortcomings are that it is a bit too long, the pirate copy ends just right, and the later routines are tired.

I am (one of) the fathers of this book! !

Can't you change the cover? If it hadn't been for my lustful mind recently, I wouldn't have clicked in. The severity of this kind of practice doesn't fit the cover, but it looks good.

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It's too kayang, so I haven't updated it recently. Please forgive me, he's about to burp.

Find fault with the author The book looks okay. I like the development of dogs. This style is in line with modern people's risk management. But there are many big problems. First of all, this routine of upgrading to fight monsters, ugh😮‍💨, and then there is the feeling of upgrading and changing maps, which is too cliche. Secondly, it's too confusing that the founders don't have realm divisions. After all, they don't have realm divisions but they have external manifestations, such as development potential, combat power, practicality, etc. I guess the author has never thought of making this kind of division. After all, it is experimental in nature, but it must be done well. This is just like our measurement units. If they are not unified, problems will arise. Finally, without a world view, I feel that I have been confused all the time. People with riddles like this usually throw themselves into the street. I must explain it clearly, even if it is incomplete.

Going to Lingnan was a bit boring at first. The plot progression did not have the same sense of expectation as before. What kind of beliefs, incense and Shintoism, are not only divorced from the market atmosphere, but also lack the sense of substitution of serious immortal cultivation.

Emotional drama should not be a life-and-death dependency relationship, but mutual understanding and mutual redemption on the premise of independent personalities. This book is very good at this, with the right shades and good control of distance, which is far better than many romances. Perhaps the author is a psychology major, and writing novels can create such mature and sober characters, making the whole book both refreshing and deep, and not conventional.

What does half-step to court mean?

This author has something. He has clearly studied psychology and Buddhism. Many of the plots have profound meanings. His writing style is also good and he can manage a variety of styles. I admire him.

Since it is a classical cultivator, don't use any outrageous methods. You should have known that some modern packaging techniques are not suitable for ancient times.

The introduction and content of this book are misleading.

Author, I don't think the title of the book highlights the content of the book, and there's something wrong with the cover, which looks like it's from a female video. It's easy to be persuaded to quit, but this book is very well written. I have been a book lover for seven or eight years. The subject matter and writing style of this book are quite novel. The title of the book is a little delayed. I think it would be more attractive to just name it as a thoroughfare.

Does the protagonist really have the character of Jian'an and the legacy of Wei and Wu? If not, don't write it in the book, pretending not to be serious. I don't know if I missed it, because I found the plot a bit boring later on, and there was no sense of tension. It seems that in the latest chapter, the protagonist is still a "pure Yang boy"?

It's been two days, do you want a eunuch?

This book is indeed very good to read at the beginning (before Chapter 40). The author's writing style is very good. He can easily write poems and rhymes. The daily popular flavor is very pure. The writing style is definitely top-notch in online writing. Let's talk about the shortcomings: 1. The plot is relatively confusing. I can never guess where the protagonist will go and do next. I went to Lingnan inexplicably. I skipped the Korean Entertainment Feng Zhongdao. I picked up a virtual world copy in the middle of the night and started exploring the virtual world. Suddenly I came to a cave world. When I reached the realm, I suddenly wanted to transform into a mortal. I failed and tried to transform into a mortal again (this is what I saw). The transition in the middle was too far-fetched. 2. Personality changes. The protagonist started out as a mortal, and he dealt with mortals every day. At that time, he was a humorous, somewhat lustful, affectionate and righteous character. He loved being a popular person and hoped for rewards every day. Starting from the journey to the virtual world, things gradually changed. He cared too much about cultivation, and at this time, his strength soared and he no longer needed to hug his thighs. The protagonist became a master of immortality and lost his previous personality. It's that feeling of being superior to all living beings. It's so boring to watch. 3. The author is addicted to Novice Village. Forget about the unflattering characters in the back, I have already entered the immortal way and still write about mortals every day. For example, I have to be in the Bronze Ranking for the King Rank. I also wrote about the spiritual style of the Sui Dynasty. The practitioners walked all over the place, but I couldn't leave. I kept writing about mortals. I got tired of writing too much. There were almost no people in this plot, and I relied on mortals to get through the plot. I am addicted to low-end games and can't help myself. It's time to leave with my strength. I force myself to become a mortal and then play low-end games. If I fail to become a mortal, I will become mortal again and continue to play low-end games. I can't stand it anymore. 4. The plot is not prioritized. The author loves to tell stories so much. The key is that many of the stories are actually unnecessary. He tells several independent short stories in a row in the cave world. The supporting characters fall in love and kill each other, which reduces the role of the protagonist. It would still work if it were a permanent supporting character. The kind of supporting character who is a walk-on character spends a lot of time writing and is not good enough. The characters are not very full and there is no plot. In general, the book is a good book, but I hope the author can sort out the plot and make it detailed and appropriate. Looking forward to the next book.

I thought it was a traditional fairy tale, but I didn't expect it to be so traditional. The first story started very well, and then the protagonist's thoughts gradually changed. He couldn't stand the fairy tale for three sentences. I couldn't stand it...

Absolutely, this chapter 81 is too outrageous. Seeing others take away a trace of Confucian luck, and there are still people to send it off, is it too outrageous for this passer-by to trick someone?

Ah? It's over😰😰😰😰

This book is all free! Because I found a lot of problems when I was about half way through the writing, I was not satisfied with it, but I didn't want TJ to be unfinished, so I decided not to put it on the shelves. I simply used this book to practice writing, so I changed a lot of styles later, which resulted in a very strange painting style. Therefore, it is recommended that you just turn to the table of contents, see the "Refined Edition" volume, and just read that part. My writing should be fine, but there is indeed something wrong with the setting of this book. But I don't want to disappoint everyone, so I came up with this refined version. The content of this article is definitely guaranteed to be of high quality! So please ignore the part in the middle where I practice writing! Xianxia, ​​I will come back again!

I just found out that it has been updated. I have forgotten everything about this book, but I remember that the author said that he met the Dema Fairy, so I am very curious whether there will be a follow-up to this matter.

The writing is good, but the author is too lazy! It took several months to update a few chapters! ! ! ! Now that I'm looking at the before and after, I'm a little bit confused and I've forgotten what I said before. I'm inexplicably acting out, ah! ! ! I'm so angry that the chapter is broken and the update is delayed! ! ! ! Don't ask me to find out who the author is! ! ! !