Lord of the Nation: Summon Black and White Impermanence at the Beginning

Brother, let me give you some suggestions. Do you like to hear them? 1. Write less words from strangers, it seems too watery. 2. You have to push forward the time. It cannot be more than ten chapters, and it is still a day. 3. The time interval between your tests is too short. 4. Be more generous. I am not asking you to be a saint, but for this kind of universal lord story, the more people you protect in the early stage, the greater the benefit will be to you in the later stage? So many things can be relatively cheap, which is equivalent to investment.

The heroine hopes to be a fairy, a dragon girl or something, such as Chang'e, Yang Chan, Baihua Fairy, Seven Fairies, Guanyin, Queen Mother of the West, and Sanxiao Fairy.

Thousands of races compete for hegemony. The world view is so vast. When writing, you need to be grand. There are always some races that you can't expect.

A little suggestion You can write less pornographic jokes, which may cause fatigue and affect the perception Write some harmless jokes appropriately.

No wonder the results are mediocre and the myth is actually great. Forehead. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . Speechless

I looked at a few pictures, they are all magical! There are no soldiers, so what's the point of leading people?

Not bad, the pace is quite fast, I hope it won't break down in the follow-up

Laojun rushed to summon him, he is a saint, this is too ridiculous

There are too many novels of this kind. No matter how novel something is, it will become cliched if you write too much about it.

Forget about the goddess of luck's bracelet. After all, anything that brings luck is a sacred object, so there's nothing to say about it. But your gift package that exceeds the limit is against a basically irresistible existence like the Emperor's Shadow, and then the gift package comes with four resources. Is this reasonable? Does it match the difficulty of the Imperial Level? Which of these four resources can enable you to resist the emperor?

That Shuguang was a failure. Unless he was a masochist, who would cooperate with a competitor? Haven't you heard of women?

This crappy book is okay, but the updates are too slow and I didn't feel comfortable reading it.

Already invested, please improve

By the way, these characters are all leaders, no soldiers?

Is this strength as high as God 9 or God 1?

If I keep writing like this, I don't know if I can continue to read it. It is indeed water.

What should I say, emmmmm, the author needs to find a girlfriend quickly, otherwise he will probably evolve into a Teddy. Farewell.

I think summoning a blue-eyed white dragon. Either BattleGreymon is in or Destruction summons the body. Ten tails. As for the Neptune class. Booing or something. More interesting

Why do you use [] in dialogue? It looks so uncomfortable.

I hope there will be some heavenly soldiers and generals in the future. It can't be just generals without soldiers.

I originally wrote a lot of words, but after thinking about it, I decided to delete it. A total of more than 80 brothers have read it to this point. Anyway, I regret it and slipped away.