The Immortal Road of Ten Thousand Dharmas in the Ancient World

The introduction is pretty good, but it's a little bit off-putting. But when it comes to commenting on the content of your novel, I don't think it's good enough.

It's cause and effect, destined to be someone else's, etc. If these were true, the protagonist would not have traveled through time, because you should not have existed in the prehistoric era.

You're a lot of nonsense. How lofty and lofty it is to say that even a trace of the Three Thousand Dao can transform into a human form. How can it be said that I have the Three Thousand Dao? Even if Hongjun is the reincarnation of the demon god and a remnant soul who only cultivates one path, how can he have the courage to be much stronger than the three thousand path masters? Also, you are the first nine incarnations, you always play with a ruler in your hand, are you afraid that people will not know that you have acquired treasures? A true immortal needs to use treasures to kill a few middle-grade immortals. To kill a few dragons, he still has to worry about the dragon clan retaliating and forcing him to lose a place. The scholar Hongjun Luohou is also a Hunyuan Golden Immortal. Although the dragon, phoenix and unicorn are upgraded by luck, Luohou dares to count the three clans. Hongjun found a few accomplices and dared to confront the entire demon clan of Luohou, and in the end he was able to pick peaches. Compared to your first ten incarnations, it would be better to die early and be reborn early.

It feels like the realm of immortals can completely refine acquired treasures, which is a bit ridiculous. In most prehistoric novels, Taiyi died without refining the Chaos Bell!

I have a question. Explanatory text and words describing the pros and cons are always placed after the matter. Can they be placed before the matter? As a description of the protagonist's psychological activities, the explanation and statement of the pros and cons can be transformed into the protagonist's [selection process]. 🙂 Otherwise, when reading, I don't understand why the protagonist did what he did at that time, and explaining various reasons afterwards always feels like an afterthought and long-winded, 🤭 (My personal opinion is for reference only. The author can follow his own ideas) 😁

You should have some control over the word "water". It's really annoying to use the word "water" endlessly. When you see the word "water", you should turn it off.

I've read Chapter 20, and the protagonist's mentality has collapsed. I came to read the comments and post, and it turns out that I'm not the only one who doesn't want to read it. It's a bit poisonous. I tried the old iron poison that came later.

The protagonist is a chatterbox and is too good at word count 🙂🙂🙂

When you look at the chapter titles, you want to write them as classical, but when you look at the content, it's an encyclopedia! To expand the world view, you don't rely on the protagonist's imagination. Your method makes it appear that the protagonist is always fantasizing about himself, constantly thinking that this is the case, but in fact it is not, it can be like this, it can still be like this, that is not bad, but what will happen, what will be the result, and what will happen in the end? 😅 This kind of feeling can be passed through other perspectives I will explain it from the corner. This author knows better than me, so I won't be verbose. The prehistoric theme is already a cliché, and there is no need to explain it in such detail. I insisted on reading five chapters carefully and then skipping to read. There is no real content and plot in more than ten chapters. The above personal opinions, everyone can read and discuss them by themselves. Don't argue, you are right. Come on, author,

I want to complain about the three-minded tree of gods and demons at the beginning. In your setting, the author, this thing is the companion creature of the protagonist. The cause and effect of getting involved with Hongjun is not like the fight between Hongjun and Luo Hu that destroyed the West and made the environment where the two saints grew up in the West barren, making it difficult to seek enlightenment. This is called cause and effect, but you don't call it cause and effect.

Your Qi of the Three Thousand Laws is many times higher than the innate sacred ones (Nuwa, Sanqing, etc.). For example, Dongwanggong, the first ray of Yang Qi in the innate body, is higher than the Qi of the Three Thousand Laws or the Yang Qi? There is a saying about Nuwa that she is the first innate spirit of creation. If she can become a saint, why can't you? You even know their fate, but you can't compare to them? I don't know how many times their heels are, how powerful is Sanqing? They are the combination of Pangu Yuanshen (a small wisp) and the innate Qing Qi. Their heels directly reach the sky. They are the top innate gods. As for their understanding? Who is worse than you, a time traveler plus the Three Thousand Rules? Except for the jade plate of creation, who can compare with you? Do you still practice Taoism if your Taoist mind is unstable? I was worried about this and that from the beginning. Before the Dao of Heaven came out, the Dao was in control. Only at this time could there be cause and effect, or can cause and effect be discovered. And there is a saying: Dao is fifty, Dao is forty-nine, and one of them escapes. It means that under the law of heaven, an odd number is allowed to appear, so who should this odd number be? Or who could it be?

Hey, it feels like a novel written by the author himself.

🤫 To put it simply, it is a bit frustrating to watch, watery and long.

Indeed, the choice of words and sentences is too vernacular, too slobbery, and it is very dramatic.

Authors who write about cause and effect are all lazy, copying the prehistoric plot.

Too arrogant. Being self-centered, you really can't use your brain

It's really water, waterier than fish.

What's most annoying is that if you take a spiritual treasure, you owe the rightful owner a favor or something like that? Nothing belongs to whom in the first place? Except for companion spirit treasures. I can only say that you are destined to a spiritual treasure because of your feet or something. If someone else takes it first, your fate will be broken.

It seems that the number of words has been delayed, and some digressions have been added. The Dragon Clan incident has been delayed.

Even ancient works about cause and effect don't last long.

It's a bit too much nonsense, it just delays the plot.

Is Wanfa an appropriate name? Why don't you change your name to Wuliang?

Aren't all great magical powers transformed into Da Luo Jinxian? You are a fairy, where is your IQ? Pangu proved that the Dao is not the Dao of Heaven, and the levels of power must be clarified. What if Hunyuan Da Luo Jinxian could open up a prehistoric place that accommodates the birth of saints? It's too poisonous. It's a lot of nonsense. What else can I do? Your biggest golden finger is the original energy of the magic of the three thousand Chaos Gods. Although it is incomplete, it is much stronger than the other powers!

It can only be said that it is a novice article, and the mentality of a diaosi has not changed.

Luohu

Wangshu

Using Buddhism's cause and effect is also the root of Taoism.

This book is so beautiful, it makes me sick. Everyone must read it. It is one of the best books in history. I am so happy that I ascended to heaven because of this book.

Zhuang Zhou dreamed of butterflies, and butterflies dreamed of Zhuang Zhou. Did Zhuang Zhou dream that he became a butterfly, or did the butterfly dream that he became Zhuang Zhou? Time traveler? Did the time traveler travel to the natives of another world, or did the natives of the other world obtain a copy of the memory of the time traveler?

It's so long-winded, all kinds of inner activities, self-pleasure, abandoned