Building an Entertainment Empire, Starting with the Stand-Up Comedy Competition

The premise is good, but the book is incredibly boring. It's the kind of book where you're clearly waiting for the protagonist to make their grand entrance and wow everyone, but instead, several or even dozens of chapters are spent describing passersby, other contestants, referees, and even the interior design. Then the protagonist appears for two chapters, the judges say "Protagonist is awesome!"

The author has wasted space. Giving several chapters to the background contestants' scores would have been better than simply glossing over them. It's not only pointless but also boring. It would have been more effective to focus on the audience's and judges' reactions when the protagonist tells jokes, adding more interaction to create atmosphere and make the jokes funnier.

Thirty to eighteen. You've only written over 20 chapters before getting to the main character? And it's incredibly boring. Dude, is this an ensemble drama? But it doesn't seem like one.

This is terrifying, the water level is like this, I've never seen anything like it before...

How could your post even make it into the daily recommendations? That's really ruthless.

♀√ You dare to speak your mind and write your thoughts. How come you're so ordinary, yet so confident when you type on the keyboard? This is the first time I've seen a male-oriented novel about washing Kinder Surprise eggs.

Quickly streamline the scenes with minor characters, speed up the pacing, and finish this part to develop other areas. Each chapter you're writing now is just an introduction; there's no sense of immersion. Keeping readers engaged will make you unable to continue writing and lead to abandoning the story.

Wow, you have 80 pages about the main character, and probably less than 20 of them. You write about other people's stand-up comedy, but have I never seen that show or what? Even if I say you don't care about innovation, then go and copy some stand-up comedy that isn't funny from this show and do a few of those for the main character.

It's too weak, and the main character has almost no presence.

Erect a monument. After reading Chapter 11, the reward selection section, I didn't want to read any further. Because he has a kind of old foolish feeling, yet the author forces him to act perfectly well!