Lantern to Ward Off Evil Spirits

Suggestions for the author: First of all, the book is very creative, the background and the story angle (Taoism, Taoism and Immortality) are both great. It is worth reading. But the more I looked at it, the more problematic it became, and I was successfully persuaded to leave. After reading some comments and the author's own description, I disagree with your statement that there is a problem with the writing ability. There is nothing wrong with your writing, and the book you wrote is readable, and there is no such thing as a broken book. The biggest problem is that the thinking is unclear. Um, personal opinion. After reading many chapters, I found that the starting point was okay, but the more I wrote, the less clear it became, making it a bit difficult to read. I think you have an outline of the story, but it is divided into small chapters, or the specific details have no idea at all, and you just write according to the outline. Or there is no outline at all, just write it down. I hope the author can continue to read such a large amount of words like mine. It is a pity that I just read a good book and let it settle like this. Continuing to talk about the problems I feel, I will summarize the following points. 1. It's not enough to be cool. First of all, the protagonist's golden finger is not strong enough and unclear. The golden finger of Purana Bamboo is something brought by the earth, right? The description is that it was at the top of the food chain in the prehistoric times and could be devoured by the four great monkeys. The Demon Ape Cultivation Method given to him is his main combat power in the early stage. But whether this awareness or visualization diagram is not strong enough. A piece of bamboo that La Mo Niubi swallowed up the demon ape. The demon ape itself was still a primitive creature. As a result, the fight was always a tough one. It doesn't show the priority of the prehistoric world at all. The author doesn't want to be too derogatory, but he also doesn't want to belittle it too much. It's very depressing and a bit speechless. Having a golden finger is worse than not having one. Let's talk about bamboo. This bamboo does not look like a golden finger at all. It has many functions. It can provide exercises, elixirs, and can also control treasures. But it's still the same problem. During a fight, some things can be eaten, and some things can't be eaten. One moment the spirit comes out to fight, the other the body comes out to fight, the next it turns into a foot, and the next it has roots piercing everywhere. I feel like there are some prerequisites for using bamboo to fight, such as physical contact, opening a flaw, leaking the core or half-body spiritual object, etc. Since it is a golden finger, the shot should be a sure kill, but there is no such thing. The writing is too complex, and some scenes made me confused just looking at them, and I had no idea what they were describing. 2. The writing ideas are not clear. In fact, the bamboo problem mentioned above is also a classification with unclear thinking. Maybe the author feels that there is no problem with the order of his writing, but the reader does not think so. Generally speaking, it seems to me that the author has a structure. But when it comes to specific details, your thinking is very confused and not clear at all. If you want to give a treasure, you can. But a mysterious lantern, which should be the protagonist's main powerful treasure (after all, the title of the book is also a lantern), was written as an auxiliary type, and it even felt that it was not as strong as giving it a buff (military formation). As for the hatchet, there are still things it can cut endlessly. Not only did I say that it should be blessed by bamboo, but I also wrote about how it was broken and cracked several times, and what is the use of it. There are also talismans. I got a few powerful talismans, but they still have no effect. They have no effect. The protagonist's combat power, treasures, and talismans are all weak. Every time he fights, he has to rely on his own physical combat, which cannot have any miraculous effects or key effects. All means depend on Minato. There is something wrong with my thinking, boss. Or you want to write a slow-burning story, but no matter how slow-burning it is, don't be so vague. It will be extremely uncomfortable to read. The Dharma, earth and wealth of cultivation, as mentioned before, are not strong. Not to mention wealth, there is obviously a pill, but it has no effect at all, and it is difficult to even break through. 3. Blurred settings This is the most serious, and I personally feel it is also the main reason for the messy writing. It should be emphasized that this setting does not mean that there is no outline or setting, but that it is blurred, or that the setting collapses. First of all, the protagonist's personal character, let alone the Holy Mother, is not decisive enough. The book emphasizes many times that there is strength in numbers! Even if the protagonist does not develop any power, every time there is a difficulty, there are two or three kittens or even the protagonist alone. The setting of the treasure, as mentioned before, is too vague to understand. There is also the issue of realm. It is so difficult for the protagonist to break the mirror. He has always emphasized that people who are disgusted by nature will be disgusted by people. As a result, it was a difficult group to fight even though the mirror was broken. Forget it when I first started practicing Qi. Later, I didn't talk about killing enemies through leaps and bounds. In the second stage, Tongmai cannot be defeated even if it is invincible at the same level. Every time they fight, it's extremely difficult to fight a bunch of people together. A bunch of treasure plug-ins, the cultivation speed is not slow, and soon the third stage of the body washing mirror will be there. Logically speaking, I can be considered a master in the early stage of washing my body. However, I was beaten by others. Not to mention chopping melons and vegetables, but in the end I still used all my methods and narrowly won. Let's talk about means. Fighting relies entirely on hand-to-hand combat, and the magic ape is given a set of training techniques. The demon ape has a strong will and is invincible. The protagonist is very weak. When his will is clear, he can only roar a few words, but when the demon ape is used to perform, he still roars a few words. It also writes about the unyielding and tyrannical nature of the demon ape, and the protagonist who is affected by it, or a protagonist who is similar to it, does something but not like the mother-in-law. The killing was written decisively and a lot of key information was missed. After being designed again, it didn't work out at all and just kept running into the trap. I have pity on the people of the world, but there is no solution. It was so uncomfortable to watch. To summarize. The protagonist's golden finger is not strong, his character is not unique, and his brain is sometimes not working well. If the means are not outstanding, he will use all his means to fight anyone and fight to the death. If a treasure cannot be used as a trump card, a trump card, or a trump card, can it still be called a treasure? That's called a weapon. Because it is a bit embarrassing to set up a person who is disgusted with the world, forcefully increase the difficulty, and forcefully start a war. I have suppressed it for so long, but when I finally released it, I was still half-dead. This is probably the reason why I feel so uncomfortable. My emotions cannot be released. I read it for creativity, but it was so boring that I gave up the book. If the author doesn't change it at the beginning, only readers who persist until the end may continue to follow, and many people in the front will be discouraged. But I still hope the author finds the problem and it will be more exciting later.

It feels like the writing is very deliberate and abrupt, with many things not being foreshadowed and some inexplicable things coming out from time to time. The characters are also vague and lack psychological activities, will, and thoughts, and the characters are not agile. The important thing is the intention of the article. I don't know what the author wants to express. At least the article does not reveal anything that makes people feel.

I can't understand this thing. I can't understand it anymore I can't follow this book anymore

The content is very good, but I can't stand it because the protagonist is a cripple. How can a cripple do so many things? You cripple is better than a normal person. How? Want to write an otherworldly autobiography of Tieguai Li? I recognize the protagonist if you write him as blind, but this lame man is lame in both legs.

After only a few chapters, it started to attract people. Although it attracted some old perverts, most of them didn't like it.

I am alone in the town, and the night is long, and the light is bright in the palm of my hand. The moon shines with endless shadows, and demons avoid blood-clothed clothes. I am burdened with three thousand grievances, and ghosts and gods laugh at me for being crazy. A man is determined to die, so why should he be afraid?

The plot is slow to advance and the writing is weak. These shortcomings are indeed there, but the word count is not high, and no newcomer will be stupid enough to miss the word count in the new book issue. Lao Sha will try to speak less in the future. If you like it, read it, and if you don't like it, leave it. Thank you!

As for the plot in Chapter 24 where the protagonist refuses to reciprocate the gift, you think what you wrote was fine. Then there are many readers who complain about it. You probably think there is something wrong with those readers who complain. To be honest, I have been reading books for nearly 20 years. I'm in my early 30s. If the protagonist hadn't traveled through time and space, there wouldn't be any problem at all. If the young man is still a person who has endured hardships since childhood, he really has pride. There would be no problem with this plot at all. But the problem is that the protagonist has lived in two lives, and his combined age is almost 40 years old. Do you think it's okay to write like this? The protagonist is actually old enough to be the father of the supporting actress, so is it appropriate to act like this? How can this emotional intelligence be so low? It is completely inconsistent with your description of the protagonist's intelligence. Since the protagonist has no idea about this female supporting role, isn't it the right thing for a person like the protagonist who has lived two lifetimes to do? In the end, he turned around for the sake of friendship. Is this something someone who has lived two lifetimes does? How will the female supporting actor handle herself now that you've turned around? I didn't see you doing it for friendship, I only saw the protagonist living for about 40 years and then getting serious with a little sister. When you write this, you are wearing a time-travel skin and you are actually a local boy. This is what I feel when I see it. I hope the author will consider this carefully.

Female supporting character: We have been childhood sweethearts since childhood. I am doing well now and want to help you. Protagonist: I am pursuing the most beautiful and pure things in the world. I don't need your help. I am noble and proud. Author: What else can you think about besides the love between men and women? Are there no such beautiful and pure men and women? Me: Haha.

This is so witty to watch! The protagonist has a fool-like personality. Every time he encounters a monster, he forcibly subdues his wits, all thanks to his golden finger. The heroine also forcibly subdues her wits, which makes everyone look stupid.

In Chapter 146, a single protagonist comes to the rescue again, and the others are just soy sauce, if this is the case. How did those people survive to this day? It's not easy to live in a strange world. So the first thing to do is to be self-aware, right? To save someone, knowing the danger, is this the way to survive in this strange world? After hanging around here for so long, I only saw pig's feet paddling in the water. I kept saying that the resources in the department were good, but I didn't see anything or couldn't afford to change, and I was doing hard work. You don't even have any resources, so you just live on the pie? How is this different from being in the wild? There is no other organization in this world except the imperial court, which means that if you don't join, you have to target them. It doesn't matter if you want to write that woman to death, but the key is to protect her. She still has people in this weird world, not to mention how good her background is. If something happens, she still has to save her with pig's feet. So what's the use of being a teammate. Might as well go it alone.

Reminds me of the book "The Count with the Lamp" next door. The writing is so good, the world view is simple and the story structure is simple. It's a pity that the author has entered the palace...

Why don't you write less about the trivial things between men and women? Various psychological activities. Principal psychiatrist?

Just read a dozen chapters. He has a disability in his lower limbs and is gifted with supernatural powers. Author, do you think it is reasonable? There is no support point for the force, so what can 10,000 tons do? There are also weird things that cannot be killed, and you have to find the nodes of events. Why don't you practice training? Go and learn reasoning and criminal investigation! Don't you read your own writing? Make it more or less reasonable.

The plot is messy, the dialogue is weird, and the characters are bad. At first glance, I thought it was enigmatic, but upon closer inspection, it turned out to be an anticlimax.

The pacing is really too slow. After seeing more than 400 pictures, I am still convinced. There are so many ghosts and monsters. At this level of upgrade speed, I am afraid that the country will be destroyed. Moreover, the overall atmosphere of the book is depressing and the pacing is as slow as a snail. I really can't read it.

The protagonist is a green tea man who is both upright and upright.

To be honest, the author is not too relaxed. When I read Chapter 50, you actually had a hard time fighting monsters every time, waiting for the final explosion. Although the artifact is still growing, you can't resist it when you encounter one. You must know that you have a world of luck written in it, and the level is very high. Like other people's novels, Chapter 50 has begun to roll up, and it seems that you will upgrade immediately if you have some resources. Next time, you will not talk about bloody abuse, but you can retreat. The author is like eating fast food now. You can't wait for the Queen Mother to climax, otherwise the readers will run away early.

God hates you all the time. You have such a big face. God hates you. You can't walk even though your two broken legs are on the shelf. Let's chop them off.

It's so awkward. I really can't describe the protagonist's character. It's so annoying. It's not bad to say the least. It's not good to say yes. Like an emotionally unstable child.

Is this unresolved Momojiji a story about abuse of the main character or a story about invincibility? After reading a few pictures, I have no clue.

This girl's writing is disgusting to readers, right? 🙂🙂 I was so disgusted that I couldn't stand Chapter 10 of Goodbye

Chapter 23 is quite strange. The girl I played with when I was a child brought her boyfriend home and met the protagonist. Because the companion creature was related to the protagonist, in order to prevent the boyfriend from misunderstanding, I gave him a magic spell to express my gratitude and prove my innocence. But the protagonist actually refused? It also psychologically describes how family and love are not measured by these things. I am really curious if the author knows the meaning of childhood sweethearts? Even if there is no love between the two, the girl now brings her boyfriend back. As a childhood sweetheart who was once recognized by the town, what will others think of this girl? What would my boyfriend think? Let me give you the simplest example. If one day you suddenly know that your girlfriend still has a bamboo horse in your hometown, and your girlfriend still carries the bamboo horse's things with her, and this thing is your girlfriend's most precious thing, what will you think?

What kind of destructive main text? It was painful to watch. Although I don't know what the author originally wanted to write? But after the free chapter is opened, it seems that the whole process is torturing the protagonist. It belongs to the protagonist. If he has a little bit of ability and can show off a little bit, there must be an enemy more powerful than the protagonist, every time. There is also the ability of Wu Sheng Bamboo. At first I thought it was awesome and mysterious. Later, there was only two words for "awesome", but I couldn't specify it. Where is its awesomeness? It's just like Party A asking for colorful black, or asking for copywriting just based on feeling, it's quite vague. For example, 100 grams of sugar. Ordinary people can only absorb a small part of the power from it. Then people use this part of their power. Then the protagonist can directly use the bamboo to absorb the 100 grams of sugar, and then gain a little more power than a normal person, and then use it in a more clever way. This is in my mind, maybe there is a little bit of stereotyped cognitive error about the prehistoric world. I have always felt that the equation used by top bosses to convert 100 grams of sugar into energy should be E=MC^2. Rather than being like ordinary people, how much ordinary people absorb, you are slightly more than ordinary people, where is your awesomeness reflected? Where does your mystery lie? Isn't that just an amplifier?

It's cool but not cool enough, sad but not sad enough. What on earth do you want to write?

What kind of Goba novel is written? Nothing can be grasped. It's coy and awkward. It's not as cool as a cool novel. It's scary but not scary. The emotional world is in a mess. It's a useless writer!

It's worth a look, please put it on the shelves soon.

Selling dog meat for sale. I've read ten chapters and still haven't seen the light.

The new book issue has a small number of words and seems unsatisfactory, but Lao Sha still urges readers to read the latest chapter as much as possible. Thank you very much!

A rare new book, the daily guide finally recommended a good one