Chainsaw Man: I Have Two Demons

I want to be Miss Makima's dog🐶

. . I couldn't stand watching the second chapter. Author, if you write a fanfic, you should write it well and don't directly copy other people's plots. So why did Dianci go there? It was very unpleasant to squeeze out all the other people's scenes. He also arranged for Hayakawa Akira to be his partner. How to describe the bond between Hayakawa Akira and Denji Pava Hayakawa Akira later? Writing about the protagonist? Don't make a group of four. The group of three is a group that Jump comics have continued for many years. Triangles are the most stable. Compared with quadrilaterals, triangles can make people feel more at ease! For example, Team 7, Master House, etc. Were all three-person teams and were undoubtedly successful! No, and I think the protagonist doesn't know anything about Chainsaw Man. Then don't talk about time travel, wouldn't it be nice to just create a character? There are also two demons of the protagonist. . It's okay to forget about the gluttony demon. I don't understand why he still breathes fire and burns zombies? Here comes another health fiend. . . Do you think this will happen? Perpetual motion machine? The md protagonist is not like Denji who is integrated with the devil. Look at the one who signed a contract with the devil in the original work and didn't pay the price. Aren't you just saying that there is no price in disguise? This style of painting is also different from Chainsaw Man! No one should be afraid of health, so he must be very weak! Right! But his ability is so abnormal. . . And the price is so low. . You said that his ability can prevent you from getting sick. I think it is quite powerful. Regeneration? It's still the same, even Denji has to drink blood, and Machima has to consume dolls. There are too many flaws. It doesn't have the style of Chainsaw Man at all. Instead, it feels like traveling through a different world to start Long Aotian's life.

The character design collides with Denci's, and part of Denci's plot is also copied to the protagonist, and then there are all kinds of outrageous secondary settings.                               What kind of devil eats devils? What does the gluttonous devil with the protagonist of this thing mean, and what does the chainsaw devil mean?                                                                                 Signing a contract with the health demon, the health demon restores the status. With this skill, you can set a demon to be no stronger than this. What is the use of the useless health demon plus a gluttony demon to form the protagonist's contract demon? Some people say that the protagonist is special, can't he sign a contract with several demons? What's special about the protagonist is that Akira Hayakawa could have signed a contract with the future demon before the fox demon was dead. There is one thing I want to complain about the most. Can the Demon Hunter's abilities be used casually? Isn't this all a price? A small part of the price inside is long-term, and most of the rest cost life or a part of the body once it appears. The price is terrifyingly high, and then you can discuss it casually inside? Not to mention that the price is a long-term price, a one-time buyout, but if you accidentally hurt something during the sparring session, it would be fatal. Then there is the price of the Gluttony Demon. The price of the Gluttony Demon should be to eat the protagonist's body, so where does the protagonist's appetite come from? After that, the protagonist can transform into Gluttony. Can he become a demon after signing a contract? Does the protagonist become gluttonous and have the resilience of a demon? But there is a ridiculous price to pay. Even if you are a second creation or have the ability to set gluttony, is this setting useless? Don't you think it's too conflicting? Also, the author's writing feels very messy, a messy batch, and more of the content is unclear. Just talk about the part about the chain demon, Gluttony eats chains, and makes exchanges with the protagonist. Then the first sentence is the narration explaining: bargaining, and the next sentence comes when the protagonist takes advantage of the loophole or something, and the middle part is like being eaten by someone. The first time I wrote a book, at least I wanted you to write it out. Now it feels like the entire book has been deleted and edited. And the first part is just copying the original work. Denji is simply replaced by the protagonist. What the character says and does remains the same, so it's not interesting.

The results were dismal, but I just wanted to write! I fell in love with it, and all my colleagues and friends at the same time put it on the shelves. I'm still insisting, eunuch cutting the book? Impossible! I haven't written out the most exciting and shocking parts of my novel, and I won't be willing to do it even if I die. Not even 2 million words, it won't be finished until death (make a vow again)

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Yysy, personally, I don't like Machima very much. My personal favorite character is Pava. I think Mitaka and Yoel are the most beautiful, followed by Lesse. Machima was too harsh and didn't poke my xp. I even felt a little happy when she died.

Eat cake?

To be honest, I like the theme of Chainsaw Man very much, but until I read Chapter 5, I felt that this novel is actually Denji, and I have a sense of déjà vu every day when it is not in the main plot! It makes me feel like I might as well go back and read the comics a few more times! This makes it hard for me to look forward to the next plot! If you get stuck on Chapter 5, you will have no motivation to read on. And isn't the protagonist a time traveler? Why does it feel like they are carved from the same mold as Denci! Was this the same unfortunate life that Denji had before coming here? If not, it would be even weirder. It feels like a child who is not yet sensible. He is instinctively obsessed with money and food, but he will not doubt the people who provide him with certain protection capabilities, and he is also dependent. Isn't this a completely naughty child?

Pursuing reading is very important for a new author. Don't keep reading books! That will kill books, please!

I watch Devilman, you watch Chainsaw Man, we are both mentally ill.

The Hedgehog has a copy of The Geoduck Demon, which is the one you're thinking of. It was so weird that I couldn't help but want to say it.

The author believes that Thirteenth Lang should be a more cheerful and sunny boy, maybe a little reckless occasionally?

Bad woman

I am quite excited to test the waters, because the author is a new writer, and this is my first exposure to these things. I would also like to thank you for your help and support. At the same time, we also welcome new partners to browse and watch in advance (thank you)

Well, if you write a fanfic, it will definitely be different from the original work. Well, it doesn't matter if you want to change the settings. As long as you don't change it too much. It doesn't matter. But it was written in a dramatic way and had no feeling at all. Where is this chainsaw man? It's not like what this person can say. Then there are a lot of words, which really made me laugh. No writing can handle this style. You can be original, but you have to write it as a fan. What you wrote must be at least comparable to the original work. Like what this character can say. Then what you write is completely unexpected. The character descriptions are also not very good. Sometimes when I write about the protagonist and Qiu, I always feel like a tomboy. Although it is just a Chainsaw Man fanfic, as long as your writing is not too bad, some people will definitely read it, but you should not call it a fanfic.

I would like to ask the author to work harder. After searching for a long time, I finally found a good book about Chainsaw Man.

Black clouds gathered over the subway platform, as if a violent storm would start in the next moment. People walked hurriedly on the road, fearing that their clothes would get wet by the coming heavy rain. The woman wearing a peaked cap stood on the subway platform, her eyes fixed on the track below, wondering what she was thinking. She slowly grabbed it from her pocket, and a small red flower dangled in her hand. This was a small gift she received next to the donation box. It seemed that she had received the same thing in the rain that day. The woman gently went up and sniffed it. This is a scent that is so light that you can hardly smell it. Recalling everything that I had experienced before, I also thought of the agreement made by that stupid boy. Maybe he would really be waiting for me there all the time. The woman looked back like a pregnant girl, but the reality was so cruel, that familiar figure did not appear on the platform. There is no fluctuation in the eyes. As a killer, he cannot let any emotions affect the mission, and it is a failed mission; nor can he have emotions because of the death of a mouse, especially if he makes a lie come true and really likes a person. ——Go and have a look. "Hey! Where are you going?" The woman was about to walk out of the platform, but a familiar voice came to her ears. She stood at the top of the stairs and looked back. The yellow-haired boy held flowers in one hand and put the other hand on the back of his head. He looked at the trash can next to the stairs with an indifferent expression, pretending to be mature and funny. It was the guy who made me upset, Denji didn't know why he appeared here. Obviously she had never revealed her escape route to him, and the last parting was just an agreement on the place to meet again. ——But this is no longer important. This troublesome boy always does something unexpected, like now. "Denci-kun, how did you know I was here, why did you come." Lese laughed. For the first time, she felt as excited as a girl in love. It was also the first time that she didn't laugh because of the task, and she smiled sincerely. "Smell! I smell your scent, don't let me say such embarrassing words! And don't we still have something to say?" Denji raised the cluster of flowers he was holding on his chest and dedicated it to the girl he loved. His face seemed to be covered with a layer of red mist. Because this boy has never lived like this, wanting to live with someone for the rest of his life and never be separated. "Really? I thought it was Denci-kun who missed my lips." "There is also such a relationship!" As expected, Denci openly admitted his feelings, causing Lesse to laugh softly. He interrupted her laughter and continued: "Do you remember what I said that day?" "Yes." "I won't change my mind, even if you refuse, let's run away together!" "Okay." A train roared past, and there were many fewer people on the platform. For some reason, Denci was the only one left in Lesse's eyes, and Denci also looked at Lesse blankly. "You agree?" "Yes." Lesse pulled up her hanging hair, then gently held Denci's hand regardless of others' opinions, and said with a blushing smile: "Let's go and spend the two of us together, forever, forever."

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Blank paper, let me ask you if you dare to break the news? Let me ask you, do you dare? Dare you!

As I continue to read, I can already feel the progress of the author and the work. The change in the writing style from green to smooth is very obvious. I have to mention that because the previous chapter is very similar to the original Chainsaw Man, it is easy for people to guess the plot direction, but in recent chapters there have been differences compared to the original Chainsaw Man, such as the fog demon and the derivative demon. This change is very important and makes people want to read more. In addition, I hope that the author can review the previous articles while maintaining the speed and quality of creation. This is to review the settings and hone basic skills such as typos and paragraph sequencing. Finally, I hope that readers who read this book review will insist on reading because I typed so many words. Keeping books is tantamount to killing the author's enthusiasm. Thank you.

Makima, cute

Pava's avatar picture, the artist has authorized it.

Come on! A Chainsaw Man novel was cut before, so this one is for you! Come on＾0＾~

I've read the first chapter, two-thirds to be exact I don't have the desire to read on. I don't understand what it means to add a time traveler identity to let the protagonist continue to be as deficient as the male protagonist in Japanese comics? Otherwise, just write a native protagonist, so you don't want to find fault so much.